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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: RAVANPREET KAUR on February 09, 2019, 11:13:29 AM
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I re-recorded this song that I wrote. Please give me reviews.
https://soundcloud.com/user-823205343-239798303/what-a-feeling
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I really like the composition.
It does sound like your shouting though. Maybe try singing quieter (let the mic do the work) and that may help you reach some of the notes you're going for.
Or just drop the key ;)
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I like the lyrics and concept, but I do agree that you should sing it in a lower key. It seems to be a bit high for you.
Would love to hear what it sounds like in a lower key!
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Hi, yep I agree with the other reviews here... sounds like a good powerful song that could be a real celebration, but you’re probably working your voice too hard on it -too high and too shouty. Take it down a couple of semitones and relax into the delivery, maybe even slow it down a bit. Could be a great track.
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Thank you everyone for your opinions. I 'll try to improve my recording.
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You're exactly the type of songwriter who should be here Ravenpreet. Stick around, do some reviews and keep posting your songs. Your recording, production and songwriting will improve - you'll get plenty of help here.
This song is a good start but I share other comments about the key - please sing it lower. Also, some of the sounds are a bit overloaded which make the final product a little muddy. Record at a lower volume and push up the levels in the mix. You've got the basic structure of the song spot on but you could do with tightening up the rhythm of your singing so the verses and choruses stand out better. Don't forget to post your lyrics as well.
Great start and keep going.
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It's quite an idiosyncratic composition alright, but certainly not lacking in charm.
My comment for improvement, or indeed on starting your next song, would be to try to add a bit more variety and development to the composition. This one does tend to stay on a similar level throughout, and it would benefit from some added interest.
But nice effort and keep on going!