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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: SlavaB on July 22, 2018, 04:37:53 PM
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Hi guys,
Have not seen you all for very long time, had a baby recently and under a new emotions i wrote this
https://soundcloud.com/slavab/slava-b-painful-love
Please check it out and let me know your thoughts.
Lyrics available on soundcloud.
Thank you.
Best Regards,
Slava B.
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Hey Slava,
Another great one! Really like all your songs that you've posted, and this didn't disappoint. I have a question about the word Pike. Did you mean Pike, which is a kind of fish? I think the word spike would work really well there, and make me think the rose's thorns were really brutal. Pike is kinda funny, though.
Other than that, it's pretty awesome. Congratulations on your new baby!
Oh, edit, I see a pike is also a weapon I was not familiar with. Haha. Sorry, I get it now.
But the image of a fish in your hands is very funny.
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Hey Slava,
Another great one! Really like all your songs that you've posted, and this didn't disappoint. I have a question about the word Pike. Did you mean Pike, which is a kind of fish? I think the word spike would work really well there, and make me think the rose's thorns were really brutal. Pike is kinda funny, though.
Other than that, it's pretty awesome. Congratulations on your new baby!
Oh, edit, I see a pike is also a weapon I was not familiar with. Haha. Sorry, I get it now.
But the image of a fish in your hands is very funny.
Hi Redrhodie,
Thank you, im very pleased you like it. Also thank you for such a complimentary feedback. Oh my god i think i made it wrong, for some reason i though that "pikes" are actually the thorns. This is what meant to be there, those thorns from roses :)
Thank you for pointing on something that does not sound right, i really appreciate.
Best Regards,
Slava B.
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Hi Slava. Good to hear from you again and all the best with young Slava. This is great mate. Your trademark vocals and sound but moving in a slightly different direction. Your production is sounding real good. Another Slava smasher :)
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NOT BAD MY MAN! Stay metal bro!! I loved the intro a lot and the up beat-ness and especially with the synth you have something unique! When the vocals came in I just wanted you to let loose. maybe thats just my style. I love metal music but this was a little different, but that by no means means that it was bad! You record well, I would say don't be afraid to turn the guitar down and drums up. trust me. people love to feel the beat and you have a great one in this song! well done my dude!
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Yo Slava.
I dig the Rammstein influences,the format work well! 8)
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Hi Slava. Good to hear from you again and all the best with young Slava. This is great mate. Your trademark vocals and sound but moving in a slightly different direction. Your production is sounding real good. Another Slava smasher :)
Hi Pompeyjazz, thank you and yes it is a great time apart from night time :D Thank you so much for your feedback it is always nice to know your opinion. For some reason the more I produce the further down the different direction I go, when I wrote my first track ever was that one https://soundcloud.com/slavab/slava-b-where-the-hell which is ,I believe a kind of sub genre of pop rock or something … However I hope im moving into a right direction as my soundcloud start seemed to be improving and that soundtrack painful love has got over 4.5k listens over the last 3 days which is to be honest with you... surprise me a lot :P
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NOT BAD MY MAN! Stay metal bro!! I loved the intro a lot and the up beat-ness and especially with the synth you have something unique! When the vocals came in I just wanted you to let loose. maybe thats just my style. I love metal music but this was a little different, but that by no means means that it was bad! You record well, I would say don't be afraid to turn the guitar down and drums up. trust me. people love to feel the beat and you have a great one in this song! well done my dude!
Thank you Robert, my missues says the same thing in regards to vocal. Thank you for your feedback and tips to improve sound, im taking your tip on board. Thank you.
Best Regards,
Slava B.
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Yo Slava.
I dig the Rammstein influences,the format work well! 8)
Hi skub,
have seen your comment and your like on soundcloud, I appreciate it massively.
Thank you for a kind feedback, Love it.
Best Regards,
Slava B.
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Hi Slava congratulations on the baby
Not really my style - I just dont do this kind of thing - so It’s not just you , maybe I missed the boat on that .
But keep on because there’s plenty who do like it so you are obviously doing something right
Katie xxx
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Hi Slava congratulations on the baby
Not really my style - I just dont do this kind of thing - so It’s not just you , maybe I missed the boat on that .
But keep on because there’s plenty who do like it so you are obviously doing something right
Katie xxx
Hi Katie thank you.
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A short video from yesterdays sound check. Had a gig yesterday, was a pleasure to perform this track :)
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i like the humour in this
not really my style, for me it's Ramstein
Very nice production though