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Songwriter Forum => The Bar => Topic started by: Wicked Deeds on August 01, 2020, 09:46:40 AM
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After yesterday's Friday night chat, it seems that several forum contributors would like to engage in a writing challenge. Of the people present, we briefly discussed writing a song on one instruments only, in one day only. Furthermore it was suggested that we all write to the same theme to avoid the temptation to submit something that was already written or partly written.
We all have demands on our time, so it is unlikely that we can all write on the same day. However, I propose that the song is written on any day from Monday 'til Friday of the coming week. We'll all have to be honest with ourselves and not bend the rules to complete our creations.
Suggestions for song topics :
1. A song about a place or travel
2. Song about cars
3. Songs about film
4. Songs about famous people
5 Songs about politics or political figures
6. Songs about love lost/found/scorned/star crossed lovers
Feel free to add suggestions. It's important for us all to agree on a topic and all write around the same one. How you decide to do that s entirely up to you.
Hopefully this will kickstart the discussion process.
Paul
@Kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905) it would be great to see you sign up for this!
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Yeah...I'm absolutely up for this...sounds like a great way to get something cooking that I probably wouldn't otherwise do :)
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'Home' - now there's a theme for a song!
Paul
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All sounds very good - I like “home” as a theme too...
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I’d be really interested in being involved in this, I love the one instrument one day restriction as I think it will be amazing to hear other contributors songs bare bones before the production and subsequent tweaks! Also, home is a great theme!!
Can I also propose that we have two votes, one for best song and one for best lyrics? The hope is that it would be an encouragement to those who mainly post in the lyric section of the forum to be involved and put their lyrics to music. If it’s a crap idea though don’t worry about it :P
Cheers
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I also like "Home" as a theme!
And what about making it Monday through Sunday to accommodate those who only have spare time on weekends?
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Weekends or work days are fine. Next week is the first break I've had from work for many months.
Paul
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Well up for this. Will get something together one day this week
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So let me get this straight. Wake up in the morning with a blank sheet of paper, no previously considered lyrics or chords and by the time you go to bed you have a fully recorded song? is that it?
And one the one instrument thing, can that be a synth? so you could play drums, pads, piano, strings whatever?
Personally, if I do it, it will be on an acoustic guitar ;D
Pete
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@PeteS (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22588),
You've got it my friend. A brand new song, written and recorded in one day. A vocal and one instrument only.
Paul
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@Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) sorry to be thick Paul, but is this one track of of one instrument, or if you wanted, a multi track of one instrument?
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@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274),
As I understand from Friday's discussion, this is a one instrument and one vocal song, nothing too elaborate though I must admit a second guitar can lift a guitar vocal considerably.
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OK, so the idea is that it is ‘stripped back’. It is one instrument only, same sound throughout - so for example not a synth doing two or more sounds. Max of two same instrument tracks. Although only one instrumental track is just as worthy as the max of two.
Vocals - one lead track plus a max of one harmony track, but any harmony is optional for those who prefer such a thing.
Is that it in a nutshell?
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I hope to do it though my "one day" is going to be parts of days strung together max 24 hours effort.
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@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274), @Paulski (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19241),
I see no reason why we can't write our songs on one instrument, e.g a guitar or a piano then record the guitar or piano on one track, followed by a vocal on one track. The song will then be complete. If people want to add a second guitar or piano to enhance the dynamics of their song then go for it (providing we are all in agreement.) Most importantly, this is a songwriting task. Choose the day that you are going to write, complete that task then record it in one day. I'm going to give myself 8 -12 hours to complete my song, though I might take considerably less time depending on whether inspiration favours me . If you can't devote a similar amount of time in one day then it seems reasonable to perhaps have 3 sessions, each lasting 4 hours. That might of course give a writer an advantage because he or she brings a fresh approach to the writing process each time. Equally, there's something to be said for writing your song in one session. I'm at ease about which approach is employed but please try to be disciplined re the number of hours devoted to the task. I'v never been a fan of competitions. I'm more switched onto the task of writing for th challenge of the ex raise. I hope that's ok with everyone though someone could step in if they wish to run a competition.
Are we going to embrace the 'home' theme'
Paul
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@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274), @Paulski (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19241),
Are we going to embrace the 'home' theme'
Paul
Yes, that seems to have some support. ‘Home’ it is I’d say - yeah I get the idea, we’ll all be coming up with our own take on the same topic.
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OK... I'm going to do mine this afternoon.
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@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274), I totally agree, 'home' could result in one or two surprises!
@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253), good luck my friend. I'll probably tackle mine in the morning bf ore resuming my holiday 😀
Paul
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Great stuff - will be starting today too!
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Ok I'm up for it.
Are there any lyricists who'd like to collaborate as well?
1/2 a day to write the words.
If anyone's interested please pm me.
@Kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905) - no way!!!
:-) Neil
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Well, I started about an hour and a half ago and I think I'm finished. I'm not going to mess about any more so it's a true reflection of a song created in one session.
Where do we post our songs ?????
Cheers :)
John
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So - I sat down this afternoon, not really knowing what was going to happen with the theme of "Home" and this popped out
I've decided to leave it absolutely raw as it's one guitar, one vocal, first take - No more messing about. I think it was about 80 minutes from start to finish....
That Home
Oh – If you were well
Then you could tell me
Everything you feel
But when I look into your eyes
I just see hollow shells
Full of confusion
I can tell
The fear wells up inside your eyes
But do I have to really decide to
I don't want to leave you on your own
To leave you in that home
Well time is short
And enjoy every day
The fear of separation
Breeds anxiety
With 30 other souls
To pass away your time
And maybe thousands more
To move across that line
But I can tell
The fear wells up inside you
But do I have to decide to
Leave you on your own
Think I've tried
Everything that's possible
Don't want to leave you in that home
Don't want to leave you in that home
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Pompz, you certainly work fast!
It’s great to hear a stripped back track like this.
I think you’ve nailed it tbh! Great guitar tone, vocals and lyrics - I love it when you sing ‘tried’ - there so much emotion there! A great opening track to this challenge, I’m excited for more to come
I plan to try and put something together next Saturday 👍 see how we go
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Here's mine, pretty raw, all in all 2 hrs.
Very rough and ready, but a great challenge idea, thanks @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) and @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231)
Just a Tele a '56 champ and me.
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Great stuff Rich @cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308) Fabulous to listen to this stripped back stuff
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Great stuff you both - I have finished writing but have run out of time to record today.
Even got the word ‘cephalopod’ into the lyrics (that was part of the challenge right?).
Mañana, banana as we say over here.
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Great stuff you both - I have finished writing but have run out of time to record today.
Even got the word ‘cephalopod’ into the lyrics (that was part of the challenge right?).
Mañana, banana as we say over here.
@adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124) - well there goes me ubiquitous/stick with us rhyme of the year out the window...
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) - love this, really suits you, Whenever you strip back your productions it reminds me of Elvis Costello playing at live aid.
All you need is love...
John this is seriously brilliant....love it...
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Well...that was tough :P
It was meant to be about The Chagos Islands and Diego Garcia...but I think I lost the plot!
Got it done, anyway...good luck to anyone brave enough to give it a go :)
Home (And Don’t Spare The Hearses)
You can use it
Til it’s broken
When it’s broken
You might give it back
You can’t see it
When you’re shown it
You can steal it
But never own it
An Englishman’s home
Was any another man’s castle
When the shooting was over
Or the trap had been sprung
You turn a free country into a vassal
Slitting throats
With a slip of your tongue
Stolen away
In front of their eyes
So B52’s can
Soar though tropical skies
No God-given right
No divine intervention
A God-given wrong
For the whole world to see
England expects
But neglected to mention
The slaughter and plunder
Of all that was free
And don’t get too set
Where you currently dwell
If their own are not enough
They’ll take yours as well...
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Awesome stuff from Pomps and Rich!
I'm pleased to have got over the line...it was terrifying...but a great challenge!
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Well, what a fascinating and fabulous challenge this is turning out to be. This is a top quality submission @PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) England expects but neglected to mention is just brilliant. What a great idea for a challenge and fascinating to hear everyone in raw mode
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@Paulads,
A quality song from you once again. Love the acoustic guitar. You've certainly delivered on this challenge. The song has real warmth. A diamond!
Paul
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@pompey Jazz,
A completely wicked guitar tone, complete with some tasty, unexpected chords. A great approach to the challenge theme. I can relate to this as my Mam has been in a care home for many years. This one tugs at the heart strings and this is so evidently in the excellent vocal.
Well done my friend!
Paul
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@cowparsley man, cool intro, I was expecting Cheryl Cole for a moment with that's lovely guitar tone. Some great lines here : it's where the chips fry', 'it's where the plates fly' this one has a lovely laid back feel and once again, there is a really uniqu take on the theme of home, different yo all of those posted so far.
Well done
Paul
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A song about life: childhood, relationships, the love of a parent who has Alzheimer's and also the hatred of another who passed away some years ago. "If I could hop into a time machine I'd say I long for home."
https://soundcloud.com/pvasey1/paul-home-mastered-1
Home
The shoes I'm standing in have seen so many towns.
They've walked a million streets. embracing ups and downs.
I long for home.
I long for home.
My thoughts return to summer days when I was still a boy.
My mother cried to Johhny Ray, the kids played with their toys.
I long for home.
I long for home.
Starting out was easy. 'Aint' it always?
Drinking led to fighting, led to lies.
What dreams may come were all undone.
The moon rose in the sky.
The shoes I'm standing in have seen so many towns.
They've witnessed fireworks, the lovers hiding frowns.
I long for home.
I long for home.
Paris nights, The Berlin wall still haunt me from afar.
The present keeps the past at bay, it holds the door ajar.
I long for home
I long for home
Starting out was easy. 'Aint' it always?
Drinking led to fighting, led to lies.
What dreams may come were all undone.
The moon rose in the sky.
If I could turn the clocks back for a day
or hop into a time machine, I'd say
I long for home.
I long for home.
Written by Paul Vasey August 2020
https://soundcloud.com/pvasey1/paul-home-mastered-1
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Lovely song, Paul.
Conjures up some sweet thoughts of times past. My mam's 93 now and really poorly today...so this brought a tear to my eye.
Vocal is fab and I was very surprised to hear you go electric for this one 😀
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Thanks @PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253),
I think there is much to learn from this challenge. I'm going to be honest and say that I didn't quite deliver with this song. It was almost like writers block which, I never experience. I tried to cook something but my kitchen skills were lacking on this ocassion.
Paul
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I felt exactly the same...
I think the really interesting part of the challenge is to draw just enough from what we know about writing songs to be able to pull a song together when it isn't really quite doing it for us. I know mine would definitely have got binned had I not said I would do one 😀
I think it just goes to show how much extra work goes into a song to get it from the basic spark of an idea we first have, to where we're usually comfortable enough to release it and consider it finished.
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It's a beautifully crafted little number Paul @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) A melancholy feel to the lyrics and the accompanying music. I love the tone that you have on the guitar and there are some killer chords. Another gem in the challenge
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I've started a playlist...............
https://soundcloud.com/songwriterforumuk/sets/the-one-session-songwriter
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OK, I've done mine today. Great idea for a different kind of challenge. Quite pressuring doing it in such a short burst of time though - so obviously a bit rough, but I'm not going to start editing it as I would normally do.
I will comment on all your other songs in the morning, but no energy now, plus just wanted to post this on the 'same day' basis.
It's about lower league football and their long suffering fans - who call their ground, naturally, Home.
https://soundcloud.com/michael-a-duffy/at-home (https://soundcloud.com/michael-a-duffy/at-home)
At Home
All my life been coming down
To this same spot in this old ground
Behind the goals so I could see
This shower of shite in front of me
Cheered my team through thick and thin
But mostly thin, took it on the chin
I’ve stood here moaning, getting tense
We’ve no attack and no defence
Today the match is halted
Pitch invasion by a cat
Our goalie tries to catch it
But our goalie is too fat
The away fans sing
Can we play you every week?
You’re supposed to be at home
Their team score three
Then they scores four
And we’re not singing anymore
Til some daft prick of ours tries starting
You’ll Never Walk Alone
We naturally groan
We’re supposed to be at home
Four nil down, here comes the rain
The stand roof’s leaking once again
Oh blow for half time referee
I need a pie and a mug of tea
And with our pies, my mates and me
Recall our glorious history
It might be thirty years and more
But we were champs of Division Four
And on this spot on this terraced slope
Stood with me Dad and clung to hope
Though he passed on, I’m not alone
I bring my lad here to Home
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Bloody hell, Michael, I'm sitting here laughing and crying. You really bring the experience to life and make it real. Who could have known what this challenge could inspire? Awesome work.
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This is another stroke of genius. It's been fascinating how "Home" has been interpreted in so many different ways. You have got this spot on Michael. I can smell the Bovril and my knees have gone numb.
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@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274),
Quality track for sure. Took me 'home' to The Victoria ground of Hartlepool united. You nailed tge challenge my friend.
Paul
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Great song, Michael 😀
Has a brilliant jangly Johnny Marr vibe and super north of england professional underdog whimsical humour.
I loved playing football but have never really enjoyed watching it. A bit like porn...
A brilliant take.
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Cool, I’ve listened to the other four songs submitted so far. What a great selection and it’s amazing to think that none of these songs existed until at least last Sunday.
@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269), great heartfelt vocal on this one and a moving song, those dips into minor chords really pulling on the heart strings. Lovely work in just one session, although I know you always work admirably quickly. Very topical too, although heartbreaking of course.
Thanks for doing the playlist too, John. I think these songs will be quickly swallowed up into forum obscurity despite their obvious merits!
@Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) your voice is lovely on this Paul, another moving contribution, some difficult issues tackled head on. Really like the indie guitar picking, plus the chorus has an anthem feel to it. I could imagine this one being worked up into a bit of an epic really. Despite you being a bit down on it, I think it’s a real quality piece.
@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) I like the recorded sound you got from that acoustic, mine always sounds a bit boomy if I play chords like that. But I digress, as you’ve got a real steely bile in these well thought out lyrics Paul, which ironically sit on top off that bouncy accompaniment that sounds like a song about your holidays! Our very own North East rebel in action. Great stuff for this song-in-a-day challenge.
@cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308) lovely languid feel to this. I like the spiky edge to that Tele and the simple riffing was just the ticket. The double octave vocal worked well and who could not resist those ‘where the chips fry’ quirky lyrics. Cool contribution to our challenge indeed.
I’m looking forward to hearing any others that might still come in.
Plus thanks @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) , @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) , @adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124) and @paulads for the kind words on my effort, and esp thanks to PaulAds for his insight into his personal hobbies! ;D I’m glad this challenge came up as I never really consider doing such a 1+1 track, and even if I start out like that I always end up layering on the tracks. This challenge shows that sometimes less can be more and the heart and soul of a track is not necessarily in multi tracking and production. I’ll try an remember that next time I open up Track 24. Cheers all ;)
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Fascinating challenge! So many things that might come out otherwise over time, but these songs are interesting as maybe they reveal a lot of who we are really. Total writing time about 2 hours and then I committed to what I had (even cephalopod). Recording about the same amount including false starts, restructuring, and key changes. Loved doing this!
Take Me Home
V1
Ambition of the worker
Burning more candle ends
Doing more deals, billing more hours
Disappointing more friends
Always a few more mails to send
Bonuses, ladders and acclaim
Deep down just wanting to feel safe
And I feel the same
CH
Take me home, take me home
All I want is for someone to come along
All I want is someone to take me home
V2
Cephalopod legs on the drunk
She doesn’t know where her coat is
Another lost purse, ripped tights again
No idea where her phone is
Maybe she’ll just sleep where this stone is
Pressure, banter, waste and shame
Deep down just wanting to feel safe
And I feel the same
CH
V3
Loneliness of the patient
Trying not to look at your chart
They're here for you, but inside you’re alone
That bleeping sound is your heart
If it stops now will they try to restart?
Near to conceding the game
Deep down just wanting to feel safe
And I feel the same
FINAL CH
(c) 2020, Adam Farr, all rights reserved
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Another smashing submission for the challenge @adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124) I love the singalong chorus, one I can imagine being sung in a pub late at night when we're allowed to. My favorite lyrics are "Cephalopod legs on the drunk
She doesn’t know where her coat is
Another lost purse, ripped tights again
No idea where her phone is
Maybe she’ll just sleep where this stone is"
Fabulous stuff :)
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@adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124) - another brilliant song Adam, one of your best sung with passion, great chords, superb stuff.
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Nice work @adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124), very melancholic but poignant too. The pen portrait idea for three characters experiencing different lifestyles but then with a shared desire is very neat. I enjoyed the delicate guitaring and the guitar’s sweet sound, and as Rich mentions the chorus is instantly memorable - and so wistful too. A most lovely song indeed!
Shame we don’t have a child board on the forum, or maybe we should have put these in finished songs, as I tend to think they will all be buried in a couple of days. Oh well, there’s something to be said for ‘short and sweet’.
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@adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124), there are some beautiful chords and unusual directions with your vocal melody. The chorus is a beauty. It's a real sing along tune!
Well done with this super songwriting challenge submission.
Paul
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I hope it's okay if I do one by myself and one collaboration. I have one done. The collaboration is in process. I wasn't going to do one, but this one showed up and insisted, so I had to...
Here it is. :D
https://soundcloud.com/caliamoko/going-home
GOING HOME
1+1 One day challenge
I didn't have a clue
you mesmerized my mind
And so I followed you
but you left me behind
I felt so all alone
and every day I cried
But finally, I moved on
and I hid my tears inside
Going home, how could I have foreseen
Going home, at last, I'm finally free
Going home, my friends are calling me
Going home, going home
I've traveled all around
I've been away so long
And nowhere have I found
a place where I feel strong
I need a brand new start
I'm wiser than I was
I know deep in my heart
I was led astray by love
Going home, how could I have foreseen
Going home, at last, I'm finally free
Going home, my friends are calling me
Going home, going home
Going home, I am going home
Copyright © 2020 Vicki Morrison Goble
All rights reserved
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@CaliaMoko (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19928) , very lovely traditional song Vicki, with a very sweet and memorable chorus, sung almost hymn like. Easy to float away into the song’s mood. Great fast work! :D
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Yes... Great stuff from Vicki and Adam's song is brilliant too.
Very impressed with you all.
I'm going to try recording mine properly over the next couple of days...hopefully in the right key and everything 😀
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This is a lovely little number @CaliaMoko (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19928) Very heartfelt. I have added it to the playlist :)
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It's easy to imagine a big production to this @CaliaMoko (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19928). Well done for taking on the challenge. I wonder how many of us will go on to develop our sketches. I really dislike my effort but have gone on to produce it to about 70% completion. It was at first a cool challenge but has turned into a compelling task to create something worthwhile.
Once again Vicki, really well done!
Paul
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Hey guys.... I’m on my holliers and figured I’d have a listen to these from the wilds of the west coast of Ireland during some quiet relaxing time ... Fascinating hearing the variations on the theme - from sad to warm to touching to social and historical commentary to hilarious...
Great idea for a comp! (Will there be voting or was this just for the challenge of it all)?
K
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I will have a go at this @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) but it might be Sunday before I can produce some eloquent sh!t 🤣😎
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@Kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905),
Andy you absolute star! You are sorely missed my friend!
Please ignore the duffer that I posted. It is currently undergoing a rewrite or heading for the bin. More importantly. It is fantastic to hear from you my great friend!
Paul
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I've done a new version of mine...just added drums, bass and a simple doubled string line...and re-recorded it in a key that wasn't killing me! It's a bit more like what I had in mind initially. Great exercise, though!
I'll likely remove the original in time...but will leave it for now just to show how much things can need polishing up :-[
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@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253), really cool song Paul. It has a Style Council vibe to it. I'm so pleased thay you got a keeper from the challenge. I don't know why but I've struggled with the wtiting and equally, I've struggled with the production. Yours my friend, is a winner!
Paul
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Yep, great work on the development @PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) The strings make it sound very dramatic. A fabulous tune
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Peace at last. I never thought that I would like this song!
https://soundcloud.com/pvasey1/paul-home-mastered-2
Paul
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Hello
So I was up and ready to start writing 9.30. I don't have a lot of time and wanted to have finished 11ish but it took me to 12.50! but it was so much fun.
This has been an awesome challenge and never have I written and recorded a song in one sitting like this. Rough around the edges but oh well!
It's an alright track but the achievement is so much more than the end product. Thank you for the challenge. (oh and I pushed the boundaries of the brief with doubled vocals and a lead guitar part...sorry...)
My reward is being able to listen to all your amazing submission over a cup of coffee :)
Cheers all
Winding My Way Home
I was feeling pretty fine
Winding my way home
Had a few too many wines
And I thought that I should go
Back home to my darling wife
Who’d been waiting all alone
For her hubby but her hubby is me
And her hubby has no control
When I get home
I’m gonna be
spending my night creeping
Before I get home
I better be
Soaking up this feeling
I was feeling pretty cool
Walking through the park
At this rate my feet and I
zig zagged behind the dark
Oh, probably not wise
To sit down on that bench
I thought the time would help my head
But my seat became my bed
When I get home
I’m gonna be
spending my night creeping
Before I get home
I better be
Soaking up this feeling
When I get home
I’m gonna be
spending my night creeping
But when I got home
Finally
I found my wife a sleeping.
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@Darren1664 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20970),
This is a really cool song. It's great that you enjoyed the challenge. What are you referring to with your chorus of creeping'? Do you mean that you'll be walking on egg shells around the house?
Paul
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Thanks Paul :) I appreciate the listen
Creeping is a word my wife uses for when I am in the bad books and trying to creep my way out of it by giving her compliments and making her cups of tea etc :P not sure if that's a common use of the word though or just from where she is from.
for example...."I've made you a cup of tea..." ... "...stop creeping.."
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Hey...This is excellent, Darren
Brilliant to hear from you. It was a great idea for a challenge and big respect and congratulations to you for taking it on and making such a great job of it.
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@Darren1664 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20970),
Apologies for the typos. I must be the worst mobile phone typist on the planet!
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@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) Thanks Paul :) that means a lot. I didn't think I could do it but (other than tracks where Pompz has done the production) this has turned out to be my most complete song to date! It has a start, middle and end :O
@Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) haha no worries, I knew what you meant :) and I'm pretty bad for typos myself.
Anyway, I have gone back to listen to the other submissions here. If I wasn't so chuffed at just finishing mine I'd probably take it down because my word, I'm amongst the big hitters here!
All of your tracks are amazing and in every way - lyrically, vocally and musically and I'm honoured to be posting songs along side you all. Really glad pompz made a playlist as I can listen again whilst I'm working.
I hope to record like this more often as following the recording process start to finish like this has been a really great tool and I would say to any one on the forums to give it a go, especially the less experienced. I can see now that I don't have to agonise over lyrics or structure, sometimes just getting a song under your belt is better than trying to make it as best as it can be. If the song is a good one, you can always come back at a later time. If you don't have the time, at least you have a track recorded.
OK, that's enough from me. Thanks for listening and for sharing :)
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I will have a go at this @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) but it might be Sunday before I can produce some eloquent sh!t 🤣😎
@Kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905),
Did you manage to write/produce Andy?
Paul
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Hi @Darren1664 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20970) I really enjoyed this one. Great to see you back on the forum. I love the vocal treatment and the slightly dirty guitar. Another twist on "home" I will add it to the playlist :)
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Finally got around to listening to some of these.
First up @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Great song John - would never have thought that was done fast - good vox and guitar sound. Deep lyrically :D
Next there's @cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308) - Nice one Rich - the doubled vocals and guitar solo are a nice touch though stretching "the rules" a bit :D
Very catchy melody now worming around in my brain.
The @MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274) - what a poignant vibe - love the vox and lyrics. Washes over me like a warm mug o' tea. Not that I ever poured hot tea on myself. Amazing this was done in a day again :D
Just getting started but big time impressed so far :D
Paul
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I took a run at this "one day simple challenge thingy" yesterday and came up with this song - presented with all the blemishes of a newborn baby ;D. Let's hope it's as cute! I usually practice my vocals a lot so apologies for the many flubs.
Time spent breaks down as follows:
Lyrics/melody - 2 hours
Tracking - 1 hour
Mixing - 1 hour
https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/when-daddy-comes-home
When Daddy Comes Home
With her old man workin' out on the rigs
Mom did her best raisin' up us kids
But there must have been times all alone in that bed
She could barely cope
But she persevered through the thick and the thin
And when we cried and said we're missing him
She'd say "It's OK - but you'll just have to wait
'til your Daddy comes home"
When Daddy comes home, tucks us in at night
When Daddy comes home things 'll be alright
The shifting ground where we're walking around will turn to stone
He'll tell us stories of the deep blue sea
His gentle voice 'll wash over me
And then we'll sleep like we never sleep
When Daddy comes home
Though Mom and Dad are no longer here
In my dreams they still re-appear
And I overcome nearly any fear
When Daddy comes home
When Daddy comes home, tucks me in a night
When Daddy comes home things 'll be alright
The shifting ground where we're walking around will turn to stone
He'll tell his story of the whale and the shark
His gentle voice 'll warm up my heart
And when I sleep - I'm not afraid of the dark
When Daddy comes home
He'll tell that story 'bout the whale and the shark
His gentle voice 'll warm up my heart
And when I sleep - I'm not afraid of the dark..
When Daddy comes home
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Another fabulous song to add to the list of one day wonders @Paulski (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19241) It's great to hear you tinkling the ivories and I think the vocal is superb. I'll add it to the playlist :)
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Ooops ! Can't do that @Paulski (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19241) as the track is private
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) - sorry about that - I made it public now (but flagged it as sketchy 8) )
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Cool @Paulski (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19241) Added to playlist now :)
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Just heard the @paulski track. Very touching and honest. Fabulous work in just one day, shows the guy’s just a natural. It’s interesting that when we songwriters are commanded to go 1+1 a good proportion of the songs have tended to show us off at our most intimate. And this one is no exception, a lovely song in all respects.
Don’t forget to check out John’s playlist above, fellow forum members, if you’ve not yet heard this ‘song-in-a-day’ selection. :D
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Thank you @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) and @MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274) and @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) for the kind words on "When Daddy Comes Home".
It needs so much more work IMO but it's nice to get some validation early in the process and I guess that's what this challenge is all about.
It's like the old saying: Swim like a duck - smiling to anyone watching - but paddling like hell beneath the water's surface.
Well, in this challenge folks can see you paddling like hell ;D ;D
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Here's the collaboration I mentioned earlier. Neil Connor and I got together and wrote: "Away from Home". Listen here: https://soundcloud.com/neilconnor-2/away-from-home-stipped-master-11-aug-2020
Here are the lyrics:
I remember like it was yesterday
Though it seems so long ago
The day you told me to go away
They played our song on the radio
Played our song
This is my home, my sanctuary
I come to rest when my heart grows weary
How will I manage when I’m all alone?
When I’m a long way from my home
I'm a long way from my home
I said please, please don’t make me go
You know where I belong
Please, I love you so
Didn’t mean anything wrong
When I left I felt something break
All those memories came flooding back
When you told me that I should take
The wrong way on the welcome mat
Wrong way on the mat
I said please, please don’t make me go;
You know where I belong
Please, I love you so
Didn’t mean to do you wrong
c 2020 Morrison/Connor
All rights reserved
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Neil also whipped together a more produced version, which I'm posting in Finished Songs. Or you can get there from here: https://soundcloud.com/neilconnor-2/away-from-home-master-14-aug-2020.