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Title: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: shadowfax on June 19, 2019, 01:11:45 PM

Hi all..a song about an extra marital affair...

https://soundcloud.com/knmac/make-a-rendezvous-by-knmac

If you know whats good for you,
you will make a rendezvous,
midnight by a blazing fire,
balancing on loves high wire,
I know it's not the easy way,
I always find it hard to wait,
don't take for a fool,
you've got to break the rules,

make a rendezvous x3
make a rendezvous x3

cannot live without your love,
a love that soars so high above,

laying low and riding high,
on the street you walk on by,
our loving is a secret thing,
a secret that means everything,

make a rendezvous x3
make a rendezvous x3

you know I see you every day,
you've got to turn and walk away,
if they only knew of the night we met,
when we made a love that we can't forget,

make a rendezvous x3
make a rendezvous x3
©KNmac


best, Kevin :)

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: jamesh on June 19, 2019, 02:17:10 PM

Kevin
As usual exceptionally well produced an performed. I've always enjoyed your tunes, but I think I prefer your more cinematic electronic prog sounding songs of previous years. I think its the drum loop on this on this one that I cant get on with. Cant put my finger on it though!


James

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: Skub on June 19, 2019, 05:25:39 PM

Yo Kev.

This is a lovely,airy and light pop song.

I dig the melody,the vocals and the punchy production.

Instantly accessible.  8)

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: Andreas on June 19, 2019, 09:01:30 PM

This had some real sing-along effect :) Very well produced, and you sing it well, and the lyrics are outstanding.

Well performed Kevin! :)

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: redrhodie on June 21, 2019, 09:46:59 PM

Light and catchy with an earworm chorus. I know it's finished, but my thoughts aremaybe there should be some kind of justification for their actions, something like "She never understood" would fit in the chorus, and might make them a little more sympathetic. Or you could blow them up at the end, to show what happened after "if they only knew..." Haha. That might be cool.

But I'm as impressed as usual. Carry on.

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: PaulyX on June 22, 2019, 09:57:44 PM

Hi Kev, rock solid piece of feel-good synth pop here, in the vein of Erasure or OMD. I really liked the bvs (who’s dat?). Production is of course faultless. If I could suggest one thing it would be for the chorus to find its way to a different root note to the verses, just so you’ve got a bit more melodic variation going on... try the ‘up 2 semitones’ trick? Other than that minor nit I thought it was a spangly pop gem.

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: Sunduta on June 23, 2019, 01:50:14 PM

Catchy and energetic song, punchy drum loop is perfect for me. Lyrics are great, but my ears care only for "make a rendezvous" :) Vocals sound fresh and a bit uncertain (which is perfect for this song). Excellent work :)

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: Paulski on June 23, 2019, 05:41:20 PM

Hi Kevin
Great pop song - catchy hook and you milk it just right :)
You're a pro at breakdowns and this one is a good example of the art.
Love the repetition at the end. Now I've got this earworm that will be hard to extract - thanks for that!
No nits this side o' the ocean.  ;D
Paul

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: LostBoy on June 23, 2019, 10:13:15 PM

I love that this is a bit different from you mate. I too wasn't crazy about the beat BUT that's just me. I did love the hook though and the lyrics are fab!😁🎶👊🏻🎶

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: Girlinside on June 25, 2019, 09:07:42 AM

Has an 80s pop feel about it - can’t fault it - voice is good and clear
A happy song - very danceable x

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: Bankie on June 25, 2019, 09:04:43 PM

I would have liked the chorus to have done a little bit more, but I really liked what you did with the guitars and of course (as others mentioned) the production is great.

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: RealKevM on June 26, 2019, 10:55:01 PM

Likeable 80's vocals, I agree with Bankie, the chorus could be something more and is a missed opportunity. It's a bit samey and the song would be improved with a proper chorus, saying that it's catchy as hell so what do I know? lol good work pal

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: shadowfax on July 02, 2019, 09:07:25 AM

Gtta thank everyone for listening and commenting, always appreciated..thank you,
to answer your question Paul, the backing vocals (harmonies) are me.... :)

@PaulyX (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21034)

best, Kevin :)

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: rightly on July 03, 2019, 04:30:20 PM

very charming
80'S pop sound. awesome production.
you're very diverse
nice one

Title: Re: (new song) Make a rendezvous.
Post by: digger72 on July 07, 2019, 10:42:56 AM

Hi Kevin,

Must admit it's a bit too light and pop for me.
Can't argue with the production values though.
Liked the guitar tone - almost Brian May-esque at times.
Cool effect on the vocals late in the song - some kind of morphoder?

Just sounds so cheery though. :D

Digger