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Title: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 01, 2019, 09:53:35 PM
3 yrs ago my wife bought me a little project studio all set up for me in spare room for my 50th  cos i loved playing music!.. which i  avnt done for more than 13yrs   anyways i really couldn't get my head round this computer recording biz  so its taken me nearly 3 yrs too ave the confidence too put any tracks that sounded half decent   so being new year  and with a bad hangover i uploaded one   ha ha  hope you enjoy   all the best   tony


https://soundcloud.com/tony-mcvey/give-me-a-night
Title: Re: give me a night
Post by: pompeyjazz on January 01, 2019, 10:12:03 PM
What a fab present from your wife Tony. Would she like to live with me 😂 This is great stuff. Reminded me a bit of Tom Petty and some Oasis thrown in there. My only minor crit would be that the M8 vocals are a bit too loud. I'm guessing that you recorded that at a different time. Other than that,  top work  :)
Title: Re: give me a night
Post by: macker71165 on January 01, 2019, 10:19:02 PM
Cheers jazz   just taken me ages too get used too this daw malarky   but thnx for your feedback bud....i did do the m8 vox at a different time ha ha   am from liverpool  so not far away from the oasis boys..    ave a good new your   peace out
Title: Re: give me a night
Post by: pompeyjazz on January 01, 2019, 10:41:08 PM
The DAW malarky will always keep you occupied. I think you've done really well man. My advice would be, stick to your style and sound which you obviously have, learn a bit of stuff about eq and compression but don't get bogged down with all the bullshit stuff about perfect production,  unless that's what you want of course. It's a learning game and you know what your lugs like so go for it lah  :)
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: fischermans on January 02, 2019, 06:21:51 AM
Hello @macker71165 (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20758)
A nice song may be a bit overloaded with sounds (lead guitar) for me but all in all a nice listen. Well done Alexander
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: Viscount Cramer & His Orchestra on January 02, 2019, 07:58:41 AM
You've done ok with the mix Tony....my first DAW experiments were dreadful.

The song is fine...picks up admirably for the chorus which is good. Pleasant riff....yes a bit Pettyish (which is fine by me). Like the way the guitar changes to something a bit more melodic to underpin the chorus. Middle 8 break is nice....short but nice. Guitar break is fine too. All in all structure of the song is impeccable!

Only thing I couldn't get away from is how the line 'there's something going on around here' reminded me of something!! Even has the same melodic feel to Joe's where it goes down at the end......not exactly the same but you might have a tough time in front of the jury on that one.
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: PaulyX on January 02, 2019, 08:22:56 AM
Hey Tony, welcome, great first post.
It’s got plenty of lip-curling attitude, a nice distinct chorus, and a middle 8 that carves it’s own path, all adding up to a satisfying Brit-rock whole.
I thought the mix was pretty good too.
Looking forward to hearing more of your stuff.
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 02, 2019, 08:03:59 PM
Thnx everyone for your kind words   and  advice     loved reading all your comments you have each given me a few ideas   on making things better!  And  i now look forward too putting some more tracks up!           

             Peace out    ..tony
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: pompeyjazz on January 02, 2019, 10:10:31 PM
Nice one Tony. It's just so encouraging to see a new face on here trying something out as it is intimidating putting your goods on display. Get involved,  write a few reviews,  and you'll get lots of tips and tricks  :)
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 02, 2019, 10:20:24 PM
Nice one Tony. It's just so encouraging to see a new face on here trying something out as it is intimidating putting your goods on display. Get involved,  write a few reviews,  and you'll get lots of tips and tricks  :)
thnx jazz    will do buddy
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: Neil C on January 04, 2019, 10:50:39 AM
Tony,
Welcome, cool, catchy mid-paced rock.
Good riff on the verse and then you correctly milk the chorus for all its worth.
Thoughts: The middle 8 is really nice but sounds too loud compared to the rest of the track.
Look forward to your contributing on the forum
 :)
neil 
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: Movin Flavour on January 04, 2019, 03:23:55 PM
Hi Tony,

If my wife gave me a present like that, I'd still be married.

A great first post... I like the production, you've obviously being practising.

Interesting genre it's like a mix between Joe Jackson and  an Indie guitar vibe.

Like this a lot.

Sandeep

Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 05, 2019, 11:40:00 AM
Hi Tony,

If my wife gave me a present like that, I'd still be married.

A great first post... I like the production, you've obviously being practising.

Interesting genre it's like a mix between Joe Jackson and  an Indie guitar vibe.

Like this a lot.

Sandeep
  thnx fella
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 05, 2019, 11:40:35 AM
Tony,
Welcome, cool, catchy mid-paced rock.
Good riff on the verse and then you correctly milk the chorus for all its worth.
Thoughts: The middle 8 is really nice but sounds too loud compared to the rest of the track.
Look forward to your contributing on the forum
 :)
neil
thnx buddy
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: crystalsuzy on January 05, 2019, 12:34:34 PM
Big welcome Toni and what a great first song :) It very well arranged and I thought the mix sounded fine. Your vocals sounded great as well.
Would be nice to have the lyrics posted. It has all the elements of a good rock song and I liked the middle 8  :)
DAW'S can be a little intimidating at first, but once you take control, they can be so much fun  ;D Can't wait to hear more from you  :)
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 05, 2019, 12:53:06 PM
Big welcome Toni and what a great first song :) It very well arranged and I thought the mix sounded fine. Your vocals sounded great as well.
Would be nice to have the lyrics posted. It has all the elements of a good rock song and I liked the middle 8  :)
DAW'S can be a little intimidating at first, but once you take control, they can be so much fun  ;D Can't wait to hear more from you  :)
thank you
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: Skub on January 05, 2019, 06:07:58 PM
Yo Tony.

I love the sound on those guitars and the vocals suit the song just fine.

There is a bump in volume during the middle eight which jars a little and when your song is a hit,you may get in trouble with Joe Jackson with the line and melody of 'Something going on around here'  ;)

A hugely enjoyable track,well done you.  8)
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: PaulAds on January 06, 2019, 10:16:58 AM
A sound investment from Mrs Macker.

Really good song...I loved the middle 8 in particular.

It'll be great to have more of this kind of thing appearing on the forum...it's right up my street...I hope you enjoy it here and stick around to share your songs with us.

You've certainly made a great first impression  :)
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: adamfarr on January 06, 2019, 11:04:47 AM
Super nice rocker! Everything sounding really good here - great guitar sounds, tasteful backing vocals, lead guitar giving the chorus a real
lift, bass giving support.


The middle 8 absolutely should contrast with the rest and the songwriting part is spot on - just the levels/effects could be more consistent.


Great to have you around, and good for Mrs M for getting you back on it.
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 06, 2019, 03:37:13 PM
Yo Tony.

I love the sound on those guitars and the vocals suit the song just fine.

There is a bump in volume during the middle eight which jars a little and when your song is a hit,you may get in trouble with Joe Jackson with the line and melody of 'Something going on around here'  ;)

A hugely enjoyable track,well done you.  8)
thnx buddy
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 06, 2019, 03:37:46 PM
Super nice rocker! Everything sounding really good here - great guitar sounds, tasteful backing vocals, lead guitar giving the chorus a real
lift, bass giving support.


The middle 8 absolutely should contrast with the rest and the songwriting part is spot on - just the levels/effects could be more consistent.  thnx bud


Great to have you around, and good for Mrs M for getting you back on it.
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 06, 2019, 03:42:28 PM
A sound investment from Mrs Macker.

Really good song...I loved the middle 8 in particular.

It'll be great to have more of this kind of thing appearing on the forum...it's right up my street...I hope you enjoy it here and stick around to share your songs with us.

You've certainly made a great first impression  :)
thnx a lot bud 
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: mikek on January 06, 2019, 03:59:07 PM
Thats a pretty good song and the recording is good.  The melody is memorable, has a nice hook and the song is well constructed. It has enough variation throughout the journey to keep listeners engaged. Overall its the complete package every songwriter is going for.

Nit picks...

at a few places, especially noticeable early on, the guitar timing gets out of sync with the rhythm section...(very slight out of pocket feeling.)

The guitar solo kind of falls flat. It needs another take with a bit more feeling. It should really say something, but with an understated approach...Elliott Easton (the Cars) is an expert at this.

Good song! Be proud of it.
Title: Re: give me a night (first song post)
Post by: macker71165 on January 07, 2019, 01:44:00 PM
Thats a pretty good song and the recording is good.  The melody is memorable, has a nice hook and the song is well constructed. It has enough variation throughout the journey to keep listeners engaged. Overall its the complete package every songwriter is going for.

Nit picks...

at a few places, especially noticeable early on, the guitar timing gets out of sync with the rhythm section...(very slight out of pocket feeling.)

The guitar solo kind of falls flat. It needs another take with a bit more feeling. It should really say something, but with an understated approach...Elliott Easton (the Cars) is an expert at this.

Good song! Be proud of it.
thnx  for your kind words  and feedback buddy