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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: moraamarolaloba on April 11, 2021, 12:20:01 PM
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Hello everyone, I hope you are doing well.
I'm glad to see that life goes on around here and that the songs sow the field of this forum.
Today I leave you this song in French. It is a special song for me, nothing more I can tell you. Below the video I have put the lyrics in French and then the translation into English.
I await your comments. Have a good day and take care of yourself.
La tristesse
este venue me voir
laissant ses couleurs
dans mon regard
dans mon regard
Je me promène
comme un chat
parmi les fantômes
qui couvrent les meubles
de cet aujourd’hui
qui n’est plus mien
Les tiroirs ils sont vides
les miroirs, miroirs, miroirs,
sont cachés
dans des boites en boi
Tout est là
Le passé respire
dans ces murs
et leurs papier peint
Tout est là
Tout est là
La tristesse
est venue me voir
laissant ses couleurs
dans mon regard
dans mon regard
Tandis que la pluie
avec ses murmures
rempli cet espace
avec la transparence
de ce qui n’est plus là
Tout est là
dans ce vide
Tout est là
dans ce v ide
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Sadness came to see me
leaving its colors
in my eyes
I walk around
like a cat
among the ghosts
covering the furniture
of this today
that is no longer mine
The drawers are empty
mirrors, mirrors
are hidden in wooden boxes
Everything is here
The past breathes
in these walls
and their wallpaper
Everything is here
Everything is here
Sadness
came to see me
leaving its colors
in my eyes
While the rain
with her whispers
fills this space
with transparency
of what is no longer there
Everything is here
in this void
Everything is here
In this void
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Wonderful to hear (and see) a song from you @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) . There are so many textures in your music, especially the inimitably mellifluous guitar phrasings of Marcus.
These lyrics demand serious attention.
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Beautiful mood through the song, reall puts you at ease and it washes over you in a smooth and way, sneaking it the dark themes in the lyrics.
You're voice really suits the material well, sounds ace.
Enjoyed it very much.
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Hi @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) Wow! This line alone is enough : "Sadness came to see me leaving its colors in my eyes"
What can I say? The whole track is a like a poster child for your songwriting and musical skills. The lyrics are beautiful and everything suggests and shades just enough detail to pull the listener in and then you're off to this enchanted world of the imagination.
Totally brilliant.
M
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)
Hi Mora, nice to have you back! Lovely guitar chords and paying underpinning the fab lyric and vocal performance. As ever you videos are haunting and supportive of the song. This has a really light feel to the music despite the intensity of the lyric. Excellent, as ever!
Cheers
Jamie
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amazing
well done!!
thoroughly enjoyable!
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)
Nice to hear another of your great songs Mora. I could listen to an album of this stuff and enjoy it thoroughly. Great vocal as usual. Top class. :)
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) a fantastic atmospheric track, distinctly you but with a perhaps more organic sound palette, great laid back rhythm and feel to the song. Top notch as always!👌
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Great track tinged with sadness @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) Great imagery - All of life packed away in boxes - Loved the atmospheric vibe and vocals. Another superb addition to your catalogue
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Hi @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) , I really enjoyed that touch of acoustic guitar that added a very human touch to the electronic instruments. The song had a melancholic feel to it, yet was somehow very soothing to listen to. A very lovely listen, thank you 😊
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Wonderful to hear (and see) a song from you @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) . There are so many textures in your music, especially the inimitably mellifluous guitar phrasings of Marcus.
These lyrics demand serious attention.
Hola @Unclenny (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22611)
The lyrics disguise many things, for example, the mirrors hidden in wooden boxes ... they speak of those people in which we looked at each other as children and young people who are no longer ...
Thank you for your warm comment.
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) Beautifully done ... super poetic lyrics, in both French and English ("The past breathes in these walls and their wallpaper " as just one example), moody, atmospheric backing and your distinctive evocative vocals. Nice to have you back!
Kevin
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Beautiful mood through the song, reall puts you at ease and it washes over you in a smooth and way, sneaking it the dark themes in the lyrics.
You're voice really suits the material well, sounds ace.
Enjoyed it very much.
Hola @tboswell (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20223)
I like to sing in French, Spanish sounds hard in my ears by many reasons and French has the musicality I wanted for this song. Thank you very much.
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Wonderful lyrics to accompany a fantastic musical arrangement.
Such powerful sadness is communicated in the following lyrics:
"Sadness came to see me leaving its colors in my eyes."
"I walk around like a cat among the ghosts"
I'm guessing this is an autobiographical song, an area that I know well, so I will say take care of yourself and look for your happiness. It can and does come around again when we are least expecting it to happen. May wonderful things happen in your life @moraamorolaloba.
Paul
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Hi @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) Wow! This line alone is enough : "Sadness came to see me leaving its colors in my eyes"
What can I say? The whole track is a like a poster child for your songwriting and musical skills. The lyrics are beautiful and everything suggests and shades just enough detail to pull the listener in and then you're off to this enchanted world of the imagination.
Totally brilliant.
M
Hola @montydog (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18653)
I feel me well singing in French, this language has a soft texture that makes me sing different. Thank you very much for your so nice comment.
Mora
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)
Hi Mora, nice to have you back! Lovely guitar chords and paying underpinning the fab lyric and vocal performance. As ever you videos are haunting and supportive of the song. This has a really light feel to the music despite the intensity of the lyric. Excellent, as ever!
Cheers
Jamie
Hola @Jamie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19125)
Thank you, yes, I am happy of being back. Life is so... so.
Stay safe and keep singing
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amazing
well done!!
thoroughly enjoyable!
Hola @rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219)
hahaha
Thank you very much, few words are enough!!!!
Muchas gracias for your comment. Stay well
Mora
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Very atmospheric, well produced and well performed. Very colorful and vivid lyrics. Songwriting is well balanced as well. spot on!
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)
Nice to hear another of your great songs Mora. I could listen to an album of this stuff and enjoy it thoroughly. Great vocal as usual. Top class. :)
Muchas gracias @ChrisPrice (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22723)
I real appreciate your comment
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Hi Mora
What a gem of a song this is. Brooding marimba vibe and ingenious lyrics.
Great vocals and musical backing.
You are a great talent to have on this forum ;D
Très bien!!
Paul
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Hello, atmosphérique et mélancolique, l'instrumental est dépouillé mettant en valeur les paroles. Joli mélodie du chant. Une chanson que l'on écouterait un verre à la main sur un transat en plein été indien. Bravo !
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Hi Mora
What a gem of a song this is. Brooding marimba vibe and ingenious lyrics.
Great vocals and musical backing.
You are a great talent to have on this forum ;D
Très bien!!
Paul
Hola @Paulski (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19241)
wow! I am becoming red!!!!! Muchas gracias, today the rain is knocking strong at the windows and your words give me warm.
Mora
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Hello, atmosphérique et mélancolique, l'instrumental est dépouillé mettant en valeur les paroles. Joli mélodie du chant. Une chanson que l'on écouterait un verre à la main sur un transat en plein été indien. Bravo !
Great comment from the transit....!!! Merci bien, c'erst bon de t'avoir fait voyager si agréablement!!!
Grosse bise
Mor
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) a fantastic atmospheric track, distinctly you but with a perhaps more organic sound palette, great laid back rhythm and feel to the song. Top notch as always!👌
muchas gracias @man made material (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22704) Eres muy amable.
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Very atmospheric, well produced and well performed. Very colorful and vivid lyrics. Songwriting is well balanced as well. spot on!
Hola @OleAnders (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22023)
Sorry for the delay in answering you, I have made a mess !!!!
Thanks for your comment, you are very kind.
Stay safe
Mora
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Oh - what a treat! Two songs in French from you @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) - I've not been around much so it's great to hear your music again. Such emotional vocal delivery - I can feel it!! As always an interesting arrangement - this one is brooding and matches the lyric wonderfully..
Fantastic!!
K
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@MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820)
It was a long time not reading you!!! Thanks for your so nice words. Stay safe. Une gross rise
Mora
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I ask you to excuse me for not having responded to your comments before, I realized today, I'm sorry.
I thank you very much for your visit and words, they always give encouragement! Muchas gracias
a @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
"Great track tinged with sadness @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) Great imagery - All of life packed away in boxes - Loved the atmospheric vibe and vocals. Another superb addition to your catalogue"
a @MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274)
"Hi @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) , I really enjoyed that touch of acoustic guitar that added a very human touch to the electronic instruments. The song had a melancholic feel to it, yet was somehow very soothing to listen to. A very lovely listen, thank you 😊"
a @kevysc (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19775)
"@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) Beautifully done ... super poetic lyrics, in both French and English ("The past breathes in these walls and their wallpaper " as just one example), moody, atmospheric backing and your distinctive evocative vocals. Nice to have you back!
Kevin"