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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: alonsharon on February 08, 2020, 11:06:28 AM
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Hey everybody,
My name is Alon Sharon
I am a music producer/songwriter based in Tel Aviv, Israel. I wrote a ballad on my guitar and would like to get some feedback on it.
https://soundcloud.com/alonsharon/alon-sharon-miss-you
Lyrics:
Verse 1:
There's nothing else to say when it's all gone
Just the emptiness you feel when it's too late
Your'e the only one I ever loved more than myself
Just Remember this as time will go away
Pre Chorus + Chorus:
And you, I just want to lay my body next to you
Your'e gone and now I feel it too
I miss you, I miss you
Verse 2:
If you ever walked away from me, I couldn't be free
It's just who we are
There's so much I want to say, But I can't right now
It's just How I am
Pre Chorus + Chorus:
And you, I just want to lay my body next to you
Your'e gone and now I feel it too
I miss you, I miss you
Thanks in Advance!