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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: pompeyjazz on December 16, 2018, 05:37:35 PM
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Wow ! It's time for the last song submission of the year already. It seems this year has gone incredibly quickly again.
This one is about the dreaded "D" disease :(
I would like to say a huge thank you to all on the forum for your help, support and friendship over the last year :)
All the very best
John :)
Imaginary Friends
Your imaginary friends, with whom you spend your time, exchanging odds and ends
You've become the best of friends and spend a lot of time, until it never ends
You set the table, invite them round for dinner, sharing the best of times
Your imaginary friends are waving you goodbye
Some imaginary friends, just seem to eat your time and drive you round the bend
When they're leaving you behind, you sit at them and stare, and glaze into their eyes
At six o'clock, the key turns in the lock and someone is standing there
No imaginary friend, a world without a care
All of this world there are problems
Let's see if we can work it out
Oh We've got to do it
Oh yes we must
Your imaginary friends, with whom you spend your time, exchanging odds and ends
You've become the best of friends and spend a lot of time, until you meet again
You set the table, invite them round for dinner, sharing the best of times
Your imaginary friends are waving you goodbye
(c) Bradley - 2018
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So...who could write a song about dementia, well it just so happens that you seem to be able to write a song about anything!! I'm lucky though, my imaginary friends do the production on my songs so no problemo LOL ;D hope your creative streak never ends John..
nice geetar break mate.
best, Kevin :)
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Hey John - lovely melody here and piano sometimes ominous and sometimes lighter, with lots of tension.
I wasn't too sure about the heavy chords in the first few verse lines, I think maybe fewer of them could work better.
Verses really interesting and honed. To me the "All of this world" part felt a bit in two minds: I was kind of expecting a really strong climactic moment or a slightly wild ad lib and ended up a bit of a mixture of both. Guitar solo was Harrison-esque, though, cool!
Impressive production, I think suited the subject really well.
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Yay!
We've had tne benefit of enjoying another years worth of inspiring stuff from you, Mr PJ...thanks!
This is pretty cool too... Wistful and slightly confused in it's outlook... A perfect setting for the subect. Your subjects are always fascinating and show an enthusiasm for understanding and exploration... which sounds a bit arty-farty but absolutely isn't.
Your friends are very real. You are a giant of the forum :)
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Wow, this is like you've been asked to write an epic number for the likes of Robbie Williams, totally surprising. I like how, without an obvious chorus in the song structure, you have made the whole thing sound like a chorus, and the repeated 'imaginary friends' refrain becomes the punch.
And you are certainly knocking it out in that Mid 8!
Interesting subject matter inventively approached. An entertaining number to close a prolific year of songwriting for you, you've brought me much enjoyment with your diverse outpourings and irrepressible energy! ;)
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Beautiful, delicate, touching, tastefully done. This is really top drawer songwriting by anyone's standards. Loved the solo, and as always production is very strong.
John, I wish you all the best for Christmas and 2019. If I had one wish for 2019 it would be to be struck by inspiration as much as you!
Cheers
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An emotive subject.
Clever lyrics.
Loved the piano playing and also thought the guitar solo was excellent.
Not sure about the drums rolls at the end, they were good, but not sure if they fit in the song.
An enjoyable listen.
Sandeep
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Hi John,
Another Pompey classic, I really don't know how you keep turning them out so quickly and manage to keep up the quality, keep 'em coming
Cheers, Mikey
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Great stuff Pompey,
Don't know if it was intentional but I was remind a fair bit of a little known band called 'The Beatles' during this, you might not have heard of them though.
You hit the high notes pretty well yourself in this.
You've masked the topic quite well with the lyrics but still kept it relevant.
Nice production as usually.
Well done and a Merry Christmas sir.
Yodasdad
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Thank you so much all :)
@shadowfax (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20024) Kev - It seems that your imaginary friends have got their production chops sorted :)
@adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124) See what you mean about the M8 Adam - Glad you like the guitar solo, it was a Guitar Rig "George Harrison" amp preset :)
@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253) Gee, thanks Paul, I was going for that wistful kind of wonky feel to this one so glad it came over - Always respect your feedback :)
@MichaelA (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21274) As long as Robbie Williams isn't singing it ;D Really appreciate your listens and reviews over the year Michael. I could stick to a tried and tested formula but I do like to experiment - Variety and all that stuff :)
@Bill Saunders (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18525) Wow Bill, I'm absolutely knocked out - Thank you so much. All the very best to you and yours for a productive 2019 as well :)
@Movin Flavour (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20528) Cheers Sandeep - See what you mean about the drum rolls - I enjoyed working on the guitar solo on this one ;D
@Mikey (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20986) I don't know where they come from myself at times, I guess that's down to having had a long break from writing
@Yodasdad (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19208) I haven't heard of that band - I'll have to check them out ;D I guess it's impossible to not sound a bit like the music that influenced you in your early life. I just embrace that :)
Thanks all once again
John
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lovely intro and vocql melody thst takes some unexpected turns. A lityle Bond -like I think. such a cool track Pompey. I hear you growing as a singwriter with each new song.
Paul
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Nice one John, I love it.
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Hey @pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269) - I just loved this - lyric and subject matter aside, I really enjoyed the melody, delivery, instrumentation etc. Taking the lyrics into account, it raised it a to another level for me, as my mother has Alzheimers.. so very poignant and relevant for me and I just love how you handled it. Wonderfully done.... I expect this one won't leave me any time soon....
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Great Fabsy-stuff PJ, very nice build throughout. I like the piano (plodding along but in a very nice way) and the sweet guitar solo in particularly.
Lyrically too a very nice treatment - you've told us it is about dementia and that makes a lot of sense once you know it, but I also like the way you don't spell that out too bluntly in the lyrics (they are open to interpretation and it could be about anyone who is a bit of a dreamer or fantasist I thought). A delicate and nuanced way to deal with a heavy subject matter I thought.
Have a great Xmas.
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Very lovely melody and good lyrics. I like the song, the good production and the good vocal job. Nothing to criticise.
Merry Christmas Alexander
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@Wicked Deeds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19231) Cheers Paul - Bond eh ? I hadn't thought of that
@RealKevM (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21324) Thanks for your support as ever Kev
@MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820) Thanks for your wonderful comments Karen. I hope your mum is doing ok. It's a tough old road
@PaulyX (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21034) Thanks Paul, I didn't want to ram it down people's throats so glad you thought that the lyrics were open to interpretation. Have a fab Xmas yourself :)
@fischermans (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19014) Thanks for the review Alex, much appreciated
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Hi,
I'm getting the Bond thing as well or at least the title song of a film. It does have that epic quality about it although the subject matter is anything but. Blinding lead electric guitar. Your vocals are superb and this is melodically such a strong song. I would love to have this boldness and sure touch when coming up with arrangements - you are very skilled at building the song arrangement.
Top quality again from you.
M
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Yo pomps.
Mighty good to hear a song from yourself.
Lyrically sublime and your vocals really took a step up on this track. The whole idea works well together.
Did I mention I loved your voice on this. The M8 blew me away. 8)
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John,
So I missed this. Smart lyrically and I like the mid paced chord progression. You have a knack of going from major to minor and vice verse which make your songs distinct.
Good vocals and I like the solo too.
Small though, just wasn't sure about the drum patten at the end, a bit to rock for the tune imho.
good work
:)
neil