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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Jzr171 on June 19, 2018, 12:23:55 AM
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The single off of my album. It has a haunting psychedelic feel to it. Almost like a carnival themed nightmare.
https://soundcloud.com/thenamelessvb/dream-3?in=thenamelessvb/sets/lifecycles
Let me know what you think. The album it comes from has a wide variety of sounds from acoustic folk to pop rock. But there is that psych rock feel encompassing it all.
The album itself if about going through a lifetime knowing you can be born again. Took a year but it's something that has a lifetime of meaning to me.
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Hello!
Firstly I would really start of by even out the volume of the intrumentals and the vocals. Right now you are soaring way over the track. I like the idea of double tracking vocals. But to make it sound even smoother, you should choose one to have as a main track and it will sound more full. I am also a big listener to the modern age psychedelic rock, and if you are looking for that sound, I say, add some layered synths in the mix!
I like the "Being for the benefit for Mr. Kite"-theme (or carnival, I suppose it's the same thing really). You could really make something more out of this track!
/Tommy
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Really like the Psych style. The drums are great. Im not the best mixer by any means but in my opinion the drums are a little drowned out in the mix. The lead synth at around 2 minutes is so sick. Keep it up mate.
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I think you got what you wanted.
A bit like physco Specials. Love the discordant mellotrone and guitar solo.
Only suggestion I have is the tambourine patten appears out of synch on occasions.
Good look.
:)
neil
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Hey man I really like this track, really got that creepy 'carnival' theme going. I also listened to some of your other songs, which I like even more! You have a really great feel for instrumentals. I'll take my time to listen to your lyrics some more. But I really love this. I'll be sure to listen to your album in full. Keep it up man, you've got a new follower in me! (Themis on soundcloud btw :) )
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Hey Nameless....
Everybody will be disappointed if I don't mention your tendency to sing "woodjoo" and "don'tchoo" instead of "would you" and "don't you". If you had provided lyrics, I would have pointed out the exact examples.
Other than that, I'll leave the crits to the experienced mixer people here, since I know nothing about that stuff. You've gotten some good ideas already, I see.
I'm no good at identifying genres, either, but if this is psychedelic rock, then I'm pretty sure I like psychedelic rock. :D
Vicki
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Thank you all for the feedback! Gives me direction to make my next record even better!