The Songwriter Forum - songwriting reviews, tips and chat
Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: pompeyjazz on October 17, 2021, 07:52:26 PM
-
Hi all, we're well on our way to another album's worth of material. This Reggae track, Burning is the first one to undergo a more complete mix and to be mastered so hopefully it's album ready. Here is the completed track. Hope that you enjoy :)
Burning – Full of desire
Burning – Don't quench the fire
Long long road to freedom
Brothers sisters make your choice
Just peace love and understanding
Reach out to the world and start the fire
Bad men – Breathing fire
Hold on – To your desire
Fight for your principles
Fight for your rights
Don't let them drag you down
Not going underground
Fire rising from the ground
Times are changing, common ground
Burning – Full of desire
Burning – Don't quench the fire
Live for a better life for all of the world
Seek truth and justice – Stand by your word
Better tomorrow – It starts today
Keep up the fight – Don't stand in your way
-
Hola @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
I love this fusion of reggae with those sounds of happy times. I really liked the song, the duet works very well although I think the voices of you 2 could have a little more volume in some parts, maybe it's just a matter of equalization, otherwise very good work and good lyrics!!!
Happy to see you back here!!!!
Stay well
Mora
-
good ol' pompeyjazz with a brand new palette!
the man who will not be stopped with his intrepid delight in exploring every genre (mostly)
let's not go didgeridoos or bagpipes, plz.
lovely, hopeful song and well mixed as usual
the obvious association came up, Joe Strummer n' gang.
you've probably got the chops to pull this off live with nothing but an acoustic guitar to back you up.
Good to hear from you!
-
John, there is no doubt this is very polished, great reggae feel, the production is superb as ever. However, for me, I wanted more of a hook to sing along with.
Sorry :(
-
@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) @rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219) @PeteS (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22588)
Thanks so much guys, don't worry Rightly, no bagpipes and didgeridoos coming your way any time soon !!
An interesting point on how music can be so subjective as a couple of people said to me that they thought that this song had a strong hook yet you obviously didn't Pete. Just goes to show how we all interpret our music in different ways.
Thanks once again all :)
-
@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) Hi John, that is an interesting point. For my sins I had to drive my son, Ben, from Poole to Stansted today and we ended up discussing this very topic. He likes metal generally but played me a couple of tracks by a band called perfect circle. A supergroup apparently with members from the pixies, nine inch nails and more importantly for Ben, Tool vocalist Maynard James Keenan.
We started talking about changing time sigs in a song (one for @cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308)) but ended up linking it to hooks and making songs memorable. He played a song called Judith. He loved it, but I thought it wasn’t memorable and tbf it just passed me by. Proving the point that a hook is often in the ear of the beholder.
-
Thank you everybody 😁, enjoyed singing this one 😊, maybe the next of our live set 😇
-
Huge guitars and production! I am just not a fan of slow reggae so not my thing, but I can appreciate the quality!
-
Well that was fun! I’ve not heard a reggae track on here before. It sounded great! U sound lovely together. Great job on the production John. Do you use splice to get the musical skeleton of your song?…(forgive me if you’re playing everything..😱🤦🏼♂️😊) it’s just, I’ve just joined them and the content is crazy and sooo inspiring! Plus being able to manipulate everything with melodyne makes loops even more useful.
Anyway, great job as always and good luck with your new album. I’m only 40 mins away from you so shall have to come and watch u gig?!🤩🤩
-
John your versatility amazes me and is quite inspiring. very cool Reggae groove,
love the lead bits thrown in and the production . you both sound real good as well!
well done my friend!
-
Great track. Love the slick and spacious production, and the loping reggae groove. Like the vocals too, but I wonder whether the vocals need a bit more presence in the mix?
-
A big thank you for all of the feedback on this latest number. It really is appreciated. To answer your question Leo @LostBoy (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20481) , No, I haven't tried splice although I have looked at some videos and it looks pretty impressive. I had a quick check back on this track and found that the only samples I used were for the horns. I do use loopcloud for samples but tend to spend ages browsing through sample libraries, often not finding anything suitable. I have although written tracks where a loop or a sample was the initial inspiration and then played the sample live with maybe a slight variation so I treat samples just as another part of the songwriter toolkit. Let's face it, you could choose 20 or so samples for a song but the skill is arranging them, pitching them, constructing a song structure and then developing a melody line and finding lyrics. Fascinating stuff. Ps, I'm in France, so probably not 40 minutes away, unless of course you are travelling in your private jet ;D
-
@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) You're more daring than me. You cover a lot of different styles and you always do it so well. This is no exception. If I'm honest, I've got a bit reggae'd out over the years but I make a definite exception this. A great track. :)
-
A lovely intro. Excellent production. All the @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) trademarks are here. Underpinned by those lovely unexpected chords. This is melodic and has a very strong structure. It has never been a genre that I have been tempted to tackle but it clearly demonstrates your own influences. Many contrasts throughout. Well done to both of you.
Paul
-
Hi PJ,
Don't give up on the bagpipes just yet :D
It's A Long Way To The Top (Ac/Dc) - awesome use of the pipes.
I digress.
Love the dreamy quality of that middle section, the way the notes are sustained.
Cool outro too.
Whole song has a great, chilled out vibe.
Digger
-
I like that the vocals layers are not going that perfectly together, it makes it original and fresh.
I also like pleasent and calm melody, beautiful saxophone, excellent arrangement!
Also, the mix is well balanced. I really like it.
Maya