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Title: The pillow of Fear
Post by: moraamarolaloba on November 16, 2020, 12:17:44 AM
I do not know if you the same thing happens to you but I am latest content concerned not only by the pandemic but for something more ... I avoid the news because they are truths half but still perceive within me things I do not like to feel me, so I I make this song, an escape valve for the pressure of my mind.
Hope you like it, it's a very orchestrated base, I had a hard time making it even could certainly introduce some dissonant harmonic instrument but whose result I liked, so here's this strange dream in which I live.

As for the video I have tried to give it a comic touch to soften the story ... I hope I have succeeded, at least I have flown hahahaha

Cuidaros mucho

Mora




 I dreamed
that my feet were chasing
each other

running
in the dark
among the cracks of a day x2

I dreamed
that I was flying
over a field 
of white faces

that shone
under the light
of a sad moon  x2

I dreamed
that I was walking
no walking
it was the Earth
that moved
under my feet

How many flags
fighting
against the storms they did  x2

I dreamed
 that a street emerged
 between night and Life

full of people hidden
in the shadows
of their wounds  x2

I dreamed
that a drum sound
shaking the corners

puting out the streetlights
with the fury of a hydra x2

and that it was me
the one that ran
between tears and fire x2

When I dream
on the pillow
of my fears
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: Royston on November 16, 2020, 10:56:38 PM
The Title of this song caught my eye so I had a listen and liked it
it's weird but wonderful and the video compliments the song nice work.

R
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: pompeyjazz on November 17, 2020, 12:11:19 AM
Always unique and intriguing @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) I love the synth choices that you have used on this number and the unusual structure of the song. Once again it's very atmospheric, dramatic, almost menacing. You are producing some top quality original material.
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: Unclenny on November 17, 2020, 07:13:13 PM
This is an excellent escape valve @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) . As usual, you have produced a work of art here, both musically and visually.

Be well, my friend.
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: moraamarolaloba on November 18, 2020, 11:08:46 PM

@Royston (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19446)
"The Title of this song caught my eye so I had a listen and liked it
it's weird but wonderful and the video compliments the song nice work."


Yes, I agree, the title appears only once in the song, and it is right at the end but it is the trigger for the story.
Thank you for your visit and nice to meet you!!!
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
"Always unique and intriguing @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) I love the synth choices that you have used on this number and the unusual structure of the song. Once again it's very atmospheric, dramatic, almost menacing. You are producing some top quality original material."

Thank you, my song does not portray a threat, it describes a reality ...
This phrase on my lyrics
"how many flags fighting against the storms they did ..." describes many things!!

Stay safe

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@Unclenny (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22611)
"This is an excellent escape valve @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) . As usual, you have produced a work of art here, both musically and visually.

Be well, my friend
."
Yes, I am an expert in night flights, I usually visit the same holy meadow where I eat grass to regain strength and I continue to fly over a world protected under a cellophane paper that no one has opened!!
Muchas gracias por verme y comentar.
Cuídate mucho amigo mío.

Mora


Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: Wicked Deeds on November 19, 2020, 01:13:29 AM
@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233),

Who could fail to be moved by such a wonderful soundscape?  The music invites us to conjure a million dream-like images. Lyrically, the images of faces illuminated by a "sad moon" USC for me superb!

Well done, I hope to hear more soon.

Paul
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: MonnoDB on November 19, 2020, 05:40:05 AM
Such amazing imagery @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) .. love the thought of feet chasing each other.. This is all about the mood you create - it's very vivid and as always completely original and completely you! I enjoyed it immensely!

Stay safe, Mora, and keep channelling this crazy world into such beautiful creations.

K
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: man made material on November 20, 2020, 08:39:25 PM
I love the beautiful atmospheric soundscapes with a skittering beat in the intro, I was expecting some high wispy vocals to ease in, but instead is something far more sinister and menacing, it’s unexpected, but absolutely works! It’s original and absorbing!👌
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: moraamarolaloba on November 21, 2020, 03:12:08 AM
@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233),

Who could fail to be moved by such a wonderful soundscape?  The music invites us to conjure a million dream-like images. Lyrically, the images of faces illuminated by a "sad moon" USC for me superb!

Well done, I hope to hear more soon.

Paul

Thank @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) 
you! Yes, things go bad since long time ago so dreams can become something terrible... This song I find it is a difficult to listen to one, the construction is not usual
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: montydog on November 21, 2020, 07:35:37 PM
@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)

I'm with @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) who has expressed my thoughts perfectly and got there before me! You know that I am one of your fans and this song reminds me why.

M
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: moraamarolaloba on November 23, 2020, 06:31:29 PM
Hola @montydog (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18653)
Thank you very much for your nice comment, this song is strange, even for me, talking about the fears that reality arouses is normal for many, I usually decorate it ... but not here.

Stay safe!!!

Mora

Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: IronKnee on November 24, 2020, 10:14:39 AM
Just a compelling listen. Very well crafted, and very unique. I enjoyed the piece very much.
Love it!!
Great work, M............
                                                8)-T
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: Grubstar on November 24, 2020, 09:07:13 PM
Hi @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)

As usual a fabulous electronic soundscape and surrealist video on which you inpart your poetic lyrics. This song uses far more dissonance to reflect the strangeness and fear that is  part of our every day lives which is really now one of state subjugation and control.However one way or another we will get out freedom back.

Love your work Mora, please keep safe and keep strong.
 
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: moraamarolaloba on November 25, 2020, 06:22:45 PM
Just a compelling listen. Very well crafted, and very unique. I enjoyed the piece very much.
Love it!!
Great work, M............
                                                8)-T

Thank you @IronKnee (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20409)!! Stay safe.

Mora
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: moraamarolaloba on November 25, 2020, 06:24:18 PM
Hi @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)

As usual a fabulous electronic soundscape and surrealist video on which you inpart your poetic lyrics. This song uses far more dissonance to reflect the strangeness and fear that is  part of our every day lives which is really now one of state subjugation and control.However one way or another we will get out freedom back.

Love your work Mora, please keep safe and keep strong.
 

Thank you for your thoughtful and detailed comment, I really appreciate all the comments you put on my songs, I appreciate it.
Stay safe. @Grubstar (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22532)

Mora
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: kafla on November 26, 2020, 02:48:55 PM
Another belter!

loving your work @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) and what you bring to the forum...

You have created your own universe through your music :)

Andy
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: moraamarolaloba on November 26, 2020, 07:10:30 PM
Another belter!

loving your work @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) and what you bring to the forum...

You have created your own universe through your music :)

Andy


Hola Andy
your comments always encourage me, I appreciate it very much.
Stay safe @kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905)

Mora

Hola @kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905)
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: MichaelA on November 28, 2020, 04:37:16 AM
The song captures the mood of our times, and that is not an easy thing to do. Well done @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) for writing music that captures this uneasy tension, yet has traces of beauty in it too.

Another edgy yet beautiful soundscape created by you! 👍
Title: Re: The pillow of Fear
Post by: moraamarolaloba on November 28, 2020, 06:27:41 PM
The song captures the mood of our times, and that is not an easy thing to do. Well done @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) for writing music that captures this uneasy tension, yet has traces of beauty in it too.

Another edgy yet beautiful soundscape created by you! 👍

Muchas gracias @MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274)
Normally it is difficult to describe what one feels and more in my case because I am not English speaking ... But I think I have managed to express a concern that goes beyond the pandemic ... A dangerous atmosphere ...

Have a good day!!!!!

Mora