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Title: What I Need
Post by: RealKevM on November 25, 2019, 11:29:53 AM
Hi guys here's a new rock n roll tune, please let me know what you think to the riff and the chorus if you have a couple of minutes. It's a demo so nothing special in terms of production. 

Lyrics

I can feel it growing in my head
I can feel it flowing through my veins
Cos this dreamer never ever left
I know how it feels to be in the morning rain

I don't know here i'm going baby
I just know where i've been
And if you're not what I want
You sure are what I need
Tear down the walls in here
Give me space to breathe
Open up your heart and soul
And your arms to me

I can see the sun shining down on me
I can see the world for what it is
Cos one match will burn a thousand trees
and I know how it feels to..miss

Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: Wicked Deeds on November 25, 2019, 03:03:22 PM
It's great to here stripped back songs of this nature as they invite the listener to fill in the production blanks. That's a wicked guitar tone. I instantly imagined how the drums would join the party in a very Oasis like manner. It's a real rocker of a song for sure. There's even a section for a screaming guitar solo. It will be interesting to hear this develop over time!

Well done my friend!

Paul
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: pompeyjazz on November 25, 2019, 03:15:05 PM
Yes, huge potential here @RealKevM (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21324) Like Paul I can hear the drums kicking in and a badass geetar solo. Hope that you develop this further  :)
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: 5 guys named Lars on December 01, 2019, 11:25:13 PM
Nice one Kev. Thats a great lick on the verse & I like the lyrics too. Looking forward to hearing more of this. Thanks.
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: RealKevM on December 03, 2019, 02:22:38 PM
Cheers lads, yeah Paul @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) it's screaming out for a solo isn't it, I was going to do one for this demo but couldn't be mithered, will do for another version tho.
I need to somehow get drums sorted for my songs but i'm using a digital recorder thing so God knows. I'll just wait until Warners sign me and put me in a studio and the engineer or whoever can do them :) @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
@5 guys named Lars (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22535) Nice one thanks for checking it out!

Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: Inanité_sonore on December 26, 2019, 08:54:33 AM
Hi !
I like that destroyed sound. It goes well with the grit in your rocking voice.
There's a lot of potential in this song.
I'll be glad to hear the final version  :D
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: RealKevM on January 05, 2020, 05:17:13 PM
Thanks @Inanité_sonore (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22286) i've been playing it acoustically recently to get the timing down and i've got to say that the chorus is huge (I don't ever big myself up) thank you for having a listen
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: Cawproductions on January 05, 2020, 07:07:06 PM
Hi kev,

Liking this dude, its just screaming for bass and drums to drive it along, add a Mikey solo and some Caw Sauce...

Also great attitude on the vocal lines,

PM if ya need some production help

Rock on.
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: RealKevM on January 07, 2020, 11:02:14 AM
Thanks so much @Cawproductions (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20938) :)

Here's a cleaner, acoustic demo version of the song. The phrasing is coming along a lot better now I think..i'm looking forward to playing it live for the first time on Jan 16th at West Street Live, Sheffield if anyone is in the area and would like to pop along :)

Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: cowparsleyman on January 12, 2020, 11:13:29 AM
@RealKevM (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21324) - Writing this as I listen, blimey, your songs have come on a storm, I agree with the other reviewers, subtle Nirvana type drums, and some HUGE punk gtrs, the voice is already there kev.

Great idea Kev.

Got a lot of prod potential, If you don't have a full band to play it live, then I think i'd go for an electric gtr rather than the acoustic, it would be a tad closer to the target genre. Just an idea Kev, and good luck at the gig,  Rich
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: RealKevM on March 06, 2020, 09:31:52 PM
@cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308) Cheers Rich, very motivating comments. I kind of sacked it all off for a while there, felt little to no point in performing or writing.
I agree the song definitely has to be electric but well I recorded a live video earlier today anyway and i'd love it if you and anyone else reading this would have a little watch :)

Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: cowparsleyman on March 06, 2020, 10:03:30 PM
@cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308) Cheers Rich, very motivating comments. I kind of sacked it all off for a while there, felt little to no point in performing or writing.
I agree the song definitely has to be electric but well I recorded a live video earlier today anyway and i'd love it if you and anyone else reading this would have a little watch :)



Kev, a great improvement in all areas, especially in your confidence in delivery, makes such a difference to your singing, dig the hummingbird...
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: RealKevM on March 06, 2020, 10:33:00 PM
Ahhh nice one thank you :)
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: Andreas on March 09, 2020, 04:06:55 PM
Great song Kev! And what a improvement you have had on the delivery of the songs :)
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: RealKevM on March 10, 2020, 07:33:50 PM
Ah cheers mate!
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: Grubstar on April 03, 2020, 02:19:07 PM
Hi Kev

A good song with so much rock & roll potential.Lyrics are great and I can here how both you and the song are developing with each version. I enjoyed your acoustic version but I think the song is better with the electric. 
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: RealKevM on April 06, 2020, 09:05:02 AM
Cheers Grubstar, appreciated man
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: PeteS on April 13, 2020, 05:25:42 PM
Definitely got potential Kev, and the improvement through the versions is great.  I'm seeing a mix of acoustic and electric to give it the light and shade!  But I'm not so sure about a solo.  Not a huge fan of solos tbh but maybe some picking of electric over acoustic?
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: RealKevM on May 12, 2020, 10:26:08 AM
Cheers @PeteS (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22588) i've done an electric version recently it's sounding a bit fresher if that makes sense, thanks for taking the time to listen mate ;)
Title: Re: What I Need
Post by: Arthur_Satine on August 21, 2020, 01:29:39 AM
At this forum I'm starting to listen songs like this, pretty crazy and nostalgic, sorry if it's not, i really like it