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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Muso1070 on January 14, 2021, 04:55:30 PM
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Hello another new live song for anyone who enjoys a ballad and with a folky Americana vibe.
Lyrics below :-)
I was born by the sea
I got an old soul in me
I find my own way
Through the scares of yesterday
Now I've much still to learn
But how many times must I get burned
To find my one true love
You come to me when I sleep
I saw your face in a vivid dream
Maybe someday we might still meet
You look a lot like her
You even sound like her too
But I've been living with these doubts
I gotta figure all this stuff out
And until that day should arise
I'll be wishing on a hopeful sign
To find my one true love
You come to me when I sleep
I saw your face in a vivid dream
Maybe someday we might still meet
I'm waiting here for you
I've been waiting all this time…
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Hola @Muso1070 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18999)
It's a very romantic song, very enjoyable listening. Love the atmosphere and the lyrics.
Mora
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Hey thank you I write to many love songs I know ;-)))
Hola @Muso1070 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18999)
It's a very romantic song, very enjoyable listening. Love the atmosphere and the lyrics.
Mora
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sweet romantic song well done!!
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What a lovely love-song! Nice little acoustic solo you had there in the 2nd chorus :)
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Good stuff! A very warm and intimate sound from both vox and guitars. I would have liked a little more variation and dynamics e.g. in the second half you have that "guitar solo", I think you should do more of that, maybe not solo playing but at least having the guitars playing different patterns or in different positions or something to separate them. Maybe just during the chorus(es) to make it take of a little more? Just my personal opinion of course. Well done!
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This is right up my street, understated but full of melody and passion, nice work and great vocals.
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Hi, nice guitar tones and vocals ,very nicely done. I agree completely with @Jambrains (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19875) about mixing it up little and getting more variation and making more use of the two guitars.
Nice one!
Cheers
Jamie
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sweet romantic song well done!!
Thanks Rightly :-)
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What a lovely love-song! Nice little acoustic solo you had there in the 2nd chorus :)
Hey thanks, almost didn't add the solo in thinking it was a bit to much over vocal but happy I did now I think it seems to work ok. Cheers
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Good stuff! A very warm and intimate sound from both vox and guitars. I would have liked a little more variation and dynamics e.g. in the second half you have that "guitar solo", I think you should do more of that, maybe not solo playing but at least having the guitars playing different patterns or in different positions or something to separate them. Maybe just during the chorus(es) to make it take of a little more? Just my personal opinion of course. Well done!
Thanks Jambrains, totally understand where your coming from I do agree too yes.
I'm still working through some ideas for a studio version thanks.
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This is right up my street, understated but full of melody and passion, nice work and great vocals.
Cheers bud appreciate that :-)
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Hi, nice guitar tones and vocals ,very nicely done. I agree completely with @Jambrains (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19875) about mixing it up little and getting more variation and making more use of the two guitars.
Nice one!
Cheers
Jamie
Thanks Jamie indeed still sort of working through some ideas for the studio version.
Cheers man
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Hi,
I like your voice and your emotionally charged interpretation. The melody is very melancholic and beautiful and well served by your voice, again.., a velvet grating voice ;)
Well done !
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Lovely acoustic picked intro. Fine singing too. Love this kind of writung that immediately transpoets the listener, inviting his/her imagination to roam freely. Your song benefits tremendoysly from the limited instrument aporoach.
Really enjoyable.
Paul
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Fabulous vocals on this one. Really suits the song and the verse melody in particular is a lovely thing. I thought the chorus was nice but less grabbing, so maybe there's a bit more you could do there - maybe sing the first line with fewer embellishments and change up the backing, to give it a little more impact.
But it's highly listenable you create a really gentle and warm atmosphere.
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Nice, I really like this one. I agree with what others have said, when you varied the second guitar it was much more interesting.
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@Muso1070 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18999) you have a great voice, full of emotion, that this was done in one take speaks volumes of your talents! Beautiful melodic song too👌
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Hi,
I like your voice and your emotionally charged interpretation. The melody is very melancholic and beautiful and well served by your voice, again.., a velvet grating voice ;)
Well done !
Hey thank you very much nice to hear you enjoyed thanks :-)
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Lovely acoustic picked intro. Fine singing too. Love this kind of writung that immediately transpoets the listener, inviting his/her imagination to roam freely. Your song benefits tremendoysly from the limited instrument aporoach.
Really enjoyable.
Paul
Hello Paul, cheers for that I am totally a fan of less is more your so right.
The music or magic is in-between the notes as they say :-) Thanks
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Fabulous vocals on this one. Really suits the song and the verse melody in particular is a lovely thing. I thought the chorus was nice but less grabbing, so maybe there's a bit more you could do there - maybe sing the first line with fewer embellishments and change up the backing, to give it a little more impact.
But it's highly listenable you create a really gentle and warm atmosphere.
Hello there Adam
Love to hear feedback thanks I always take stuff on board.
I'm still experimenting before recording a studio version of this so thanks for your thoughts much appreciated.
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Nice, I really like this one. I agree with what others have said, when you varied the second guitar it was much more interesting.
Thanks glad you enjoyed. I know the 2 guitars are a little similar but I that was the effect I was going for and to pan them out left and right so they kinda had to be tightly together in a way. Still plenty of other ideas for the studio version thou ;-)
Thanks
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@Muso1070 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18999) you have a great voice, full of emotion, that this was done in one take speaks volumes of your talents! Beautiful melodic song too👌
Hey thank you :-)
I do think a live performance can have that extra bit of emotion missing from studio versions. With that said I did do a bunch of takes to get the one good one and practiced the hell out of the song for like a week lol
The only way to be happy with it.
Cheers