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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: Andreas on April 12, 2019, 06:38:58 PM
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Wrote a new song that I decided to do a quick recording of to hear your thoughts about it. I wrote it about a girl from the US that I'm in a long-distance with from Norway, who is the one positive thing in my life despite how rough life gets. Got some Game of Thrones inspired lines in the chorus since we're both massive GoT fans :p
Need some advice though, if there is something I need to change, and I was thinking maybe a fourth verse before the second chorus. My voice was cracking throughout the song, cause I'm a little sick and the sound of my guitar wasn't the best, so that will be fixed before the finished version at least :) Hope you guys like it!
Lyrics:
(V1)
I’ve been looking for a reason
A reason to keep on believing
That someday
It could be you and me
In these times of sorrow
When it feels like there’s no tomorrow
You’ll be there
You’ll always here
(CH)
You’re the song of fire
The melody of my heart
You’re the moon and stars, you’re my guiding light, my guiding light
You’re the song of fire
(V2)
I’ve been questioning life
I just can’t get you off my mind
You keep me awake
You give me hope
(CH)
You’re the song of fire
The melody of my heart
You’re the moon and stars, you’re my guiding light, my guiding light
You’re the song of fire
(Bridge)
Hold me close
I promise you
I’ll never let go
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Massive fan of that chorus. Really great imagery :)
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Thank you so much! :) Was actually really happy with the chorus, but the rest of the song needs a lot of polishing
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It says song removed?
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fixed now @RealKevM (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21324) :)
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Cheers boss. Good melody it's got a real bluesy vibe to it.
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Cheers mate! :) Yeah a little blues kinda style over it, was inspired by Vance Joy and GoT when I wrote it so a little mix there :p Probably gonna change it up a little before I'm happy with it, when I get the time to do so :)
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This is full of soul @Younger Hills (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22101) . Loads of emotion. I think you maybe need to drop the vocals back a bit in the mix but you have a fabulous voice so use it
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Thank you so much @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) :) Thinking too that dropping the vocals back a little could be smart, and also rewriting the lyrics and melody a bit to make it float better!