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Title: Professionals
Post by: igg on May 11, 2019, 10:15:17 AM

Hi!.....I've been working this for a little while.......What do you think????

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Professionals

Verse 1:
The tailor measures bodies
The undertaker stiffs
The doctor helps with babies
Just startin'  on their trips

The preacher counts the lives he's saved
The gambler grabs the prize
The seeker tries to save his soul
The politician lies

Chorus:
The world keep spinning faster
And nothing seems to last
The promise of the future seems
Much shorter than the past

Verse 2:
The postman brings us letters
The cook prepares our gruel
The soldier loads his deadly gun
While we all play the fool

We turn away in horror
Pretend that we don't see
This world that we've created
Ain't what we hoped might be

Instrumental Chorus

Verse 3:
Our graves are overflowing
With what we have  come to reap
Seems sorrow and confusion
Is all we'll get to keep

Chorus:
The world keeps spinning faster
And nothing seems to last
The promise of the future
Grows shorter than the past

Title: Re: Professionals
Post by: ScottLevi on May 11, 2019, 12:23:14 PM

Hey Igg

Quote

The world keep spinning faster
And nothing seems to last
The promise of the future seems
Much shorter than the past

Real talk.

I dig it man, got that sophisticated simplicity to it. Obvously well thought out and put together so nicely.

Picked out the chorus cos it tethers the sentiment perfectly but there's so many hard-hitting lines throughout. No chance to ignore the message reading through.

I think they're great! :)

Cheers,
Scott

Title: Re: Professionals
Post by: Andreas on May 11, 2019, 03:01:00 PM

Really love this one! It tells a story that I think, most people could relate to.

The song has a great message and the chorus is spot on!

Excellent work on this one! :)

- Andreas

Title: Re: Professionals
Post by: Girlinside on May 13, 2019, 08:34:39 AM

I think it’s a clever song well done x

Title: Re: Professionals
Post by: Sterix on May 14, 2019, 12:05:10 AM

Wow. Love this one. Especially this verse:

The preacher counts the lives he's saved
The gambler grabs the prize
The seeker tries to save his soul
The politician lies

Title: Re: Professionals
Post by: igg on May 14, 2019, 06:02:24 PM

Hi Guys....

Thanks for the feedback.....very appreciated...!

Scott - Good to see you again Scott --   It's a heartfelt topic for me...Thanks!
Andreas -  Tried to capture the general disaffection for the whole picture through the highlighted examples.... I wish it were not so!
Girlinside -  Thanks for the comment and sentiment
Sterix -  I tried to keep it as tight as possible and engage the imagination to fill in the world

igg

Title: Re: Professionals
Post by: rightly on May 30, 2019, 03:36:17 PM

This is very charming.
Quite promising, it had me considering music for it during the first read through.
You're good at this, aren't y'all?