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Title: Wild One
Post by: Yodasdad on December 15, 2018, 08:53:20 PM
Hi All,

It's been a while since I posted a track here, in fact this is the first song I've written in about 8 months, largely prompted by listening to some of the quality chooons floating around on here.

https://soundcloud.com/my-idiom/wild-one-m-blair-2018

I'm usually quite pleased with the sound that the soundcloud compression adds to my tracks, but not this time I don't think - loses something in the high end to me.

Any feedback is welcomed and thanks in advance to anyone who listens.

Wild One © M Blair 2018

V1
She walks out of a Thunderstorm
No one ever see’s where the clouds come from
I don’t care, she was put here just for me

Wide eyes and a hot damn smile
And a look that says baby I can go all night
She can dance, she just dances in the street

C
All of the red lights turnin green
This girl is a wild one she’s a different league
She’s up on the redline it’s down to me
Can I compete with a wild one – Live it up with a wild one

V2
Getting late but the nights still young
Cocked and loaded, yeah girl we’re gonna have some fun
Take my hand and we’ll dance till the mornin light
 
Fast feet and those hips that thrill
Like a fever rushin over me you’ll make me ill
But I’m fine, got some time I’m gonna be alright

Mid 8
Tell me in the mornin will you know my name
Or is this just a one night stand then walk of shame
I guess there’s nothing I can really do
But revel in the moment with a girl like you
I’m just glad I spent some time with one of the wild ones
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: shadowfax on December 15, 2018, 09:49:09 PM
Super song ...worth the wait i reckon, lead guitar seemed a bit sort of..skinny but no matter..super song mate!!!
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: pompeyjazz on December 15, 2018, 10:02:00 PM
Yo ! @Yodasdad (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19208) Great to see you knocking some new stuff out after all this time. This is refreshingly upbeat and full of energy. Your vocals are always amazing. How do you get those high notes ? You looked like you had fun in your shower as well  ;D Top quality man  :)
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: crystalsuzy on December 16, 2018, 03:29:58 AM
WOW<that is an amazing track! You must have been bursting at the seams to get this one out, after an 8 month sabbatical :)
Beautiful vocals :) Lot's of energy and great melody! Everything about this song sounds fantastic to me  :)
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: Jambrains on December 17, 2018, 08:48:33 PM
Hell yes! That's the way we like it!  :D :D :D :D
Really love the vocals on this one and the rest of the performance is up to par.
A little L/R imbalance in the mix (or a tad to wide stereo image?) but apart form that the mix is fine.
Well done, going for another spin. And another...
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: PaulAds on December 17, 2018, 10:12:00 PM
I read through the lyrics before I had a chance to listen to this one...which was a bit of a shame as they're probably not the highlight of the song (not that there's anything wrong with them...it's just probably not always the best way to approach a review) the vocals take the biscuit again for me...as they invariably do in your songs. You're an excellent singer.

It's a lively foot-tapper...and has far more appeal than I could ever dream of generating...it's just somehow not my kind of thing. Since my break from the forum, I found myself gravitating more towards stuff that connects with me...it doesn't mean for a moment that I don't appreciate the talent on display...which is very much in evidence here...and I certainly wouldn't suggest anyone ever pitched anything in my direction.

Is it that it's too confident and/or ambitious? I don't know...it's a very well put together song. Mix is excellent...playing is very good. I wasn't particularly keen on the drum sound...but that's nowt, really.

It's very good...it just rang some kind of alarm bell somewhere in my head. Please take no notice of me  :)
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: Movin Flavour on December 18, 2018, 09:21:01 PM
Wow ....that is singing.

So much energy, this song should have been played in the Breakfast Club.

Some excellent  guitars.

A great track.

Sandeep
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: montydog on December 24, 2018, 02:31:38 PM
Hi,

Fantastic vocal - you are a great rock vocalist. Loved the production and instrumentation - loads of energy and punch. Sounds like a hit record on US FM radio. I thought the vocal on the bridge was exceptional.

My only crit is that the first three quarters of the verse melody reminds me a little too closely of  "Sweet Child Of Mine" by Guns n Roses.

Great track though.

M
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: MonnoDB on December 26, 2018, 06:20:00 PM
Very slick production and arrangement. Really like that vocal effect (echo) in the chorus. Shades of Axl in the vocal - only I like your voice a lot more!! Wow that guitar playing is awesome!! Fantastic drive to the track - loved it @Yodasdad (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19208)  Hope to hear more soon now you’re producing after your little break!
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: Inanité_sonore on December 26, 2018, 10:04:19 PM
Hello,
 
I feel the influence of the Beatles, that's a compliment. It's a very good job. The melody is very nice and the guitars mix well. You sing very well.

To be constructive I would say that the sound of the drums remains to work.

Otherwise, I like it !

See you,

IS
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: fischermans on December 27, 2018, 06:15:33 AM
Wow, great song. Very hunting lead guitar. I like it very much.
Only nitpicking is that I felt the voice sometimes swims in the rest of the music when you know what i mean. It should be more in front for my ears but this is may only me.
Well done Alexander
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: Mikey on December 27, 2018, 04:45:54 PM
Hi @Yodasdad (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19208)

Great song, the energy builds up nicely and the mix is good and punchy, great rock sound, is that a wah pedal on the solo? Andy hates it when I use mine as he says its a pain to mix, but some songs just demand it and this is one of them. One minor point, I would have tightened up the timing on a couple of the vocal lines, but maybe you were going for the slightly off beat sound. The vocal performance itself is great, as is the playing, looking forward to the next one.

Cheers, Mikey
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: Skub on December 28, 2018, 08:40:09 PM
Yo YoDa.

A classy pop offering. Has a lynyrd skynyrd feel at the start,then the power pop comes in for a surprise.

Great vocals and the song is tight,mix sounds fine to my clapped out ears.

Good to hear you still on the ball man.  8)
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: Neil C on January 02, 2019, 11:51:56 AM
Great intro, with the guitars shimmering. Very Tom Petty :-)
Liking the US radio rock feel of the tune. The sun is shining and I just want to hop into a Mustang and drive somewhere - in my imagery head.
Like the key change to the solo which was really neat, and when you start to include secondary vocals towards the end, Fab.
Thoughts: I'm not convinced about the drum sound it a bit rock thuddy and more bv's - perhaps proper pared 'wild one' over the chorus.
anyway a enjoyable 4 mins, thanks
 :)
neil

Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: PaulyX on January 03, 2019, 05:38:03 AM
Welcome back from sabbatical YD.
Storming track to return with.  It sounded very commercial and radio-ready to me, and plays to several of your many strengths - especially them impossible high notes towards the end... just wow.  I liked the way it never really flags throughout - it starts punch from the first bar and then just continues that way, and that key change is very clever.
OK, trying to drag myself out of sabbatical here too... Here's to 2019 eh.
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: Mutrins on January 03, 2019, 12:13:15 PM
Top notch production. Great vocal.

Awesome guitars!!!

really strong track. sounds like a rock hit to me!
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: Binladeda on January 03, 2019, 03:36:56 PM

 Hey YD.....been a while ;D ;D

 Did anything come of that TV thing you were talking about...
 Look at that....my long term memory is working fine.  The doctor will be pleased ;D ;D

 Great song mate. Great energy. Love the way it builds at the end....nice guitar playing.
 Especially like the rhythm playing.  The vox and production definitely give that
 American Epic 80's Rock flavour.....Loved it ;D ;D

Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: adamfarr on January 08, 2019, 08:51:42 AM
Boom - such energy in those vocals, you really show off your range and power.


It's a fun and infectious song - I think I prefer your more modern productions but it sounds like you're pretty versatile and can pull anything off.
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: tboswell on January 08, 2019, 10:52:28 AM
Really like it, catch and rocking and real fun. Lovely guitar work all the way through and really good vocals too.

The only thing that concerned me was the drums, which sounded a little separated from everything else. Hard to put my finger on what it was. Might need to compression on them or could be they are dry when everything else is wetter. Might benefit from a little knob twiddling...

But that's just nit picking, super track!
Title: Re: Wild One
Post by: Yodasdad on January 13, 2019, 12:16:22 PM
Time for a few overdue thank you's.

@shadowfax (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20024)
Thanks for listening - take on board what you said about the guitar, always good to have a second pair of ears on things.

@pompeyjazz (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20269)
Very tight pants mate and frequent kicks in the nuts from Mrs Yodasdad. Thanks for commenting.

@crystalsuzy (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18947)
Thanks for the positive comments, I did have some pent up ideas to get out.

@Jambrains (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19875)
Thanks for listening and particularly mentioning the imbalance. That's why this forum can be so invaluable.

@PaulAds (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20253)
Take on board all of what you've said. I agree the lyrics aren't going to win any awards. If I could writes songs, as opposed to just music, without the need for lyrics I would be so much happier. I find them so difficult and tend not to really hear them in other peoples work. I'm pretty much just about the music, no matter how much I try to focus.

@Movin Flavour (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20528)
Thanks Sandeep. I wish I could actually play guitar, it'd be so much quicker than programming them.

@montydog (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18653)
That is high praise coming from an acomplished writer and producer like yourself, thanks.
I hadn't made the GnR connection myself but I'll take it as a compliment. That SCoM is an awesome track, if somewhat overplayed these days.

@MonnoDB (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19820)
Thank you for your positive comments. As I said above, I only wish I could actually play guitar. Too much else to do these days to be learning now though, maybe one day.

@Inanité_sonore (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=22286)
Thank you for commenting. I take on your comment about the drums, something for me to focus on going forward.

@fischermans (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19014)
Thanks Alexander, useful observations for me to work on in future, musch appreciated.

@Mikey (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20986)
it is a wah pedal, well the effect of one anyway, good ears! I take on board what you say about the vocal timing. I think I've got a bit of a latency issue going on with my audio as everything sounds spot on when I'm tracking it but not so much on playback.

@Skub (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20061)
Thanks - Your ears can't be that clapped out mate, you do a fine job of churning your own stuff out to a high standard.

@Neil C (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18856)
Thanks for commenting. If I remember rightly the key change for the solo was a ctually a return to the original key after a change for the mid 8. It actually sound a bit off to me for the first few listens, until I got used to it. I'll learn from what you said about the drums and BV's

@PaulyX (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21034)
Thanks for your positive words. I haven't been around for a while so hadn't noticed you were having a bit of a break to but get back on that horse mate, you've got plenty of talent that should be on display.

@Mutrins (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20583)
The production on your tracks is Top notch mate, mine is....getting there. If you ever fancy producing one of my songs let me know. Thanks for listening.

@Binladeda (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18620)
Thanks for your positive observations. The Tv thing..nah...I'm still waiting..but as I saw it on TV and I wasn't in it, I'm guessing I could be waiting a looong time. I don't think I had the right X Factor style sob story, which seemed to be what the researcher was fishing for.

@adamfarr (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20124)
Thanks Adam, I do like to try going whichever way the music takes me, sometimes it works, sometimes not so much.

@tboswell (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20223)
Thanks for your comments, I take on board what you're saying about the drums and can use your observations to improve this. I do like knob twiddling...

Thanks everyoneand Happy new year by the way.

Yodasdad