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Title: Where to Now?
Post by: bigFishAndTheSmallPondets on December 04, 2019, 11:41:47 PM
My friends got married so I wrote this as a wedding gift for them. They’re interested in conservation, birding, travelling and making home brews all of which I tried to work into the song.

https://soundcloud.com/big-fish-small-pondettes/where-to-now

They said they liked it. I hope you do too!
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: shadowfax on December 05, 2019, 08:45:10 AM
Lovely song with a very memorable tune, fab lyrics and nicely sung...my only crit is it,s a little bit dry, a bit of reverb to impart a feeling of space would benefit this song nicely..well crafted  song my friend... :)
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: Bostonfan2 on December 05, 2019, 11:18:05 PM
I can see why they like it, Nicely done! real good melody, Vocals & playing.
I agree with Shadowfax, a bit of reverb on the Vox would go along way. I really
wanted to hear that acoustic double tracked but it sounds good as is,
what a thoughtful gift :)
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: David Christy Jones on December 06, 2019, 03:04:14 AM
Can't help but think of this as a sort of modern Neil Young type vibe.
It's a lovely song, and a lovely gift.
The lyrics are very thoughtful and the chords well matched. I like the ascending chord run and associated vocal line. To me, it just makes a lot of sense musically.
Good stuff, and congratulations to the happy couple! :D
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: PaulyX on December 06, 2019, 09:22:09 AM
Yo BigFish, very pleasant well constructed track and I can imagine it must have gone down fantastically as a wedding gift.  Nice production too, mix sounded very balanced and the 'Where to now?' line/title is full of optimism.
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: crystalsuzy on December 06, 2019, 12:14:09 PM
What a lovely wedding gift> I can see why they liked it...it's lovely, with very personal and thoughtful lyrics  :) You have a great voice and the
ascending guitar line fits perfectly :) Can't wait to hear more of your stuff  :)
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: bigFishAndTheSmallPondets on December 07, 2019, 09:31:48 AM
Lovely song with a very memorable tune, fab lyrics and nicely sung...my only crit is it,s a little bit dry, a bit of reverb to impart a feeling of space would benefit this song nicely..well crafted  song my friend... :)

Thank you! Very kind. I may come back to this one and give it a bit more polish someday. As you say, some production would compliment it. Thanks again.
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: bigFishAndTheSmallPondets on December 07, 2019, 09:33:01 AM
I can see why they like it, Nicely done! real good melody, Vocals & playing.
I agree with Shadowfax, a bit of reverb on the Vox would go along way. I really
wanted to hear that acoustic double tracked but it sounds good as is,
what a thoughtful gift :)

Thank you! If I reverb it up and double the guitars I'll make another post and let you know. Thanks for your kind words.
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: bigFishAndTheSmallPondets on December 07, 2019, 09:36:15 AM
Can't help but think of this as a sort of modern Neil Young type vibe.
It's a lovely song, and a lovely gift.
The lyrics are very thoughtful and the chords well matched. I like the ascending chord run and associated vocal line. To me, it just makes a lot of sense musically.
Good stuff, and congratulations to the happy couple! :D

Thank you! Being compared to Neil Young is a great compliment for me, so thanks for that. It was a great wedding. It was very kind of them to throw a big party and invite us so I wanted to do something that paid back a little. Thanks again.
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: bigFishAndTheSmallPondets on December 07, 2019, 09:37:55 AM
Yo BigFish, very pleasant well constructed track and I can imagine it must have gone down fantastically as a wedding gift.  Nice production too, mix sounded very balanced and the 'Where to now?' line/title is full of optimism.

Hey thanks, that's really kind. I usually write quite sweet songs, which I thought would work well as a wedding gift. Thank you sir!
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: bigFishAndTheSmallPondets on December 07, 2019, 09:40:35 AM
What a lovely wedding gift> I can see why they liked it...it's lovely, with very personal and thoughtful lyrics  :) You have a great voice and the
ascending guitar line fits perfectly :) Can't wait to hear more of your stuff  :)

Thank you! Very kind to say. I'm quite insecure about my voice. I don't actually like it so much. I shudder to think the amount of re-tuning that was required when I finished recording. Still, you have to work with what you've got right? Thanks again for your kind review.
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: Paulski on December 07, 2019, 01:42:45 PM
Nice one.
I really like the acoustic guitar in this and it's a nice arrangement.
I like the vocal too - it has a lovely lilt to it :)
As Kevin says maybe a touch of reverb would serve it well.
Good ending BTW

Paul
Title: Re: Where to Now?
Post by: bigFishAndTheSmallPondets on December 07, 2019, 07:29:03 PM
Too kind. It seems the only person who doesn't like my voice is me!! :D

Thanks so much for the review. It means a lot to me.