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Title: Electric Shock
Post by: ChrisPrice on March 28, 2021, 02:38:51 AM
Electric Shock
Words and Music ©2021 Chris Price

Here’s my latest offering. Another loud rocker. I keep saying I must get the 12-string out for the next one and write something a bit more subtle, but I’m having fun!

https://soundcloud.com/chris-price-824458122/electric-shock

I met her at the five and dime, she was looking at lingerie
I was trying on a cowboy hat, it was as cool as it can be

Take me to a downtown bar, cos I ain’t playin’ hard to get
You know what I need, and what I want I always get
Sweet kiss n rock n roll to the finest band in town
You know where it’s at, she took my hand..
She put me on the spot
Like an electric shock
Speed up my body clock
Like an electric shock

Bombshell bolt from the blue, dressed up to the teeth
I don’t need no imagination to know what’s underneath

She tell me, give me a white knuckle ride, I’m an easy girl to please
But I’m never ever satisfied till you right down there on your knees
I wannna shake sweet my ass to loudest band in town
You know where it’s at, she took my hand..
and threw me to the floor
she said listen baby do you want some more
Put her arms around my waist, as we headed out the door
She won’t take no for an answer, I’m going to take the fall
Reeled me in hook line and sinker solid as a rock

I met her at the five and dime, she was looking at lingerie
I was trying on a cowboy hat, it was as cool as it can be

She tell me, take me to a downtown bar, cos I ain’t playin’ hard to get
You know what I need, and what I want I always get
I wannna pout my red lip to the hottest band in town
Baby you know where it’s at, she took my hand..
She put me on the spot
Like an electric shock
Speed up my body clock
Like an electric shock

She put me on the spot
short lacy frock
Got the key to her lock
solid as a rock

Like an electric shock
Speed up my body clock
Like an electric shock

On my website (Song 33) : https://5ded45f1cd13e.site123.me/
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: Unclenny on March 28, 2021, 05:32:38 PM
Love this rocker!
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: pompeyjazz on March 28, 2021, 06:21:56 PM
@ChrisPrice (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22723) Wham bam thank you mam ! - This sure rocks. Lovely tight feel great playing and vocals - I love your harmonies. I bet you needed a lie down after that  :) Excellent mate  :)
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: ChrisPrice on March 28, 2021, 06:29:42 PM
@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)  Ha ha..I must be bloody barmy at my age! Thanks for kind words..much appreciated :)
@Unclenny (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22611)  Thanks for the listen mate..done for the fun of it, glad you like it :)
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: tboswell on March 28, 2021, 08:33:07 PM
If you are having fun, keeping doing it. Especially when you are doing it so well.
I'm not the biggest heavy rock fan but I could see AC/DC tearing the roof off somewhere with a song like this.

Makes me think I should try doing some rockers, but it is so hard to get the energy in without a real live drummer. No such trouble here.
This sound live and loose and all the stuff it needs to.

Nice guitar solo too. Keeping rocking!
 
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: MonnoDB on March 28, 2021, 09:09:36 PM
As has been said - great rocker this... Great sound all round.. Love the "speed up my body clock" both lyrically and in the phrasing...

Lodged in my head this one! Nice one @ChrisPrice (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22723)

K

Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: PaulAds on March 28, 2021, 09:47:04 PM
Great chugging rhythm section on display here!

Another blast of good and fashioned rock and roll...we won't die with our slippers on!

Just one thought...could the vocal be pulled back a tiny bit or made slightly wetter to fit the "pub rock" sound? Maybe the vocal was more "studio recording" and the backing "live band playing in the corner of the room" but so what...it's great!

I loved it :)
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: sweeny500 on March 28, 2021, 10:27:20 PM
@ChrisPrice (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22723) Wow What a rocker! You could sell that as an ear wax remover. Loved it and the cheeky lyrics ;) Keep having fun.
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: Jamie on March 29, 2021, 01:57:02 PM
@ChrisPrice (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22723)

Hi Chris, brilliant rendition of the genre, someone else mentioned AC/DC, I get that vibe too. Brilliant vocals all round, no issues for me this is brilliant (even though I'm not really an AC/DC type of listener ;))

Excellent Chris!

Cheers

jamie
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: kevysc on March 30, 2021, 12:01:50 AM
@ChrisPrice (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22723)  Wow, that woke me up! Great rocker that would be fantastic to hear live ( I seem to be saying that a lot recently, I wonder why?). Agree some shades of AC/DC, but with a rawer edge on this one: if this doesn't get them dancing, nothing will!

Kevin
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: ChrisPrice on March 30, 2021, 12:24:14 AM
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Guys, thanks so much for your encouraging words. Glad you enjoyed it. I don't mind the AC/DC comparison. I can't say that I had them in mind when I wrote and recorded this, but no-one does good-time rock n roll better than them so I'm happy! I'd love to play this song live though I'm not sure my that my old bones would stand a whole night at this pace! Let's see what happens post-covid. :)
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: Jambrains on March 30, 2021, 09:27:15 PM
Not sure about the AC/DC references mentioned, I get more of mid/late 70's vibes from this. No matter what, great stuff!
Spot on lead vox and the harmonies are stellar. A solid rocker in all aspects, my only nit would be the drums, a bit "roomy" and distant in the mix but on the other hand it kind of fits the overall vibe of the track. Extra bonus points for the guitars, me like! Great production, great everything actually!
Well done!
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: Veance on March 31, 2021, 06:08:39 PM
Great song, good melody. Good singing. but I have the feeling that something (dont know what)  needs to be done in production. I don't know ...the guitars maybe? Bit far off? Someone else?
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: man made material on April 02, 2021, 01:21:24 PM
@ChrisPrice (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22723)  yeah!!🤘 a good, honest rock track! I think the production is great, I really like the harmonies you’ve got in there - adds an almost country twang at times... southern American rock (Georgia Satellites?!)... nice one!👍
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: ChrisPrice on April 02, 2021, 03:55:43 PM
@man made material (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22704) Thanks for kind words. Georgia Satellites?..hadn't though of that comparison but closer than AC/DC imo
@Veance (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22148) Guitars 'a bit far off'? Sorry I don't hear that. I think they're as in yer face as they can possibly be(!), but thanks for the listen
@Jambrains (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19875) Thanks for the listen and kind words. Yeah, it is a 70's vibe, or it was meant to be. The drums are intentionally 'roomy' which works for me

I appreciate the comments guys. Everyone has their ideas about mixing..most seem to like this one as it is - one or two would change things. I'm happy with it so time to move on to the next one I think. :)
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: Wicked Deeds on April 02, 2021, 05:30:03 PM
Hey Chris,

Hope you are well my friend.

This is a great recording for  super song.  The lyrics stand up so well on their own before I even heard the song.  They are so concise and that is exactly the way I like them to be.  On eta be proud of, though I'm sure you have man, many more.  Quality writing and performance.

Paul
Title: Re: Electric Shock
Post by: moraamarolaloba on April 13, 2021, 12:38:27 PM
Hola @ChrisPrice (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22723)

Rock, rock, rock, I enjoyed your track, it makes feet dancing!!! Nice lyrics, full of descriptive scenes. rock rock rock