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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Grubstar on March 23, 2020, 02:48:28 PM
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Hi everybody,
I hope everyone and their families are keeping well and looking out for each other during these troubled times. Here is a new song 'Cold Easter Rain, I hope you like it. All comments and feedback welcome.
https://soundcloud.com/grubstar1/cold-easter-rain
Cold Easter Rain
I get this picture in my mind
It’s like a film that I rewind
I watch you walk away
A hundred times a day
Why can’t I leave the past behind
Where is the shelter
When love turns to pain
Standing alone
In the Cold Easter Rain
I tell myself it isn’t real
To try to change the way I feel
But every time I do
My thoughts return to you
It’s like a wound that cannot heal
Where is the shelter
When love turns to pain
Standing alone
In the Cold Easter Rain
You held my future in your hand
It slipped away like grains of sand
I guess I’ll never know
Whatever made you go
Maybe I’ll never understand
Where is the shelter
When love turns to pain
Standing alone
In the Cold Easter Rain
© 2020 Atkin & Williams
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That's a damn good chorus mate..excellent, really excellent 8) and nice change around 3.15,
I think you should hold back the distorted guitar in the chorus until the last chorus instead of giving everything away from the get go..then the chorus would build nicely.. :) 8)
super song 8)
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@Grubstar (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22532) - pretty blimmin good Mr Grubstar, really well considered choice of instruments, and sublime arrangement, i dream of doing stuff like that.
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Hi, Really like this kind of took me back a few years if you don't mind me saying... reminiscent of OMD in some ways. Strong but simple lyrically with ample despair. Good job 👍
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Man I Love this tune, great melody & vocals! the chorus is just killer, wonderful
arrangement and the lyrics are superb.... well done !!!
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Love the drive in this one. Very smooth vocals and production in general. I like the synths being just synths and not trying to be any other instrument. The way they lead up to chorus sets it off really well. The crashy guitars work well too. Great stuff.
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Hi, the percussion in this really grabbed me for some reason - those strong beats right up in the mix carry it along really well. Other highlights were the vocal melody (great distinction between verse and choruses), the chunky power chords, and the vocal delivery is cool too. Not sooo keen on the guitar solo... felt a bit out of place in the palette of sounds, would probably have stuck to synths?... but other than that brief detail I really liked this. Strong confident piece of 80s flavoured pop wizardry.
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I thought this was just a straight-up great song.
The way you sing lines 1,2 and 5 of the verses really lifts the song.
I think maybe if Easter wasn't somehow always such a dull affair...despite being the money shot of Christianity in many ways...it would help make the song even more memorable...but that's a tiny detail that just crossed my mind.
Top drawer!
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yes great song love the momentum ..kind of snowball gathering
lovely full vocal natural and honest
knock out & words right on the nail..
loved it from the off..
reminds of gene clark and his 'no other' album ..
really refreshing to hear..
eleven out of ten !
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@Grubstar (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22532)
Hi,
Enjoyed the song, the production and instrumentation all fitted well with the arrangement.Well sung melody, and the chorus is very good too. Had a touch of the old school electronica about it.
Nice one!
Cheers
Jamie
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Really love the verse melody, and the chorus is equally great, however the vocals are totally lost in the chorus so they really need to come up in the mix (and probably a tad in the verses as well). Love the vocals and the overall soundscape, think overall a little more low end (kick/bass) would balance out the upper registers better. Just my personal preferences shining through I guess, keep or sweep :-)
All in all, one to be proud of, well done!
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Hi
Vocals sound really good.
Love the early/mid-80s vibe. Sort of A-Ha meets Ultravox.
Melodies are strong.
Would have been a hit 35 years ago. I mean that as a positive - not saying it sounds outdated. I love 80s music in general and am heavily influenced myself.
Really cool.
Digger
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Hey there Grubstar............I think the music is just fine, and the lyric is Great. The only nit I have is with the lyric, however. Easter is a time for renewal and rebirth, the coming back to life. With that said, I was looking for some healthy optimism, some rebounding, while standing in that Easter rain. Something to think about ;-)
Anyways......some good stuff, here.....keep on...
-Tom
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Hey, nice song, the lyrics are great, vocals and music also, it may sound like 80's but my ears and I pleased to listen this track.
Have a nice day.
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Yep ! This is fab @Grubstar (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22532) Reminded me of some early 80's synth type stuff "A Flock Of Seagulls" The chorus is really hooky and memorable. Vocals really suit this style as well.
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Hi every body,
Many thanks to all who took a listen and particular thanks to those who took time out to review our song,and leave kind words and constructive comments in particular;
@shadowfax (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20024)
Many thanks for the review, fully agree with you regarding building up choruses as the song progresses, Its something I struggle with and always end up throwing every thing in from the start, I have taken on board your comments and will try to do better.
@cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308)
Thanks for the positive comments CPM its really encouraging.
@boolio (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20725) Really appreciate the positive comments, thank you so much.
@Bostonfan2 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22448) Cheers , thanks for giving our song such a fantastic review, I am very much obliged.
@PaulyX (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21034) Hi glad you liked our '80s flavoured pop wizardry' ( loved that comment).Well just have to agree to disagree on the guitar solo, but glad you liked the rest.
@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) Many thanks for the positive review it is much appreciated. Regarding Easter I couldn't agree more I always felt it was the most miserable time of the year and was always freezing and raining hence the title of a song about lost love and sadness.
@nooms (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=11264) Hi thanks for the great comments and for alerting me to the solo work of Gene Clark who I was unaware of but I have checked him out on Youtube and really liked what I heard, brilliant.
@Jamie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19125) Hi thanks for the review and kind words it is much appreciated.
@Jambrains (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19875) Many thanks for the review and appreciate the tips on mixing and tonal balance etc , I will try and improve on my next attempt.
@digger72 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=9823) I'm so glad you liked our song and I appreciate the great review. I certainly wasn't consciously referencing the eighties but so many have mentioned it in their reviews that I have to accept that. However, I don't mind I'm just glad that the song seemingly has been received quite positively.
@IronKnee (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20409) Thanks for the good review. I understand your comments regarding Easter, but I was coming from the position that it is one of the saddest periods in the Christian calendar and is usually in the UK at least accompanied by miserable weather. hence the song title.
@Melusine2 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22580) Hi, many thanks for the positive review.
@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) Hi many thanks for the kind words and glad you liked the song. I'm just trying to see if I can brush my fringe over one eye for a new avatar picture.
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@ adamfarr
Hi Adam , many thanks for the positive review and kind words, it is very much appreciated, Cheers.