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Songwriter Forum => Lyrics => Topic started by: Veance on September 08, 2018, 10:02:48 AM
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I'm trying to write a new song.
It's about a man, completely made up ;), who's in love with a woman. But he has doubts about her sincerity towards him.
This is the part of wich i'm sure enough to let it loose here.
Some pointers please?
Is this grammatically correct?
What do you feel when reading these lines...
In times of despair
Capo 2
Am E7 Am E7 Am
Am E7
How could I know
Am E7
This love isn't fair
Am C E7
Like a mirage on the truth
Am E7
How would I know
Am E7
if love wasn't there
Am C E7
I wouldn't have any clue
Dm E7
Blind as I am
Am E7
I've fallen for you
Dm C E7
But I can't believe that you're true
Dm E7 Dm Am
I mustn't believe anything that you say
Dm E7 Am
And look behind the face you display
Am E7
How will I know
Am E7
How much do you care
Am E7 Am
How can I get close to you
Dm Am E7 Am C E7 Am
Dm E7 Am Am C E7 Am
How could I know
Am I merely a thing
'cause sometimes you come as you go
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Hi.
I think lyrically it's quite straight forward.
I think it's fine but I'd consider changing
The 2nd and and 5 th line to. ...That love isn't fair for both lines.
I like the theme, it resonates.
Hope it's far from autobiographical.
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far from indeed.
I always think I exaggerate to much. That the story I bring is over the top.