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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Sterix on March 23, 2019, 08:07:54 PM
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A song I've just written. Only spent about 15 minutes on it. The first line of the chorus just popped into my head. Like the line (and the tune) and just sat down and wrote the rest. The second last chorus is that clichéd old "no music, just clapping and singing" thingamajig.
Wasn't sure whether to call this The Devil's Choice or Out On A Limb. Still not 100%
I did say in my last posted song that I don't usually do "radio" songs. This is one of the very rare exceptions to that rule! :P
THE DEVIL'S CHOICE
CHORUS
I don’t know what you want me to do
Got me out on a limb and it is breaking
Stay or go? Oh which pain do I choose?
It’s the Devil’s own choice that I am making
VERSE
You twist the knife right into my heart
Then you ask for forgiveness and heal all the scars
You pull in close with your lips next to mine
Then you’re turning away and you’re saying goodbye
BRIDGE
You’re pulling strings that you ought not to hold
In your heart blood is hot, in your veins it’s so cold
CHORUS
I don’t know what you want me to do
Got me out on a limb and it is breaking
Stay or go? Oh which pain do I choose?
It’s the Devil’s own choice that I am making
VERSE
You take your aim and your eyes pierce my soul
And I’m under your spell and I’m losing control
You turn around; suddenly there’s a wall
That is too high to climb and too sturdy to fall
BRIDGE
You’re playing games that you ought not to play
But I cannot resist keep on raising the stakes
CHORUS
I don’t know what you want me to do
Got me out on a limb and it is breaking
Stay or go? Oh which pain do I choose?
It’s the Devil’s own choice that I am making
CHORUS
I don’t know what you want me to do
Got me out on a limb and it is breaking
Stay or go? Oh which pain do I choose?
It’s the Devil’s own choice that I am making
CHORUS
I don’t know what you want me to do
Got me out on a limb and it is breaking
Stay or go? Oh which pain do I choose?
It’s the Devil’s own choice that I am making
INSTRUMENTAL FADE OUT
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As always, your lyric is good. Wish I could hear the tune. I've always thought you had tunes in your head for these lyrics. It would be good to hear one.
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I always have tunes for my lyrics - at least when I write them Remembering them afterwards is another thing.
I've actually posted one of my lyrics her with a link to me singing (part of) it. I think is was "Is It Time To Go Home?". I'm pretty sure it was that one.
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This is some amazing writing and a relatable story. Nice work!
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I think it reads better when starting with verse then leave everything as is although maybe repeat bridge and chorus to end, maybe even leave out bridge on first chorus but as always listening back on recording will decide, I like it really good.