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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: shadowfax on March 22, 2019, 09:02:03 AM
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Hi, Finally able to relax in my new studio and get something done...been a long time :)
https://soundcloud.com/knmac/you-got-everything-i-need-by-knmac
On a windy day I can hear, your voice,
In the darkest night there is nowhere to hide,
can't escape from you, in the end there is no choice,
I can only show what I feel inside.
when your love is gone there is nothing to show,
but the show goes on with nowhere to go.
come the wind come the rain you still think it's a game we play,
but you got everything i need,
It's for real it's the truth cannot live without you no more,
you got everything I need.
it's a lonely love that never knows the way,
so I threw the dice that put me in play
I will never know what you need from me,
not untill you find a way to set me free,
when the dice is thrown that's way, it will be yeah,
as the numbers roll for you and for me,
it's a lonely love that never knows the way,
so I threw the dice that put me in play,
as the numbers roll my fate, is cast to you,
now my world is in your hands, what will you do.
come the wind come the rain you still think it's a game we play,
but you got everything i need,
It's for real it's the truth cannot live without you no more,
you got everything I need.
©KNmac
best, Kevin :)
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Hey Kev, another great job by you mate! Highlights for me other than the melody, was the drums and the jangly guitars,(they especially were a lovely change in texture.😄👍🏻)
Only thing I noticed was that the very end hit could have been a bit tighter...tiny nit that though mate.😄🎶👊🏻🎶
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Hey Kev, another great job by you mate! Highlights for me other than the melody, was the drums and the jangly guitars,(they especially were a lovely change in texture.😄👍🏻)
Only thing I noticed was that the very end hit could have been a bit tighter...tiny nit that though mate.😄🎶👊🏻🎶
Hi..ta for commenting, the drums are Jamstix with Charlie as the drummer..didn't tighten the end up because I thought it sounded a bit more..sorta, live..maybe..oh well.
best, Kevin
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Kev,
New studio but still got your trademark sound loud and clear.
Although I actually think its a bit more nuanced with more space in the arrangement and dynamics.
Great rhythmic drive gives it a hypnotic feel when it kicks in at 55 secs.
Catchy
And the solo takes me back to the 80's and Icehouse who were rather fab imho :-)
Great to have you back
:-)
neil
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Hey, welcome back. Looking forward to some wonders from your new studio.
This one bodes very well for the new set up...
Dug the reverbed spangly guitar sounds in the first verse in particular, then the way they contrast with the more industrial synth sounds that come in for the chorus, and the solo just goes feral, man... that's a wild guitar sound, in a very good way. Nice sudden stop not long after it too, which is a big tick for me. So a great track in entirety - pushing against the genre boundaries... immaculately produced but a little bit edgy and wild too.
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It's really great to have you back on the forum Kev. I hope you're fully recovered after the accident. Love the contrast you have here between the jangly yet sparse verse and the hypnotic synth driven chorus. I really found the drum fills a big hook as well, you know the bit with the toms / snare fill. The solo was great, reminded me of something Celtic, Big country kinda stuff. The production is superb as usual. I take it that you recorded this in The "Tardis" Would be interesting to hear your thoughts on how that has made a difference. Background noise is usually a problem as when I try and do vocals there is usually either a party going on / dogs barking/ somebody drilling a large hole / roof repair noise / wood sawing ;D Great stuff Kev
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Yo Kev.
Glad yer not ded mate,stay off those ladders and get a boy in for those jobs..m'kay?
What's not to like about the track? Damned if I know. Sounds great,love those drums. I expect prodigious output,now your booth is a goer. I'd have 10 times the songs if you got around to buying me one! :D
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You guy's.. :-[ thanks for the kind comments about the song..regarding the soundbooth, I've always had a soundbooth because of everything Pomps referred to, I just built them myself 8) having a ready made pro (and much more effective) booth is a big luxury and I need to thank my wife for that...
thanks again guy's.. :)
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Lovely melody, great sound and production - everything in its right place :-). Just top quality stuff! Jealous of your booth!!
K
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Great 80's vibe to your stuff! Love it
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fine voice kev you have your own tone
punchy mix makes me wanna play armchair drums !
nicely urgent gtr
love the drums
hope no ladders were harmed in the making of this piece
good to see your sorted now
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fine voice kev you have your own tone
punchy mix makes me wanna play armchair drums !
nicely urgent gtr
love the drums
hope no ladders were harmed in the making of this piece
good to see your sorted now
ta for the comments Mr Nooms..not a ladder any where near my studio thankfully!!
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I love the intricate guitar playing that starts this and reappears later.
The meatier stuff later is slickly produced and in that respect couldn't be better. Topped off by an assured vocal with its own personality. I haven't heard much of your stuff, but I will listen out for more.
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Crikey. I was forgetting how skillful you are.
Huge production. If you had nothing better to do you could teach it.
Awe inspiring arrangement.
Although this type of music is not for me. I've great respect for your acquired skills, wealth of raw talent and commitment.
Welcome back Shadowfax.
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Crikey. I was forgetting how skillful you are.
Huge production. If you had nothing better to do you could teach it.
Awe inspiring arrangement.
Although this type of music is not for me. I've great respect for your acquired skills, wealth of raw talent and commitment.
Welcome back Shadowfax.
From you my friend, this is rather special..I thank you, Kevin
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Fab song Kev! I was really hooked by the guitar intro right from the beginning - it all took me a little back to the 80s as well, in terms of structure and melody. The production is excellent throughout and the guitar solo is melodic and restrained, perfectly fitting the mood. My only nit is I though the chorus could be even more dramatic e.g. full on strings on power chords, really ripping through it, maybe some backing vox as well.
In any case, it´s a great work of art and a great comeback. A pleasure to listen to you as always.
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Hi Kevin,
I've been away for ages - so good to see so many familiar faces still around and posting.
What a cracking intro. Great tone and melody. Perfect for my mood these days.
Lifts well then develops into a very tasteful solo.
Nice balance of fx on the vocals - sound rich.
Wasn't expecting it to end when it did - could have listened to more!
Lovely listen for my first track back.
All the best,
Digger
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Hi Kev,
As usual a great production from you.
Beautiful song, lovely melody and gripping lyrics. I always like the how you produce your vocals, they make your songs more compelling.
An enjoyable listen.
Sandeep
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Hi Kevin. Welcome back. We are all the beneficiaries of your new studio because This is great. Classic Shadowfax and the production is fantastic. About as good as it can get. Sounds so slick. I like the song and the lyrics. Catchy and immersive. I also like the ending. Neat.
If I had one suggestion for mixing things up a bit, I would change the drum pattern at 3.20 to a X2 speed and perhaps a simpler beat. This would give the song a bouncier finish. Might not be your cup of tea but to my ears it might be worth trying to hear what it sounds like.
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Thank you Micky..your suggestion ( to speed up the drums in the 2nd half ) has improved the track immensely... :)
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messaged the above because I would really apreciate feedback on the new drums..thanks. :)
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Just had another listen with the new drums @shadowfax (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20024) . Great suggestion by @mickyplankton (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20769) Makes a big improvement - Really driving now :)
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Thank you Micky..your suggestion ( to speed up the drums in the 2nd half ) has improved the track immensely... :)
Wow. I’m incredibly flattered that you decided to try it out. I love it!!!!! You’ve actually brought the change in earlier than I suggested. Having listened a few more times I do think it’s great. Although you could have held off until 2.50 or 2.56 to make the change and it would have been equally dramatic. Either way thanks for acting on advice. It definitely is something I would recommend more of us do because little tweaks here and there can massively improve the overall flow of a song.
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messaged the above because I would really apreciate feedback on the new drums..thanks. :)
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I have to confess... I had a listen as soon as you posted the song, Kev...but despite the quality of the writing, singing, playing and production, I did think it was a little pedestrian...so I figured I'd leave it a few days and listen again...
Now I can't quite remember if I was just wrong in the first place or whether the changes to the drums have made a big difference...kicming it along really nicely...probably a bit of both 😃
Anyway...the drums sound excellent...in keeping with the rest of the track...and I do think it's been helped along greatly from what I first heard.
It was a very good listen in the first place... And it really is great to have you back in action!
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Thank you Micky..your suggestion ( to speed up the drums in the 2nd half ) has improved the track immensely... :)
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messaged the above because I would really apreciate feedback on the new drums..thanks. :)
Yeah,good call by MickyP,the drum changes make the whole thing more punchy.
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just to say I was here - love the drive to this one and it builds really well. So many impressive details (guitar sounds, synth bubbles, strategic drum hits). Great to hear from you again.
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Great! Nice build ups through the song and sweet synth bouncing at the back. Like it!
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Yeah, great track. I really like the production. Great drums, and the interplay between the jangly and electric guitar.
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Hello,
It's very well done. The voice is very beautiful and you control the singing well. The composition is great with this alternation of quiet moments and more rock moments.
According to me the mix is good although I was surprised by the arrival of the drums but I got used to it. Personally, I find the sound a little too clean but it is very subjective.
This is a very interesting job!
IS
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Hi,
All the ingredients are here and everything is played, sung and produced perfectly but I have to be honest when I say I think the material is not as strong as some of your previous songs. It's hard to pin down why but it didn't draw me in and sweep me along as your songs normally do. Sorry old chap but honesty is my only currency.
M