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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: pompeyjazz on February 24, 2021, 07:58:58 PM
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Hi All, I was looking back over the last year and discovered that I had enough songs to release a solo album, so I've just managed to get it released on Bandcamp. This song is the title track to the album. It's a straight up, no holds barred rocker.
Hope you enjoy the listen :)
Multimedia distribution
Looking for a new solution
Click and fire for execution
Working on a back room revolution
World wide web for distribution
Try to sell your own solution
Click and fire for execution
Working on a back room revolution
Well all you need
Is to sow the seed
And cause controversy
On which they feed
A subtle sell
It's going well
And where it all is leading
Will you ever tell ?
Multimedia distribution
Looking for a new solution
Click and fire for execution
Working on a back room revolution
World wide web for distribution
Try to sell your own solution
Click and fire for execution
Working on a back room revolution
A virtual storm
You tried to warn
And tried to put the lid on before they start to swarm
Too much in haste
Your great mistake
Ain't no controlling now
You left it far too late
Everybody's buying your solution
Working on your back room revolution
Multimedia distribution
Looking for a new solution
Click and fire for execution
Working on a back room revolution
World wide web for distribution
Try to sell your own solution
Click and fire for execution
Working on a back room revolution
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269),
Is that @PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) playing bass? Great guitars throughout a lovely crisp production. This one has so much attitude and your vocals are right on form, embracing an immediately catchy melody. What more can I say other than this is a rocking number that grabs our attention from the start and doesn't let go!
Paul
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Hey Cheers @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) Actually on this one, it's just me :)
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Angry young man song.
Paul Weller would have crinkled a new suit to have written this!
I love the breakdown
it sounds live!!
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That’s one snarly riff John, in yer face or what :D Full of energy and bile, I used to be able to throw this much passion into a song once, but no more, ha ha, so good on ya.
Plus you used all known rhymes to ‘revolution’ too. :)
Yeah that bass is very meaty. One nil to the punk poet of Portsmouth. ;)
Good luck with the album too. What with The Auditors, that’s two albums in a week! Prolific or what, wow!
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Straight up rocker alright! Fab vocal delivery- energy, attitude in abundance...
Love those rhymes- nicely done, sir!
All in all designed to hit repeat. Great work! Again!
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Hey Pompy.............this is really good. Something different. Very original. Great sound......love the singing. Music is great! Great hook, as well.
Good stuff,
-Tom
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) Great energy and attitude and what a vocal! Just a few too many "tion" rhymes for me but that's nit picking. Great musicianship and production - it storms out of the speakers and doesn't let up. Good luck with the album BTW.
M
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) fuuuull throttle!!! Really like the way you pushed your vocal in this👍 And you deliver some clever lyrics with a bit of bite! It’s all good but There’s one little bit that’s particularly well done - the overlap of the vocal from ‘ back room revolution’ to ‘World Wide Web’ and the way you pan the vocal from the right into centre during that overlap is a really neat and well executed trick!👌
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Fucking great!
When it was over, I felt like Alan Minter after Marvin Hagler had finished with him.
I wish I could have been able to take even 0.02 % of the credit for this...but of course I can’t 😀 it’s a 100% straight up, no nonsense, low calorie, high fibre @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) winner all the way!
Some people are on the pitch...they think it’s all over...BANG...it is now!
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Fucking great!
When it was over, I felt like Alan Minter after Marvin Hagler had finished with him.
I wish I could have been able to take even 0.02 % of the credit for this...but of course I can’t 😀 it’s a 100% straight up, no nonsense, low calorie, high fibre @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) winner all the way!
Great to have you back Paul, no one writes reviews like you. Keep it up! 8)
Some people are on the pitch...they think it’s all over...BANG...it is now!
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Brilliant John, I don’t know how you manage to cover so many genres in your work but you’ve definitely nailed the Rock one.
Absolutely loved it!
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Awesome rocker John, dripping with hyper energy and attitude. Great vocal delivery and the production is top class, as always 8) Fab bass playing.
Not sure if I'm totally getting the message here, but enough that it captivated me :o Good luck with the new album :-*
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Really good rocking tune, some great energy in the backing track and an "in your face" vocal. I would agree with montydog that it could do with slightly fewer "tion" rhymes, but that's not a big issue.
(Also, this played INCREDIBLY loud, so much I had to turn it down: not sure that is an issue, but did you record it particularly loud or was it just me?)
Best of luck with the album,
Kevin
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Wow Thumpin stuff @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269). I dare not criticise this or you'll have me for dinner.
Seriously though, great rockin' material with attitude. The first thing I noticed was your fantastic voice. It really demands your attention. Loved it.
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Hits us straight out of the gate and doesn't let up. Strong vocals as ever! Maybe some cymbals a tad too crashy? Never mind, super fun and infectious. Nice one.
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Hi John, love the growly guitars and 'in your face' chords. Plenty of energy and a great vibe throughout. Especially liked the breakdown.Crisp production too!
Nice one! 8)
Cheers
Jamie
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A big thank you to all who have taken the time to listen and comment on this latest number :)
@Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) - Hey thanks Paul - Yes, I wanted it to be non-stop chaos, so glad that it worked for you
@rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219) - Not so young these days ;D
@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274) Cheers Michael - I think I exhausted the "ion" rhymes for sure
@MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820) Thanks so much Karen - Glad that it rocked for you
@IronKnee (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20409) Thanks for your fab feedback Tom
@montydog (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18653) Thanks Alan, yep, lots of "ion" rhymes and I did think about that but I decided to go with it and ram it down yer throat ;D
@man made material (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22704) Cheers - Much appreciated - Glad that you noticed the panning trick
@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) - Ahhh ! I remember the pictures of poor Alan Minter drenched in sweat and blood - Bang !!
@PeteS (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22588) - Cheers Pete - I like to do a full throttle rocker now and again to clear the pipes
@crystalsuzy (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18947) Thanks Suzy - I guess it's about how that a lot of plots and plans can be formulated on a computer at home these days
@kevysc (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19775) - Cheers Kev - Loud ? I'll check.... Gee, it is. It's a limiter
@sweeny500 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22758) Much appreciated - I did debate whether it was a bit relentless, which it is, but decided to go with it
@adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124) Thanks Adam - Yep, maybe the cymbals are it bit too crashy - I had big problems trying to control the drummer.
@Jamie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19125) - Thanks man - Subtle it ain't - Glad that you enjoyed the listen
Thanks all :)
John