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Title: I had to go
Post by: Wicked Deeds on September 10, 2019, 06:01:09 PM

Something that I sketched in the last hour:

I had to go

Someone tell the universe  my heart is dead.
Perhaps she'll launch a fire ball into space.
Couldn't keep the pace.

Someone say a prayer to guide her home tonight.
The moon will not suffice to light her way.
I tried so hard to stay

I had to go.

Someone pour a whiskey in this shattered glass
before I drink to leave this mess behind.
This world is so unkind.

Someone send a ticket to my wretched soul;
Destination, 'any place but here.'
We cried a well of tears.

I had to go.

You're waking up to salted waves of pain.
No ordinary mermaid , a waterfall will cascade from your eyes.
I hope you find a way to love again.

Love again, love again.

I had to go.

Written by Paul Vasey September 2019

Title: Re: I had to go
Post by: Sterix on September 12, 2019, 08:42:36 PM

Simple and poetic. I like it a lot.

Title: Re: I had to go
Post by: Paulski on September 13, 2019, 08:53:57 PM

Another good one Paul. I like how it leads off with "someone" in a lot of lines.
I would stick a "But" before the last "I had to go" but I'm always sticking my but in places it doesn't belong  ;D
Now let's hear it  :D
Paul

Title: Re: I had to go
Post by: Wicked Deeds on September 13, 2019, 08:59:15 PM

@Paulski (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19241) thank you my friend. It's now over on the finished songs section.

Thanks

Paul