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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Cawproductions on December 16, 2019, 04:47:29 PM
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Hi all,
We have just finished this track, Its quite heavy so I know that it wont be up everyone's street.
Lyrically, quite a simple track, But I hope a few of you enjoy the listen.
Just recently starting to add a little electronic sounds into my mixes for production value, Hope they come across as intended.
Oh and just increase the voulme until you're in the nose bleed section then up one more click...enjoy.
Lyrics:
Intro verse:
I dont want you, i dont care
My reasons I wont share
no excuses left to say
same as yesterday .
Chorus Hook:
But you're gunna
feel the same
feel the same
Verse 2:
You got my world out of control
all our memories that you took and that you stole
too much hurt I care to name
and i know you feel the same
Chorus:
feel the same
feel the same
feel the same
feel the same
Bridge:
you got all the answers
But I dont know
you are a chancer
And you never had it but it showed
Played my hand like a dealer
with a fatal blow
youre reaching out for healer
But you're gunna
feel the same
feel the same
feel the same
feel the same
Instrumental Break:
But you're gunna
feel the same
feel the same
feel the same
feel the same
Solo:--
And I know you feel the same
And I know you feel the same
And I know you feel the same
And I know you feel the same
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Yes, it's heavy but it's melodic and the guitars are interesting. What more is needed? I think this one is really cool. Backing vocals are in place so kudos there too. A fine track in my opinion!
Paul
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Yeah. This is up my street. I've been keen for you guys to rock out for a while and this delivers on that front. It's not particularly heavy and still very radio friendly. As to be expected from you the production is great and the electronic sounds introduced definately work. The best elements though for me are the drums and the guitar. Working them hard to keep the track driving forwards. Good work.
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Yeah ! It's great to get this heavy sound. Touches of Biffy and the Foos. You're right, it needs to be played at volume 11. Although it's heavy, you've also managed to created the right amount of light and shade imo. Have a rocking Crimbo fellahs :)
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Thanks guys for such great feedback,
Wasnt sure if it would be a bit heavy for this arena.
Also, have created this little video to accompany the track. Sets the mood nicely.
Hope you guys enjoy the watch on this.
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me lika heavy, enjoyed this song loads, one crit..the vox kept disappearing. small nit I suppose but when it's a good vox we wanna here it duntwe!!
great song mate.. 8) :)
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Very much a fan - puts me in mind of Show Me How To Live by Audioslave.
Very well performed and executed and right up my street.
Look forward to hearing more, and maybe let that guitar really break out a bit more! :D
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Great song - I like the Neil Youngish guitar solos (great tone on that axe) and the super vocals.
Not too sure about the shouting girl - seems like there should have been flames coming out of her mouth ;D
Good work on this song
Paul
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Hi really enjoyed this, right up my strasse, so to speak! Deffo got a Foos vibe to it. Loved the chord progression in the hook, excellent.
Cheers
Jamie
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Hi
Cool song indeed.
When you said heavy I was expecting Death Metal! :D
Rocks well. Agree about the clarity on some of the vocals - but plenty of rock tunes have that sort of slightly buried vibe. Creates a good overall soundscape.
I like how the outro contrasts the rest of the song - works well rather than just a straight keep rocking fade out.
Digger
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Hi,
It's all good sounding! The chorus makes me think of Deftones sometimes. The voice is good and drives the song well in which everything works well in my opinion. The breaks are well brought in and the electronic parts that you can hear better at that moment bring something.
It's a success!
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Yeah I dig this Rocker. melodic and high energy, flows well throughout and I really
like the change at 3:10 leading to the outro. nicely done! ..not 2 heavy 4 me :)
nicely done! ....Ray
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Hi
I really enjoyed this terrific rock song which drives along with great drums and guitars also the electronic ear candy you've added is very effective.
The song itself is very hooky and well arranged and the vocals sound great, although they sometimes do get a little lost in the choruses but this doesn't distract from the overall enjoyment of the song.
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Music can be therapeutic and this sounds like a very satisfying blast of anger. There’s a great tune here. The first verse builds the tension before the chorus rings out in great defiance. This is passionately sung with a great voice. There’s some great playing too, the whole band coming together to great effect. The production certainly enhances the song. A very exciting song. Well done.
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Hi ,
Have listened to the track 3 or 4 times.
Think the guitars are particularly strong on this track and it is a strong song with a good chorus.
Love the change in guitar solo around 2:28. It’s pitched just right to up the excitement and energy.
I also think the ending is very cool.
Some arrangement and mix thoughts;
1. The vocals sometimes are a little smothered by the guitars and I can’t always hear the words. Maybe an EQ cut on the main guitars or some parallel comp on the vox to allow more vocals through?
2. Felt the drums could come up a bit on the mix, particularly the kick.
3. There is a vocal double at 0:54 that goes wide in the stereo field. To my ears it’s either slightly too loud or maybe not needed.
All in all a good, strong song, mixed well (not easy with a live band). I enjoyed listening to it. Thank you.
Paul.
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Hi all,
Myself and @Mikey (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20986) are really pleased with the feedback from this track.
I am glad you guys liked the vocal as I am not the strongest singer but tried to give them a rock feel.
Some of you mentioned our playing skills which is greatly appreciated and also that we have a full band sound.
@pnb99 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22271)
Thanks for the mix review, its always great to get a second set of ears on a mix so we can go in and revisit these points.
A couple of you mentioned the tension in the song, this was great to hear as we pay a lot of attention to arrangement and the overall feel of a track.
As for the vocals being quiet, I guess thats the danger of being a less confident singer and mixing your own material. We like our guitars and drums to drive our tracks.
We are both learning all the time with every new track and appreciate the time you guys have taken to constructively comment.
So thank you again to all.
Andy and @Mikey (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20986)
AtticVibes/ Cawproductions
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Hi I’m a huge fan of your stuff and I thought this was ok but not like some of the other songs perhaps I need a few other listens , as a non musician it sounds like an album track .
Did technically brilliant like all your stuff it just missed the mark for me .’
I thought the lyrics were ok but didn’t blow me away
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Powerful track.
Like the subtle use of the electronic sounds, so subtle that I couldn’t pick them out first listen but they do add to the song.
Nicely mixed and a hooky chorus.
Yodasdad
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Great sound and very well produced. Guitars are super. Like the pinched harmonic bits in particular...lovely. Really good vox too...lots to like.
I couldn't help but feel that the inventive chord change on the "feel the same" lyric was just a little too much out of my comfort zone...but i'm a bit old-fashioned, it has been said...
Great track though!