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Title: Beautiful
Post by: dinnerwithgreedo on May 06, 2019, 04:36:32 PM

Here's an old (and short) one of mine. Enjoy!


Lyrics

It blows my mind you cannot see
You're beautiful
You're such a fool
No one i've known has ever been
So beautiful
and wonderful

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: Andreas on May 06, 2019, 04:49:28 PM

This is simply just beautiful @dinnerwithgreedo (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6829) :) Beautiful lyrics and a wonferful melody! Looking forward to hear if it is coming something more from this song :)

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: Bankie on May 06, 2019, 04:56:51 PM

This made me sigh with a smile on my face and want to curl up and go to sleep. Lovely.

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: MonnoDB on May 06, 2019, 05:15:35 PM

Very sweet song @dinnerwithgreedo (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=6829) ! Short and sweet! Enjoyed it very much!

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: Movin Flavour on May 06, 2019, 09:18:10 PM

 Beautiful describes beautiful.

Love the pianos and strings.

So uplifting, with hints of the Beatles.

Top song

Sandeep

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: rightly on May 09, 2019, 09:59:40 AM

Well done that is a nice one.
Like you said, very short. You could build on it, now matter how old.
But then I know how difficult it is to do that.

Nice.

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: tboswell on May 09, 2019, 10:10:57 AM

Really charming stuff, innocent and gentle.

Strings sound nice, maybe would be good to shift em' a little earlier in the midi track as as they speak after the beat a little bit.

Very nice work though, less is more as you have proven to us all again!

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: PaulyX on May 09, 2019, 11:15:20 PM

Lovely Beatlesy vibe, as if sung by the guy from the Flaming Lips.
I thought from the title it would be too cheesy for my cynical tastes, but it wasn’t... it stayed delicate and a bit unpredictable.
Lovely gossamer-winged stuff Greedo. Bravo.

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: Skub on May 10, 2019, 06:27:50 PM

It's a lovely track for sure.

I'd like the lyrical content to expand further,there's great potential there,as there is to take the whole thing further.

It's delightful as it is,but could be so much more.

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: pompeyjazz on May 10, 2019, 09:49:14 PM

What a lovely song. It's just right. I love the piano / vocals combination and some lovely chord changes. Just a fabulous little song. You could expand it if you wanted to but it works as it is  :)

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: digger72 on May 12, 2019, 11:44:42 AM

Hi

That was really nice.
Sweet without sounding corny or cheesy.
Nice blend of instrumentation.

A lovely little album gem.

Digger

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: Sterix on May 18, 2019, 12:26:49 PM

Haunting... I like the shortness (would be good as the final song on an album, just finishing things off).

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: cowparsleyman on June 20, 2019, 12:25:48 PM

I'm with Sterix on this one, great last track on an album, gentle and would sit nicely after a hell for leather rock number.

Nice simplicity, although I wouldn't put the strings in.

Title: Re: Beautiful
Post by: Girlinside on June 24, 2019, 09:29:16 AM

Very poignant agree with all that’s been said ,