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Title: I'd say that's love
Post by: Wicked Deeds on May 25, 2019, 03:41:00 PM

I recently met someone who told me about the Japanese art of kintsugi that involves repairing broken ceramics which then become more refined, perhaps more beautiful because of the "scars."  My interpretation is that that people who experience devastating loss or pain and then go on to heal through self improvement, are much the same.

I'd say that's love

Your tender heart may break into a thousand shards of pain.
We cast aside; discard  the old, replacing them again.
I've heard it said, this need not be,
There's still a place, we'll wait and see.

I'd say that's love.

Our precious scars are turned to art, refined and worn with pride.
Perfection serves to to teach us of the flaws we cannot hide.
Such beauty here before my eyes
Should search for life un-compromised.

I'd say that's love.

Love knows the path that two people should follow; it's true.
The method, the madness, the whimsical sadness of you.
it knows the fire that burns the lover scorned.
What once was whole can then be readorned.

I'd say that's love

Your tender heart may break into a thousand shards of pain.
We cast aside; discard  the old, replacing them again.

Written by Paul Vasey May 2019

Title: Re: I'd say that's love
Post by: Andreas on May 29, 2019, 11:13:06 AM

This was a very original approach to what love is. Not like the cliche pop songs about how they feel or what they want to do. If this is how you feel about someone, well, "I'd say that's love" :) This was a wonderful read, Paul!

Title: Re: I'd say that's love
Post by: Wicked Deeds on May 31, 2019, 05:10:02 PM

@ Younger Hills, thank you sincerely my friend.

Paul

Title: Re: I'd say that's love
Post by: Paulski on May 31, 2019, 11:50:22 PM

Hey Paul
I'd say that's a good lyric  ;D
Nice rhyming, great sentiment.
You stay true to the hook.
No nits from me.
Hit record my friend!
Paul

Title: Re: I'd say that's love
Post by: rightly on June 05, 2019, 08:59:11 AM

Really nice. Articulate.
The idea is very skillfully communicated.

That one line with readorned. I'd scrap the then,
I'd get at least one syllable out. 

Can't wait to hear it.

Title: Re: I'd say that's love
Post by: Neil C on June 27, 2019, 04:56:35 PM

Paul,

Cool wordsmithing, like it a lot.

:-)

Neil

Title: Re: I'd say that's love
Post by: Vintage54 on June 30, 2019, 11:18:36 PM

  Hello,
    This is a good write, plenty to admire. My only nit is the word "readorned" can't really say why. It sounds kinda forced, or maybe it's just the word itself that takes some getting used to. Small nit, big song.

                              Vintage54