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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Kafla on September 19, 2020, 01:43:58 PM
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https://soundcloud.com/andrewcruse/thats-when-i-knew
Thought I would slip one more in before the Binladeda Challenge ;)
If I was a famous artist this is the song I would enter the stage to...strobe lights on, naked and lasers coming out of my nipples 😜😋
As usual the same sonic malfunctions appear but for me it’s all about the lasers 😀👍🏻
That’s when I knew
Caught you looking down , at the stars above
Circling the planets
That’s when I knew I’d always circle you
Caught you entertaining , the ambassador of the United Nations
That’s when I knew your’e my salvation
You can read and read , watch tv
Challenge every point of view
Over-analyse
You can even try to change what you know is true
I’ll be waiting here for you....
Caught you looking sad
With those stunning eyes
How can you be so sad ?
That’s when I knew I’d always protect you
That’s when I knew happiness suits you
Forever it’s true , happiness for me and you 🤩
That’s when I knew...
https://soundcloud.com/andrewcruse/thats-when-i-knew
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Hi,
I wish I could write love songs like this. Every time I try, I come up against all the cliches which you have cleverly avoided with this song. Just when I thought that there couldn't be any new way to express these feelings, you come up with this. Very thoughtful, pretty song adorned with your wondrous voice. I liked the arrangement which managed to enrich the writing without drawing attention away from it. Another lovely song.
M
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@kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905)
I love the line 'I'd always circle you.' Both your production and songwriting go from strength to strength. I'm impressed, you're flying!
I can tell that you're in such a wonderful space with your beautiful lady. My congratulations sir!
Paul
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Good song, man.................great voice, too.
I really enjoyed this.......
Kudos,
-Tom
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Fabulous big sound Andy @Kafla and great powerful vocals. I really like the lyrics and admire the way that they are not obvious. Love the drone guitar that gives it an almost Celtic feel and some lovely dirty guitar at times. Also great use of light and shade. Top quality track :)
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That's a great song Andy. The combination of piano and guitar layers works really well and the Chorus fits perfectly.
Not sure I want to see you play it live though ;D ;D
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Big confident production here - reminded me a bit of something the Waterboys would do.
Lovely rhymes and images in the verses.
For me probably a bit too short if anything - I could handle some more repetitions of the last "that's when I knew" section.
Lovely song.
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Hola @kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905)
The drum sounds great and the voice is very defined, built into the mix, it's a great song.
I love this line
"That’s when I knew happiness suits you"
Good work!!
Cuídate
Mora
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Oh this is lovely @kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905) - a gorgeous song.. lyrics are great - so hard to write a love song - this sounds sincere and heartfelt without being too sugary (not that that's necessarily a bad thing just a preference)
The whole thing is polished, beautifully played and sung (great voice!!) and lovely melodies - standouts for me are the "That's when I knew..." lines - that melody is fab.. Whole thing is just fantastic... great ending too.. Wow!
Karen
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Blimey, there was me in a blurred haze thinking I was listening to prime time radio. But no it was just Andy @kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905) ’s Soundcloud page. Surely this is better than most stuff on the radio thinks me. I’ll check...so over on Radio 2 Sheena Easton is trilling out ‘Modern Girl’. What again, she’s in her sixties now poor woman, she’s not that blinkin’ modern. ‘Put Andy on!’ I yell at the radio. At my age I’ve taken to shouting at the telly and radio a lot. It helps. So you might be on next week Andy. We should start a campaign!
It’s pure commercial gold this one surely, mainly because it is such a great pop song. Great hooks, intelligent but romantic lyrics and fabulously sung too. Not as good as Sheena mind, but nearly! ;)
Can you do one about my baby taking the morning train next? That would be excellent.
Cheers anyway, I’m getting dizzy now with all this positivity. kwallitteeee!!!
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Wow! absolutely blow away and humbled at the comments - jeez oh!
I don't write a lot of songs all the way on guitar - I tend to start things off on guitar/keys and then start progressing on Logic. This is a song I would wheel out at parties etc when people found out I wrote songs. I actually never intended really to record it but was working on something else and started programming this. When I got the guitar riff I started to get really interested. I wonder how many of us have songs sitting around that deserve a little TLC.
I am so happy the lyrics work as I was trying my hardest to come up with interesting twists...
@montydog (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18653) - you are such a gent you know! Thank you @IronKnee (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20409)
@Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) thank you, my mentor!
@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) I can hear the Celtic thing and massive compliment from @adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124) with the Waterboys - have you heard the original 'how long will I love you'? what a song! I am aware that it's short but I take it as a massive compliment you wanted to hear more!
honest @PeteS (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22588) I have lovely lasers lol
@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) thank you!
@MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820) your words mean a lot!
and @MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274) your review really made me smile and the things you write really make it all worthwhile...and I used to fancy Sheena Easton haha
Thank you!
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@kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905),
Andy, several years ago we spent an age talking about songwriting and production. That was such a wonderful time in my life when I knew that you and I would always be kindred spirits. If I have had any influence on your writing and production, I am both humbled and delighted. The truth is, you now have more than the required skill to fly in both departments.
It is my absolute pleasure to see that your songs and indeed yourself have been embraced by this songwriting community. Your music is flying my dearest friend!
Paul
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@kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905) As Mr MichaelA says your songs are so well produced & radio friendly. Interesting lyrics ,wonderful singing & lovely sentiment. Great stuff Andy.
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Hi @kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905)
I really enjoyed this what a great song and vocal perfomance, 1st Class.
Great lyrics, arrangement and production I particularly liked the guitar /falsetto vocal ending absolutely brilliant.You really are a talented singer/songwriter/producer.
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Ah...you have that star quality in your vocals and a knack for phrasing that shows you just know how to tilt things in the right direction to make it stick. Enjoyed the lyrics and the whole thing had an air of authority and gentleness that left me very impressed.
Paul told me you were class...and I knew he'd be right. Now I know for sure!
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Thank you so much @5 guys named Lars (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22535) @Grubstar (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22532) 😃
@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) seriously what a nice thing to say - totally made my night last night 🤩 I still really doubt myself as a writer and producer...I am so pleased you commented on the phrasing as I try to make a performance with the vocal, moving around like a complete noob 🤣
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@kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905) - Very nice indeed, engaging right from the off, tight lyrics, superb production, oooh a B3, always a sucker for those..I'm listening for tasty drum fills, and they are coming...nice and short..less is more.
A real Gem Kafla, I like your work.
R
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this is so sweet
not missing anything
very coherent expression of the sentiment.
I really enjoyed that listen.
Thanks for sharing
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@cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308) wow! that praise means a lot coming from you 8)
@rightly (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20219) thank you much! been listening to the one who truly deserves you more and it's genius...love the bite in the title line!
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@kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905)
Hi Andy, Everyone's already said it but, great song, vocals sounding great, lovely arrangement, what's not to like?
Really good song
Cheers
Jamie