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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Wicked Deeds on October 08, 2019, 05:30:01 PM
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I often write songs in pairs. I guess this is a partner song to my last one, “I had to go” which dealt with great sadness that I was experiencing then suddenly, something quite beautiful happened in my life.
et puis, l'amour……….
https://soundcloud.com/pvasey1/late-one-august-day
Late One August Day
The morning came, late one August day.
I walked through the rain.
I had cried all a man could cry.
I was lost to my pain.
Then her eyes looked through a thousand years
since they first looked before,
since they first knew as lovers do,
since they last said "j'adore."
If you're hurting, may I catch you;
hold your heart as it heals?
Let your love flow like a river,
'til it opens, reveals,
feels the truth.
Expressive eyes set in pale white skin.
Such balance and poise.
The sweetest smile, uncertain times,
an escape from the noise.
Unspoken words'til the soul knows well,
'til it bathes in the light,
'til it leaves behind the scars it found
in the darkness of the night.
If you're hurting, may I catch you;
hold your heart as it heals?
Let your love flow like a river,
'til it opens, reveals,
feels the truth.
There's so many miles between us.
Are we hapless, both believers?
Will the universe align to make you mine?
We have travelled through the ages,
Known the court jesters, the sages.
though we've never caught a glimpse of the divine.
Will you be mine?
Perhaps I will remind you who you are.
If we wish upon a star, will you be mine?
The morning came late one August day.
Written by Paul Vasey September 2019
https://soundcloud.com/pvasey1/late-one-august-day
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Paul, you are the master of writing songs that tug on the heart stings and this is no exception. Lovely chord progressions and your vocals full of emotion made this a fabulous listen. Hope that things are well in your world mate. Superb song :)
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Hey paul,
You can really get lost in this song, well i certainly did.....love the finger picking only one word to describe it and that is stunning!
Fantastic lyrics loved it.
Well done!
I also write song in pairs ive no idea why it just always falls like that.
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This was fantastic, Paul! As always you write and sing with tons of emotion. Loved the sound of the guitar and the progression and key you played it in :) Hope things are going well for you!
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Hi Paul, love the acoustic guitar sounds and picking/chords, sounded great. Your vocals hovering above the guitars works beautifully. Great melody and emotive performance.
Great stuff!
Cheers
Jamie
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Pure emotion in your voice carrying your heartfelt lyrics. Lovely guitar playing.. A sincere heart tugger. Great work.
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Hi Paul, yes a very immersive song indeed. The guitar picking, chord selection and tone are all wonderful. Your vocals hover over this so beautifully as you narrate your poetry.
Full of restrained emotion, yet so mournful despite the hope conveyed. Good work man!
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@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269), my world has become quite amazing! 😉
@Sebandme (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22491), yes, songs often arrive in pairs and often use similar chords that I favour at the time. Would you say that it's the same for you?
Paul
@LukeArmstrongMusic (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22101), fortunately, so many lovely things are happening for me right now. Thank you my friend.
Paul
@Modestmouse1965/ (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22459) thank you my friend.
Paul
@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274), this does sound more than a little mournful but it is a song of true wonder. I think it conveys the idea of discovering something quite beautiful after many , many struggles. I tried to convey the idea that two lovers have been reunited after many lifetimes apart.
Paul
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Paul,
Delicate and lovely tune. Some great lines in there, my favourite is ‘ If you're hurting, may I catch you’
Lovely backdrop, space and just sets the lyrics off a treat.
Great lead work too
Going to have another listen
:-)
neil
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An emotionally charged piece my friend...certainly got through to me...
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Hi Paul....hope all is well old friend ;D. Been a while ::)
Beautiful song....of course ;D . Lovely production. Love the vulnerability in your voice, especially when you
reach for the notes ;D . Super guitar picking. Lovely tone you get....always ;D ;D
Hope this relationship is the 'one' for you mate. I know you've been 'through the mill' a bit with your relationships
over the years....I've heard the songs ;D ;D ;D
Take care mate, and GOOD LUCK ;D ;D
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A tender piece, heartfelt, very touching.
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beautiful piece of music paul..
tenderness and warmth in your vocal
and the attentive companion guitar..
sad what you have to go thro to discover and produce a gem like this..
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You’ve certainly captured a mood here.
I didn’t hear the first of the pair, but in isolation, this one does the trick.
Even if I didn’t like it, which I do, it seems too personal for anyone’s opinion to count but yours.
Well done.
Yodasdad
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Ahh songs from the heart always shine through and this one certainly does.
Lovely tune - packed with emotion and musical prowess.
Not a nit in sight ;)
Paul
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Yo @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231)
Such a sweet tone from that acoustic guitar,Paul. Such a delicate flower of a song too.
One that sticks in the mind. Unplugged and nowhere to hide.
PS,something appears to be wrong with the s/c waveform,as it carries on long after the song finishes.
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@Neil C (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18856) thank you Neil, I have such a collection of guitar vocal songs. My life is fast paced and Ai struggle to make time for productions. I guess this ensures that's I focus on melody and lyrics. There is very little to hide behind
@Binladeda (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18620)
Hello my old friend, yes, I've had a rough ride got some was once a stand up, settled married kinda guy for 26 years. Since then, I've been on one or te adventures (not all bad) but I do long to be settled once again. Hopefully this time, happiness will come to stay.
@cowparsleyman (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21308), thank you for listening my friend.
@nooms (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=11264)
Thank you my friend. I'm currently cooking up a full production that is I think quite 'Wicked'. It's a real return to form as a more upbeat and intriguing band style song. There will be a lovely, authentic surprise in the production of 'La Belle Marie.'
@Yodasdad (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19208)
Thank you force listening and replying to this post.
@ Paulski
thank you so much. I'm going to focus on bigger, band-lik productions for a little while. I have so many new song songs floating around that's I need to dress in a suit of clothes.
Hey Davy,
Thanks for reviewing. Yes, there really is nowhere to hide on this one. I was a little lady, bouncing the track and not setting the parameters for the track to finish. I'm hoping to get some time to finish 'I had to go' when I do do, I'll incorporate your guitar and forward the song on to you.
Paul
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Beautiful guitar work @Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) and what a lovely melody. Sung with feeling that grabs the listener. Just gorgeous...
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Beautiful soft song, vocals in high notes are unique. Humble composition is perfect :)
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Lovely guitar sound (reminded me a little of Ben Watt’s early days). I really like questions in lyrics - sometime hard to make work but you do.
Lots of interesting images and references - court jesters, hapless, poise/noise (is that related to the quote in your signature?).
As you know I also like a sprinkling of other languages in songs - and here they open up a lovely little extra element to the story.
Very nice work indeed (and glad to hear that the inspiration is real).