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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: kaalbas on July 06, 2019, 09:26:48 PM
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Hey
I Need some help writing the right lyrics to my song. What feeling do you get from the song melody?
Thank Michael
Listen here: https://soundcloud.com/michael-harboe-skjoldborg/instrumental
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Two things come to my mind right away...but not anything helpful. :(
1. I don't hear a melody, and although I can make one up to the accompaniment, I don't know if it's what you have in mind.
2. It would help if you already have some kind of idea what mood or topic or theme you want for the song. Do you have anything at all in mind for a story for the lyric?
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I have fought about something like going through something difficult and coming out stronger. Maybe "through the fire". But does it fit the song?
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I have fought about something like going through something difficult and coming out stronger. Maybe "through the fire". But does it fit the song?
I'm no expert, but I think it fits the mood.
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Do you have the melody? The background sounds great!
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Listened to a bit and wrote this
Scream scream
Scream scream - scream scream
there’s no in between
in the life we live
you ask forgiveness
from the top table
but you’re not able to forgive yourself
Scream scream - scream scream
there’s no in between
in the life we live
the dreams we have are reality
the life we live are just insane
if you aren’t dining on the top table
you’re left with labels that smell of scum
and you’ll never see the sun on birthdays
Scream scream - scream scream
there’s no in between
in the life we live
we all seek the door way to new life
but do we all want kids and wives
I’m not crazy , I’m not crazy
but need to scream , need to scream
Scream scream - scream scream
there’s no in between
in the life we live
Fades
Arghhhhh , arghhh
Arghhhhh , arghhh
Arghhhhh , arghhh
Arghhhhh , arghhh
Arghhhhh , arghhh
Arghhhhh , arghhh
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Hi not sure why but i can hear Female rock vocals on this. I can also hear rock organ sound in parts. Just a suggestion cheers.
Looking for feedback on a couple of demos myself cheers