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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Killjoy on June 12, 2019, 11:39:02 PM
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Had a long session this afternoon/evening and I'm pretty content with what I've come up with here. It's not a perfect recording as I did it in one track but I prefer recording fully live rather than vocals and instrument separately, however I think it captures the atmosphere as I intended. I've actually had the chorus kicking about for a while and I was meaning to make a love song out of it for my ex-partner. We broke up a few months back and so I have altered the song to have a new meaning. Thanks in advance for the listen and any and all feedback is appreciated.
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Sorry for your reason for writing this, but I can tell you put your heart into it. My only minor suggestion, is rather than "a stone can never be a rock" is " I can never be a rock". I think it will fit in better, and clarify the message.
Well done. Sorry it didn't work out, but good job turning your pain into art.
Lynn
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Yea that's the main part I'm pulling out myself...it sounds like I'm fitting too many words into not enough space. But on the otherhand, I feel like it's an important contrast. Hmmm. Thanks for the feedback though Lynn. At least there is a positive side to break-ups etc, plenty of creative inspiration!