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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Andreas on September 08, 2019, 10:50:10 PM
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Hey guys! I am doing something different today, and I'm doing a live acoustic, no filter performance instead of a soundcloud clip. This song is finished, and the finished product on musical platforms will be acoustic when that time comes.
Like most of my lyrics, this one also means a big deal to me and is about giving yourself up for love even how difficult it is and about long-distance, that it can be difficult sometimes, but in the end, it will be worth it. Lyrics below! :)
Lyrics:
My heart is ready to feel love again
Always knew love could be a losing game
When I’m with you, I never can lose
I don’t need the fame if I’m everything for you
We got time zones between us, you’re a picture on my phone
There’s an ocean in the middle, love’s a riddle I can’t solve
I can’t solve, no I can’t solve
Your love, your love is all I want
Your love, your love is all I want
We got diamonds and gold, all materials with a price
But there’s no price on the love we share you and I
To wake up beside you every morning with a kiss
No distance can keep me away from dreams like this
Your love, your love is all I want
Your love, your love is all I want
The games that we play, I don’t wanna lose
The price that we pay, for being me and you
We got time zones between us, you’re a picture on my phone
There’s an ocean in the middle, love’s a riddle I can’t solve
I can’t solve, no I can’t solve
Your love, your love is all I want
Your love, your love is all I want
You’re a mystery I can’t solve
Tear my heart and take it all
I give my heart away to you
I love you every day I do
I give you all I am
If you, promise to love this man
Your love, your love, your love
Your love, your love, your love
Your love, your love is all I want
Your love, your love is all I want
Cheers,
Luke
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Hey there, really nice guitar playing in this. I really like the line about time zones (am I dreaming it or did you post a Soundcloud version of this one before? That line felt familiar... might just be because it is a very good line though). Massive respect for delivering to camera like this too, you clearly put tonnes of emotion into the vocal delivery.
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@PaulyX (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21034) - Cheers! No, I haven't put it on SoundCloud before, so thank you very much :)
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nice decending chords and guitar playing.
I liked the intimate style which suited the lyrics.
Just though the first part of the chorus sounded a bit at odds dynamically but I'm sure that would be fixed in a recording.
:)
neil