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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: fischermans on January 12, 2019, 12:03:46 PM
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Hello all, this is a song about a lost love.
Everything for love
1. Wounds are deep they never heal
only way to get here was to have nerves out of steel
dealing with the devil praying to god
living in the past wished I could not
Refrain: I did everything for love
Life’s too short and way too fast
All my efforts lost in love
That’s all I have to say above
I did everything, I did everything
I did everything what I did for love.
2. Naked feat wet grass
an emty church a flying dog who passed
unreal not true
all this happens when I dream about you
Refrain: I did everything for love
Life’s too short and way too fast
All my efforts lost in love
That’s all I have to say above
I did everything, I did everything
I did everything what I did for love.
3. Never find freedom never reach home
the drunken man is now part of my own
I feel like Jekyll I feel like Hyde
And I’m always on my last ride
Refrain: I did everything for love
Life’s too short and way too fast
All my efforts lost in love
That’s all I have to say above
I did everything, I did everything
I did everything what I did for love.
© Voice, Words and Guitar Alexander Fisch aka ><(((°> fischermans
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Hi there
Love the lyrics in verse 2!
Nice and unusual.
I also really like the vibrato on your voice on this one, you sing it very well.
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Mournful, thought provoking and honest.
A simple message with a simple arrangement...what more do you need.
Nice work Alexander.
Yodasdad.
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I liked this. I listened to it last night and it was memorable, sad, and pretty. Well written, sung and played.
Lynn
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Lovely honest song with some lovely images being conjured up.
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@fischermans (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19014)
Interesting rhythm! Acoustic guitar chords sound especially rich on this song. Your songs are crying out for a big production. This is a song that has charm in abundance. A song that appears to both rejoice and lament love that is perhaps lost. Very engaging and quite beautiful
Paul
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Absolutely lovely once again Alexander. I don't personally mind the lo fi production but thought that the vocals were a bit off centre. I would be more than happy to produce this one for you if you wanted me to. Anyway I thought that this was excellent
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I love the repeated "I did everything....." line - so plaintive and touching.. Sad and lovely Alexander.. Beautifully delivered...
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@PaulyX (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21034) Thanks a lot for your nice words.
@Yodasdad (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19208) Thank you mate means a lot
@redrhodie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21171) Thank you Lynn
@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) Thank you man
@Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) Wow Paul, made my day
@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) Thank you so much. I will be more than happy if you produce my song. Thanks for this offer. Please PM what I have to do. :D
@MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820) Thank you Karen, means a lot for me.
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This is what I really go for, stripped back acoustic with great vocals. The repetition really works.
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This is pretty solid. I listened to it then walked away for a bit and its been on repeat in my head. Thats always a good sign.
I would consider dropping the line 'thats all I have to say above'
It isn't adding anything, and may be taking away.
Pompeyjazz observed the vox panned left weirdness...i agree with him...center up that vox. If the guitar is in the way, pan it instead.
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@The Portrait Piano (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20602) Thank you, makes me happy you like it
@mikek (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20884) Thank you for listening. Will think about dropping the line 'thats all I have to say above' ;)
Alexander
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A beautiful ballad.
Some great guitars and thought provoking lyrics.
Well sung, a great listen.
Sandeep
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Yo Alexander.
This is a fine example of a song which needs nothing,it stands alone. It's a strong and melodic composition.
Fair enough,someone with the skills could polish the production,but the raw version is great.
This is a songwriter's forum and this is a damned fine song. 8)
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I agree 100% It's an absolutely beautiful song and some songs are just meant to be left as they are :)
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Hi Alex,
I agree with Davy - the song is the thing here. We all get hung up on the production side because that's the easy, nerdy stuff but the real skill is in the songwriting. This is a lovely melodic song, beautifully delivered and the playing is perfect for the song. Wonderful.
M
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@Movin Flavour (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20528)
Thank you very much
@Skub (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20061)
Yes Sir made my day
@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Thank you so much
@montydog (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18653)
Oh happy day, oh happy day ;)
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Love the sound of that acoustic, I dub it the guitar of doom!
Really good vocals as well but there is something fishy (haha!) going on with the processing of it. It sounds dry but still is very 3 dimensional, on phones it's located somewhere behind my right ear. Have no clue why,, :-)
Anyway, dragged me in, something that seldom happens to me with 1+1 songs so well done!