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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: RealKevM on November 25, 2019, 11:29:53 AM
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Hi guys here's a new rock n roll tune, please let me know what you think to the riff and the chorus if you have a couple of minutes. It's a demo so nothing special in terms of production.
Lyrics
I can feel it growing in my head
I can feel it flowing through my veins
Cos this dreamer never ever left
I know how it feels to be in the morning rain
I don't know here i'm going baby
I just know where i've been
And if you're not what I want
You sure are what I need
Tear down the walls in here
Give me space to breathe
Open up your heart and soul
And your arms to me
I can see the sun shining down on me
I can see the world for what it is
Cos one match will burn a thousand trees
and I know how it feels to..miss
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It's great to here stripped back songs of this nature as they invite the listener to fill in the production blanks. That's a wicked guitar tone. I instantly imagined how the drums would join the party in a very Oasis like manner. It's a real rocker of a song for sure. There's even a section for a screaming guitar solo. It will be interesting to hear this develop over time!
Well done my friend!
Paul
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Yes, huge potential here @RealKevM (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21324) Like Paul I can hear the drums kicking in and a badass geetar solo. Hope that you develop this further :)
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Nice one Kev. Thats a great lick on the verse & I like the lyrics too. Looking forward to hearing more of this. Thanks.
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Cheers lads, yeah Paul @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) it's screaming out for a solo isn't it, I was going to do one for this demo but couldn't be mithered, will do for another version tho.
I need to somehow get drums sorted for my songs but i'm using a digital recorder thing so God knows. I'll just wait until Warners sign me and put me in a studio and the engineer or whoever can do them :) @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
@5 guys named Lars (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22535) Nice one thanks for checking it out!
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Hi !
I like that destroyed sound. It goes well with the grit in your rocking voice.
There's a lot of potential in this song.
I'll be glad to hear the final version :D
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Thanks @Inanité_sonore (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22286) i've been playing it acoustically recently to get the timing down and i've got to say that the chorus is huge (I don't ever big myself up) thank you for having a listen
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Hi kev,
Liking this dude, its just screaming for bass and drums to drive it along, add a Mikey solo and some Caw Sauce...
Also great attitude on the vocal lines,
PM if ya need some production help
Rock on.
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Thanks so much @Cawproductions (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20938) :)
Here's a cleaner, acoustic demo version of the song. The phrasing is coming along a lot better now I think..i'm looking forward to playing it live for the first time on Jan 16th at West Street Live, Sheffield if anyone is in the area and would like to pop along :)
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@RealKevM (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21324) - Writing this as I listen, blimey, your songs have come on a storm, I agree with the other reviewers, subtle Nirvana type drums, and some HUGE punk gtrs, the voice is already there kev.
Great idea Kev.
Got a lot of prod potential, If you don't have a full band to play it live, then I think i'd go for an electric gtr rather than the acoustic, it would be a tad closer to the target genre. Just an idea Kev, and good luck at the gig, Rich
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@cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308) Cheers Rich, very motivating comments. I kind of sacked it all off for a while there, felt little to no point in performing or writing.
I agree the song definitely has to be electric but well I recorded a live video earlier today anyway and i'd love it if you and anyone else reading this would have a little watch :)
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@cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308) Cheers Rich, very motivating comments. I kind of sacked it all off for a while there, felt little to no point in performing or writing.
I agree the song definitely has to be electric but well I recorded a live video earlier today anyway and i'd love it if you and anyone else reading this would have a little watch :)
Kev, a great improvement in all areas, especially in your confidence in delivery, makes such a difference to your singing, dig the hummingbird...
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Ahhh nice one thank you :)
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Great song Kev! And what a improvement you have had on the delivery of the songs :)
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Ah cheers mate!
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Hi Kev
A good song with so much rock & roll potential.Lyrics are great and I can here how both you and the song are developing with each version. I enjoyed your acoustic version but I think the song is better with the electric.
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Cheers Grubstar, appreciated man
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Definitely got potential Kev, and the improvement through the versions is great. I'm seeing a mix of acoustic and electric to give it the light and shade! But I'm not so sure about a solo. Not a huge fan of solos tbh but maybe some picking of electric over acoustic?
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Cheers @PeteS (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22588) i've done an electric version recently it's sounding a bit fresher if that makes sense, thanks for taking the time to listen mate ;)
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At this forum I'm starting to listen songs like this, pretty crazy and nostalgic, sorry if it's not, i really like it