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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: moraamarolaloba on July 20, 2020, 12:37:34 PM
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On the ceiling of my room - What could have been yet it has been... Something strange but,,,
well, I am actually using a Neumann TLM-103 micro and a electronik DVR250-DT reverb.
After talking to you
I fell strange
strange
strange
My words
become undone
and they get lost
in unrelated letter
roamong my state
And
so
lost
in the parenthesis
I contemplate
hopw
the light
filtering through the slits of the blind
projects the street full of lives of others
on the ceiling
of my room
I think about what could have beenç
and yet it has been
at least those minytes
talking to you
it has been it has been it has been i
t has been
I inspire the moment
not to get caught
by the stream of what is gone
and I think about
my diairy
where my hand will write things
that I did not know
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A very interesting study of the intricacies of a moment, @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) . I always enjoy your videos and your songs always bring me into a space of introspection.
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Hola @Unclenny (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22611)
It makes me happy thinking you like what I do. Moments... that link of the chain of time
I enjoy when sometimes I can contemplate what I am describing here... Pure magic, something that remains a mystery to me even if it has an explanation.. hahahaha
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Some really interesting musical effects flowing through this one ... I could hear this as part of the sound track of an Indie movie! There is a great clarity to the sound you create.
Very interesting and thought provoking lyrics and love the video!
Kevin
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Hola @kevysc (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19775)
Thank you very much for watching and commenting.
This time I used the Neumann TLM-103 and the TC-Helicon Voice Live 3 Extreme to obtain a special color in the voice... I think the vocals sound clear and defined.
Indie movie! hahaha why not? Imagery is my companion.
Be safe
Mora
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)
Hi Mora, loved this. The electric piano sound and playing is fab, sounds a bit like George Duke. Nice lyrics and very well sung too. What's not to like. Thought we weren't getting the ubiquitous guitar solo, but it popped up mutedly near the end! ;).
Nice one!
Cheers
Jamie
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Hi Mora, a very rich layer of cool sounds you have put together there. Like poetry set to an electronic soundtrack, it’s easy to get lost in the experience. Very creative once again! ;D
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Hola @Jamie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19125)
Thank you, I like very much making people to have a nice moment watching my work.
Yes, I too love this piano, it gives it a special aura... and of course the guitar of Marcus Nalgaber makes better my music this time with a sound very close to this of the piano, in the mix the guitar sounds on the right side accompanying the piano.
Take care!!!
Mora
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Hi @MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274)
I am not sure how I reach to do something these days, I am not concentrate. I had a lot of problems looking the style and the sound for this song and finally did it this way.
Thank you for your so nice comment.
Cuídate!
Mora
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Hola Mora
Great to hear another of your fabulous magical songs The electronic backing track and production are superb and it really sets off your vocals and surreal love diary lyrics. Great stuff.
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@moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)
The music is wonderful. It's both melodic and interesting but not predictable. It's great to here it meander into unusual territory - anaudible treat for sure.
Well done
Paul
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@Grubstar (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22532)
You are really kind. This song is a mix of fun and mystery... I like the effect on my voce, it gives to the song a rare quality. as the guitar, of course.
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@Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231)
Muchas gracias! You are very kind, I like to be not usual!!!
Be safe
Mora
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I seem to have missed this along the way - glad I caught it.. Lovely track @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233). Love that rhythm change just before 2 minutes.. Actually the beats all the way through are great... really add to that mysterious undercurrent.. Lyrics, of course, are great and unique.. Just lovely..
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Thank you very much @MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820)
I think I reached to paint well the scene.
Be safe
Mora
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Highly poetic lyrics. I really like the way you create a swirling chain of thoughts around a particular image or moment in time.
And the music is fabulous - there is a not-quite Western influence in the percussion which gives this is a very individual and mysterious dreamy feel.
Another original and well realized piece!
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@adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124)
Thank you for watching and commenting. I think a lot of moments in the life are songs or could be songs if we describe them. When inspiration is walking out from my mind I manage reality.
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Liking the groove and layered vocals, works well for me.
Very chilled with your unique style.
:-)
Neil
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Many thanks, I love too the groove here @Neil C (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18856)
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Mora, Your material is always so interesting and your lyrics in particular are invariably intriguing. I like the instrumental setting of this - perfect for the song and with some great musical textures. On the negative side, I think it lacks melody and maybe the lyrics are just a little too opaque to understand what is going on. Such originality and skill cannot be denied.
M
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Hola @montydog (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18653)
Imagine this simple scene.
A woman has just spoken on the phone and is thinking about the conversation, and while she thinks something abstract she discovers that the light that filters through the blinds projects the street on the ceiling of the room, a visual scene that leads to another scene of thought and feeling. everything coexists, inside and outside.. I think so
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Fantastic recording. Alluring!
-Tom
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Hola @IronKnee (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20409)
Thank you very much for your time. Be safe!
Mora
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Nice @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)
First time I can recall parenthesis mentioned in a song 😬
It’s very cleverly put together and the mix and arrangement work really well
👍
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Another very inventive and creative piece of music @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) The doubled vocals work really well and some fascinating sound effects. Super stuff
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Nice @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233)
First time I can recall parenthesis mentioned in a song 😬
It’s very cleverly put together and the mix and arrangement work really well
👍
Many times we forget that in a parenthesis many things happen independent of the environment in which it is opened, a great opportunity to imagine!
Thank you @Kafla (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6905) eres muy amable.
Mora
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Another very inventive and creative piece of music @moraamarolaloba (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21233) The doubled vocals work really well and some fascinating sound effects. Super stuff
Muchas gracias, it makes me happy thinking you had a good time watching and listening! @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Mora