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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: moraamarolaloba on September 20, 2021, 06:54:00 PM
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Hello everyone, I hope you are fine!
his song has given me many problems and work regarding atmospheres and rhythms and their possible combinations, in those moments I should not be very in history
Haha
But I finally got a result that I like.
I have combined my logic loops with sounds and instruments that I have created on existing synthesis with Alchemy and my keyboard and, in addition, Marcus's guitar has given him a special color so, here is this song that I think many will understand, Having passed, or strangely living moments in their lives, in which night, falling, awakens fears and other obsessions. When you are emotionally tired you want the night to bring the rest but unfortunately and for what I have lived, it is not like that, it seems that everything bad happens at night! Well, it's an exaggeration, I've lived it that way
In this tone my voice sounds more serious than normal and I like it, I do not know what you will think.
Go through here and leave your opinion.
Thanks
Mora
When night falls
fears come
and all the lights
seem few to me
to cover their shadow
to cover their shadow x2
When nght falls
memories come
When nght falls
memories come
and any sound
seems little to me
to cover their mouth
to cover their mouth
Fears
memories
they all dance together
in a steange place
with no walls
with no floor
Fears
memories
that shake hands
to torment me
to torment me
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great
one of your best
and that guitar, thrillin'
A very neat production all the way through
Well done Mora!
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great
one of your best
and that guitar, thrillin'
A very neat production all the way through
Well done Mora!
Muchas gracias! Yes, I am very happy with this song!
Stay safe
Mora
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That's wonderful! Very hypnotic and strangely addictive. I love the vocal and the whole vibe. I'm glad I listened in daylight when I'm in a happy mood - I feel like I could happily be dragged into the darkness with this sound. Well done. I enjoyed that!
Derek
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - Well this is very good, hypnotic, reminds me of Yello...Your husband really enjoyed that I think, jamming on his axe, Tell me what guitar did he play? This has a lovely Tango vibe about it.
Very nice.
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That's wonderful! Very hypnotic and strangely addictive. I love the vocal and the whole vibe. I'm glad I listened in daylight when I'm in a happy mood - I feel like I could happily be dragged into the darkness with this sound. Well done. I enjoyed that!
Derek
Qué bien! Gracias! You makes me happy!!
Mora
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Lovely Eastern feel to this @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) .. those bell-type synth sounds are great.. and of course the guitar..
Hypnotic.. love the image of the floorless/wall-less space...
Wonderful production .. I'd expect no less!
Brava!
K
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - Well this is very good, hypnotic, reminds me of Yello...Your husband really enjoyed that I think, jamming on his axe, Tell me what guitar did he play? This has a lovely Tango vibe about it.
Very nice.
Hola @cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308)
Thank you very much, the guitar is a Gibson L4 Ces a wonderful blonde
Stay safe
Mora
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - A dreamers guitar....
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Wonderful guitar that immediately makes me think of Brian Ferry recordings (at the time of 'Slave to Love'). I can immediately relate to the night time theme and how tiredness invites us to dwell on things that we would wish to forget. Great images for the video - the dancers are a great addition. Marcus is a very good guitarist. The notes that he chooses, have real purpose. Lovely rhythmic background to support another hypnotic song production.
Paul
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Hi Mora,
The song definitely captures a night, underground feel. Made me feel like I was wandering around a dimly lit city in and out of some interesting bars.
Has an infectious groove.
Tasteful guitar work.
Digger
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - I see he has a cherry 335 too, nice
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Hi Mora, lots of sophisticated layers in this, all really well meshed together. There’s a very catchy rhythmic element to it, and the ‘torment me’ section is instantly memorable. The guitar really sits with the electronic instruments very well.
Very nice. I also think this is in your Top Ten! 👍
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Wonderful guitar that immediately makes me think of Brian Ferry recordings (at the time of 'Slave to Love'). I can immediately relate to the night time theme and how tiredness invites us to dwell on things that we would wish to forget. Great images for the video - the dancers are a great addition. Marcus is a very good guitarist. The notes that he chooses, have real purpose. Lovely rhythmic background to support another hypnotic song production.
Paul
Hola Paul, muchas gracias, I think the song is very solid!!!
Stay well @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231)
Mora
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As always, you have very original and interesting songs with a mystical atmosphere.
I really love the way you work with the color transitions you use in your videos.
From 2:36 a very interesting drummer, I liked this idea with strong fast beats against the backdrop of a mesmerizing melody. It's pleasure to listen!
Maya
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Hi Mora,
The song definitely captures a night, underground feel. Made me feel like I was wandering around a dimly lit city in and out of some interesting bars.
Has an infectious groove.
Tasteful guitar work.
Digger
Hola @digger72 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=9823)
Thank you! Night opens and closes so many invisible doors ...
I love that you like the guitar.
Stay well
Mora
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - I see he has a cherry 335 too, nice
hahaha The world of guitarists ...!!!
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Hi Mora, lots of sophisticated layers in this, all really well meshed together. There’s a very catchy rhythmic element to it, and the ‘torment me’ section is instantly memorable. The guitar really sits with the electronic instruments very well.
Very nice. I also think this is in your Top Ten! 👍
Htacias @MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274)
Wow!!! Wow!!!
Thank you!
Mora
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Your voice reminds me slightly of Eartha Kitt. The composition and production reminds me of I've Seen That Face Before (Libertango) by Grace Jones, which in my opinion is an absolute classic. Do hope you'll take all this as a compliment.
I feel the song has a very infectious beat. It invites everyone to the dance floor, which is makes for a deliciously wicked contrast against the dark and predatory theme.
If you were to dance with the devil, this would be the song to do it to.
Well done.
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This is great @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) I love the "scratchy" percussion at the start and your choice of instruments. Some wonderfully creative synth sounds. This reminded me in some ways of Marianne Faithfull in her "Broken English" period. You keep coming up with something unique, challenging and engaging. The sigh of a real artist :)
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As always, you have very original and interesting songs with a mystical atmosphere.
I really love the way you work with the color transitions you use in your videos.
From 2:36 a very interesting drummer, I liked this idea with strong fast beats against the backdrop of a mesmerizing melody. It's pleasure to listen!
Maya
wow! @Maya Clars (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22624)
Thank you so much!!!! Big kisssssss for you. Stay safe.
Mora
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Very original song , like the lounge vib' & the guitar, the vocal melody is effective. I really like this one.
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Your voice reminds me slightly of Eartha Kitt. The composition and production reminds me of I've Seen That Face Before (Libertango) by Grace Jones, which in my opinion is an absolute classic. Do hope you'll take all this as a compliment.
I feel the song has a very infectious beat. It invites everyone to the dance floor, which is makes for a deliciously wicked contrast against the dark and predatory theme.
If you were to dance with the devil, this would be the song to do it to.
Well done.
wow!!!! Thank you so much for your so kind words!!! I hope you'll never need to dance with the devil!!!! ! Although I think that we all have to dance with him from time to time hahaha What a terrible life full of broken bars.
Stay well
Mora
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This is great @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) I love the "scratchy" percussion at the start and your choice of instruments. Some wonderfully creative synth sounds. This reminded me in some ways of Marianne Faithfull in her "Broken English" period. You keep coming up with something unique, challenging and engaging. The sigh of a real artist :)
Hola @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Pero, dónde estáis???
Many thanks, I love this song, not exactly the song but the way its parts are assembled.
Stay well
Mora
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Love the Rhythm & Atmosphere you created here Mora! your vocals always
sound so good, of course love the Guitar here!! Visually engaging & captivating,
Well done!!.......Ray
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Once again........love this atmosphere. Very relaxing..........great for the evening libations of choice.
Really good stuff!
-T
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Very original song , like the lounge vib' & the guitar, the vocal melody is effective. I really like this one.
Thank you very much @Melusine2 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22580) You are always so kind!!!!
Big kiss for you!!
Mora
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Love the Rhythm & Atmosphere you created here Mora! your vocals always
sound so good, of course love the Guitar here!! Visually engaging & captivating,
Well done!!.......Ray
Thank you very much!!!Yes, the guitar gives to the song something special!!!
Mora
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Once again........love this atmosphere. Very relaxing..........great for the evening libations of choice.
Really good stuff!
-T
Hola @IronKnee (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20409)
Thanks!!!! today when I was seeing this vid, I realized that whether I wanted to or not I have portrayed a scene from when I was a girl and danced at parties among the grown-ups !!!
Stay welllll!
Mora
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I think these more latin rhythms really work well for you here - the production is full of interest and the guitar is a real star.
As always, you create some fantastically original images - "dancing with no walls and no floor". And I can really hear the dancers surrounding and tormenting you... (hopefully mostly a metaphor ).
Great track (cómo no!)
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I think these more latin rhythms really work well for you here - the production is full of interest and the guitar is a real star.
As always, you create some fantastically original images - "dancing with no walls and no floor". And I can really hear the dancers surrounding and tormenting you... (hopefully mostly a metaphor ).
Great track (cómo no!)
Hola @adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124)
Thank you very much, I am very happy to see you back.
I believe that if the human being thought in images there would be no confusion, we would all speak the same language, right?
Creating is a blank page and I love to dive into its space to bring it to life.
Stay safe
Mora