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Title: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Sebandme on September 20, 2019, 11:32:23 AM
Just want some opinions on what you guys think of this track? Not so much the production as I'm not a producer and aware it could be better....but is song any good?

Any feedback would be most welcome negative or positive

I have the link to my soundcloud

Thankyou in advance

Wayne.

Listen to Just The Way That You Are by Sebastian And Me on #SoundCloud
https://soundcloud.com/sebastianandme/just-the-way-that-you-are-1

Whatcha looking,
Whatcha searching,
What are you hoping for.
Am I the one am I the one,
That you're looking for
I wanna love you,
C'mon and make me love you.

Star gazing,
Anticipating,
This developing love.
Am I the one Am I the one,
That you're dreaming of?
I wanna love you,
C'mon and make me love you.

Eyes as powerful as dynamite.
Flames setting my world on fire.

It's just the way that you are.
It's just the way
It's just the way that you are,
It's just the way
Hey!
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: CaliaMoko on September 20, 2019, 06:38:23 PM
Hi Newbie! Welcome to the forum. Glad you're not afraid to jump right in!

I listened to part of your song, but I can't make out all the words. Would you mind posting the lyrics? You can edit your original post and type them right in. Tag me when you're done, and I'll give it another try.

Hope to see you around the boards!

Vicki
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: PaulyX on September 20, 2019, 08:46:01 PM
Hey Wayne, welcome.  Yes the song is "any good"... better than that.  Lots to like here: the full on intro (no time wasted there!), nice distinct sections to the track - both the verses and the choruses have a hooky melody, nicely sculpted with peaks and troughs, seriously good vocal (Thom Yorke falsettos - sweet), nice abrupt finish!  (again, no time wasted).  I don't know how you recorded this but I felt a better, tighter mix of this would reveal a pretty darn epic track here.  Anyway, hope you stick around... review some songs and post some more.
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: RealKevM on September 20, 2019, 11:53:21 PM
Welcome to the forum pal. You should post the lyrics, it's good to be able to read your words too. I think the tempo is a a bit too fast, i'd slow it down a bit and I can hardly make out the vocals. Saying that, I really like the song as a whole, it's got a 90's indie vibe to it. Great guitar sound too.
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Sebandme on September 21, 2019, 02:05:04 PM
Hey guys thanks for people who took the time to listen and give me feedback it's very much appreciated.  I will post lyrics for any other tracks I may for you next time. The lyrics for this are as follows,

Whatcha looking,
Whatcha searching,
What are you hoping for.
Am I the one am I the one,
That you're looking for
I wanna love you,
C'mon and make me love you.

Star gazing,
Anticipating,
This developing love.
Am I the one Am I the one,
That you're dreaming of?
I wanna love you,
C'mon and make me love you.

Eyes as powerful as dynamite.
Flames setting my world on fire.

It's just the way that you are.
It's just the way
It's just the way that you are,
It's just the way
Hey!
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: AnitaFox on September 24, 2019, 10:56:50 PM
Hey,

I think this is great.  A nice easy listen that I think will get stuck in my head.  Look forward to hearing more from you.

Cheers

A
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Sebandme on September 26, 2019, 06:02:26 PM
Thanks for checking it out means alot. I might be brave enough to post more soon :)

Hey,

I think this is great.  A nice easy listen that I think will get stuck in my head.  Look forward to hearing more from you.

Cheers

A
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Jamie on September 27, 2019, 11:05:29 AM
Hi, definitely hear your references in the song, also reminded me a bit of Gaz Coombes voice from Supergrass!. Nice song, good guitar sounds and layering with keyboards/strings. Well sung.
Enjoyed it.
BTW if you spend some time listening to others stuff and commenting you'll get more interest on your stuff, just saying....... ;)
Cheers
Jamie
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: t.wretborn on September 27, 2019, 01:27:04 PM
Hello!

This is right my taste! I think it's a well written and arranged song with an interesting and really good verse and good chorus. I understand what you mean with the production. I struggle with that too being a newbie but i feel that im improving for every song i do and im sure you will feel that too :)
Thanks for sharing!
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: CaliaMoko on September 27, 2019, 03:33:35 PM
I like this a lot. It has a catchy sound and I think it would be fun to sing. I like the setting--the instrumentation and the beat. My nits are few. Basically, I like to be able to hear and understand the words. The vocals sound a little too lost in the mix for me. And one of my pet peeves is mushing words together, as in "way thatchew are". Now, for the first two lines, I can see it was a deliberate choice, and I think that's okay. Sometimes it just works better. But I think "...way that you are..." could be clearly enunciated without losing any emotion or artistry. Same with "That you're looking for" and "That you're dreaming of". But that's just my opinion and I know lots of popular artists mush their words together like that.

Oh, and I like your voice a lot, too. You have a good sound that suits the song well.

Vicki
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Sebandme on September 27, 2019, 05:06:45 PM
Production wise it's just me on garage band and I've no idea how to mix so hence vocals might be lost. Again thankyou for the kind words and pointers all are welcome. I'd listened to that track so much I was starting to think it wasnt great but you beautiful thinks it's alright  so I must be doing something right :) and Gaz from supergrass is a new one....but I'll take that.
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: adamwolf on September 28, 2019, 05:15:41 AM
Dude, this is amazing! The fact that we can tell even with low production is just a testament that at its core it's just a good song. I actually think the fact that you can't hear the vocals as clearly as you would on most songs, which I know you said is because you have trouble mixing, I actually think it's a good thing and if you ever mixed it you should still keep a bit of that. I can't think of any examples right now but a lot of indie songs have that and it fits a song like this.
Your voice and the melody are great and the instrumentation is really creative in some sections.
Great job!
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: cowparsleyman on September 28, 2019, 10:38:05 AM
@Sebandme (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22491) - Just taking a first listen, on iphone earbuds.

Nice hooks in here...Bring up the BVox in pre chorus #1, more Vox in the Chorus hook...in fact this could really shine with careful production.

The arrnagement is spot on.

@adamwolf (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22501) said it all really.

Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Sebandme on October 01, 2019, 09:24:03 AM
@adamwolf (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22501) cheers dude! So happy to see everyone enjoying and seeing the potential in it. Makes me very happy indeed.
Title: Just The Way That You Are
Post by: Viscount Cramer & His Orchestra on October 02, 2019, 04:56:42 PM
I did have an exploratory listen a couple of days ago...now I'm back for a proper go...and it's true, it is a very good song. The funky alternately panned guitar works in a way that I would never have dreamed of...especially hear it on headphones I suppose, which is my only listening method at the moment.

The verses are nice with that high note end, then WOW it soars in that pre-chorus bit. Those long drawn out words are...er...dynamite. Bloody good there.

Catchy chorus.

Nicely made song all round. That 'dynamite section is a monster.

Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Sebandme on October 03, 2019, 10:42:31 AM
@Viscount Cramer & His Orchestra thanks for the feedback, im glad you like it. Im so happy that people feel its catchy. Once again thanks for taking the time and listening.
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: MonnoDB on October 03, 2019, 07:37:54 PM
Hey @Sebandme (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22491) - I really like this! Great melody and I really like your vocals.. You have a really great sound Only thing I didn't like what sounded like claps - they didn't work for me but that's probably just me :). Look forward to hearing more of your music - loved this...

And welcome to the forum!

Karen.
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Sebandme on October 04, 2019, 01:46:50 PM
@MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820) ta for the feedback.....and yeah itis claps you can hear and yeah I agree on reflection they dont sit right with me either.


Glad you loved it.

:-)
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Neil C on October 04, 2019, 02:59:29 PM
Hi,
Welcome.
Neat indie warming song, lots to like including the vocals melodically float.
Likely the arrangmemt including stereo was and Coldplay guitar solo.
Only thought I have is that the vocals are buried in the mix and maybe could have less fx?
:-) neil

ps as Jamie says check out the 'rules' and get stuck in
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Sebandme on October 06, 2019, 09:26:21 AM
@Neil C (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18856) thsnks for the kind comments its much appreciated. Yeah i really need to figure out how to mix/produce my stuff better as its definitely letting me down. Thanks for taking the time to check it out. I have been taking Jamies advice and discovering some really talented people on here. Love it.
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: PaulAds on October 10, 2019, 07:10:47 PM
This is a cracker, buddy :-)
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: pompeyjazz on October 10, 2019, 09:47:20 PM
This is really well put together @Sebandme (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22491) You have obviously put a lot of thought into it. Great indie vibe. Reminded me of some of the stuff that The Verve knocked out and also some Pete Wylie stuff. Great arrangement and some lovely ear tickles with the panning of the guitars. Welcome to the forum and I hope that you stick around  :)
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Paulski on October 11, 2019, 02:37:54 AM
Nice one - I like the lyrics and melody lines especially.
The mix is pretty dense - could use some space but it really is a good song.
Oh yeah, and welcome to the forum  ;D
More please!
Paul
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Skub on October 12, 2019, 08:30:11 PM
Hi Wayne,welcome to here.

I really enjoyed the song. Vocals seem influenced by Thom Yorke and maybe a little Coldplay,which is no bad thing in my book. I think it's a fine song and very well performed. Someone with mixing skills would really make it shine.  8)
Title: Re: Hey everyone, newbie here...opinions please
Post by: Sebandme on October 12, 2019, 10:20:35 PM
@Skub (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20061) wasnt an intentional Thom yorke reference but thanks ill take that all.day long. Thankyou for the positive comments it really means alot. Yes i completely agree if better produce it could be better and is something im working on.

@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) cheers for the comments much appreciated.

@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) glad you liked it.