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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: moraamarolaloba on October 13, 2021, 12:39:15 PM
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Hola a todos!!
In this song I wanted to portray what it feels like in dark moments .... I hope I have achieved it.
The early morning bells
ring
while the rain washes theglasses
of my window
Ding dong ding dong ding dong dongx2
The street shakes
shakes
shakes
under my delirium
and the world already walks
with me in the bed
Awake
awake
Awake
I look at the clock
that in my room
serves
as decoration
And watch
the hours trapped
behind that sphere
that is exhibitor
I’ll take the 1
The 2, the 3
the 4
What do I know?
What time to choose to make my day
Today x2
Ding dong ding dong ding dong dong
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - yes, another fantastic song, very nice ideas and superb production Mora, love your ideas.
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Love the lo-fi scratchy intro @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) and then you conjure up another atmospheric gem. The Ding Dong line is a real good hook. For some reason some of the instrumental reminded me of Mike Oldfield - Maybe it's the bells reference. Another super original soundscape
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great!
lol!
lovin' it!
Bjork, then Kate Bush, spring to mind but they cast no shade on you
the instrumental part with the flute is delicious
your tracks often have their surprises
so many are controlled by the clock face
I don't think you are.
you're sort of an enigma Senora
long may you rule!
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - yes, another fantastic song, very nice ideas and superb production Mora, love your ideas.
Hola @cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308)
Thank you!!!!! I think that ideas have a life of their own and lately they roam other limbos ... It's hard for me to find them ...
Stay well
Mora
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - yes, another fantastic song, very nice ideas and superb production Mora, love your ideas.
Hola @cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308)
Thank you!!!!! I think that ideas have a life of their own and lately they roam other limbos ... It's hard for me to find them ...
Stay well
Mora
@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - look down the back of the Sofa cushions, you'll always find stuff there.
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - yes, another fantastic song, very nice ideas and superb production Mora, love your ideas.
Hola @cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308)
Thank you!!!!! I think that ideas have a life of their own and lately they roam other limbos ... It's hard for me to find them ...
Stay well
Mora
@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - look down the back of the Sofa cushions, you'll always find stuff there.
hahaha, yes, sure!!!
Where is the people?
Stay well and thank you!!!
Mora
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Love the lo-fi scratchy intro @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) and then you conjure up another atmospheric gem. The Ding Dong line is a real good hook. For some reason some of the instrumental reminded me of Mike Oldfield - Maybe it's the bells reference. Another super original soundscape
Hola @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Thank you very much!!! Happy to see you back!
Stay well
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great!
lol!
lovin' it!
Bjork, then Kate Bush, spring to mind but they cast no shade on you
the instrumental part with the flute is delicious
your tracks often have their surprises
so many are controlled by the clock face
I don't think you are.
you're sort of an enigma Senora
long may you rule!
hahaha @rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219) You are really funny!!!
Stay safe
Mora