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Title: Song: Feel A Dream
Post by: MilanJur on July 19, 2021, 01:23:08 PM
Hello everyone,

My name is Milan and I come from the Netherlands. I am a songwriter who writes songs with my personal stories in them. I am not a producer or singer so I just write songs, a friend of mine loves to produce and sing the songs. So I just write the songs :) Also English is not my native language so you know. And I'm new to this form, so I'm gonna review some other songs asap.

Unfortunately, this song hasn't been produced yet so I only have the lyrics for you. 'Feel A Dream' is a slow-tempo indie-pop song. The song isn't for professional use, just for me. Below is the biography of the song and the lyrics. I'd love to have feedback on the verses and chorus. Thanks in advance!




'Feel A Dream' is about the will to go away to a place where you have more peace. But do you also find more peace there? The song itself contains a personal story of a person who went abroad and found peace there. But after a series of violent events, doubts set in. Is it still worth it? That's what 'Feel A Dream' is about.

Lyrics – Feel A Dream

[Verse 1]
Been waiting since the beginning it eats me up inside
No medicine or love for, that’s what I dreamed for
Last night I dreamt that somebody loved me
No hope, no harm, just another false alarm
I’m just done with it at all

[Pre-Chorus]
I packed all my stuff, for somewhere I have never been
Living my only teenage dream

[Chorus]
Just let me fly with you
Somewhere in the sky too, feel alive
Just let me fly with you
Almost forgotten you, living my life
You say I’m a dreamer but aren’t the only

[Verse 2]
Arrived without worries, everything hidden
Friends sit with questions you don't hear me saying
Everything colored around me nothing to go back for
Still, me and my own to fight for


[Chorus]
Just let me fly with you
Somewhere in the sky too, feel alive
Just let me fly with you
Almost forgotten you, living my life
You say I’m a dreamer but aren’t the only
Just let me fly with you
Somewhere in the sky too, feel alive
Just let me fly with you
Almost forgotten you, living my life
You say I’m a dreamer  but aren’t the only

[Bridge]
One, step to all the restaurants
Two, steps back to a strangers town
Three, cups of coffee around me
Four, still nothing left for me
Five, still miss my family

[Chorus]
Just let me fly with you
Somewhere in the sky too, feel alive
Just let me fly with you
Almost forgotten you, living my life
You say I’m a dreamer  but aren’t the only, one