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Title: what's wrong with you?
Post by: rightly on October 16, 2020, 07:02:28 PM
Recently wrote this song
It's a bluesy type groove
Really enjoyed up til now
A bit too short

It's cheeky

what's wrong with you?


you're so very bad!
how did you come to be this way?
after curling my whiskers
y' call me up t' tell me that you're gay
  what's wrong with you, Aine?
you were supposed to do exactly what I say
what's wrong with you, honey?
show me what listening looks like, okay

n' I'm just too sad
right here with you so very far away
geographically retarded
I just might break the laws of gravity
put your panties back on
y' know it's cold out, this time o' year
what's wrong with you, Aine?
nothin' at all, not as far as I can see, my dear

I've got a healthy appetite
 don't say I didn't warn you

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Title: Re: what's wrong with you?
Post by: hardtwistmusic on October 24, 2020, 06:33:16 AM
Not at all what you'd expect.  This leaves just the right amount of unanswered questions.  1.  Is the 'other' a male or female?   2.  Is she (assuming it's a female) really gay, or just getting out of the relationship?  3.  To my American ear, I've got no idea if Aine is a male or female name.  Or a nickname, or slang. 

The questions contribute to the interest.  And this is pretty cryptic anyway.  I like it.