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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: tboswell on May 27, 2018, 09:09:49 PM
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Hey all,
Had fun working with this track, but decided to go a slightly different route than all those trashy guitars.
Enjoy!
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THE GOOD FIGHT
(T J Boswell)
I’m only living for the moment
Being myself the best I can
And if u want to call me out
Here I am
Here I am
All you millennial fucking snowflakes
I don’t wanna get with your program
I’ve earned the right to say what I like
So here I am
Here I am
I'm fighting the good fight
fighting the good fight
fighting the good fight
For whatever feels alright
I'm fighting the good fight
For whatever feels alright
Nobody gets my generation
Nobody ever worked so hard
They always say
Seize the day and fuck tomorrow
Leave it scarred
But not in my backyard!
“You see we’re having a garden party!”
I'm fighting the good fight
fighting the good fight
fighting the good fight
For whatever feels alright
I'm fighting the good fight
For whatever feels alright
© 2018 T J Boswell
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Yo Tom.
It's a cleverly thought out piece,given the obvious constrictions of the comp,it fights the good fight against conformity.
It shines! 8)
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Brilliant Tom. Love your strings as ever. It's a really clever piece with loads of attitude. I don't think I've ever heard you give it so much welly on the vocals. I enjoyed it immensely
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Ha ha!
I was all over this like a tramp on a freshly-dropped kebab.
It has all your class fused with a huge dollop of attitude too. There are a load of great entries and I think this’ll be right up there with the best of them...
Great stuff, Tom :)
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I don't have much to add...I have one little nit--the word "program" with its backwards emphasis (proGRAM instead of PROgram), but you may have done that by design, in which case, never mind.
Other than, an energetic, worthy entry. I really, really like the chorus!
Vicki
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The strings add a real touch of class to this, which both clashes and supports the angst perfectly
The attitude in the vocal is great, which is supported by the gritty lyric
I was in 2 minds about whether this is actually 2 songs - I couldn't quite make my mind up about whether the "disco chorus" acted as a "release" to the angst & grittier verses or whether it actually undermined them a little
I loved both sections equally - the writing, performance and production is all superb - I think it may be worth experimenting in the future to develop 2 songs by finding a different chorus to suit the grittier sections and some more "up beat" verses to suit that amazingly hooky chorus
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You got me with that fiddle - love that slightly gypsy (Dexys?) feel that it adds.
Great song concept (I think I know that guy!) delivered with conviction. I was a bit in two minds over the breakdown, which was a really bold contrasting choice - not sure what I could suggest in its place though...!
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Hugely original and very melodic - didn't think that would be possible with this drum track! Classy production, well sung, and the strings push everything along nicely - again - who would have thought strings would work? But they do.... I really like this one.
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Haha, this is awesome. Love the lyrics. A new baby boomer anthem. Not in my backyard! Haha. Love it.
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Tom,
Great track, fab concept and lyrics.( not that there's anything wrong with trashy guitars btw ).
Impassioned vocals. and its all works like it was made to hang together with the strings.
Seriously inspired.
:) :)
neil
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Hey Tom,
No guitars?! x'D
Attitude on all the levels dude. Powerful lyrics on disenchantment and the powerful execution to back it up. "F*ck tomorrow!" I feel it.
Hard to imagine this from the drum-track alone which makes it even more satisfying how you've pieced it all together nicely. Really cool sounds in there,
All the best,
Scott.
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Thanks all for the positive feedback, most good of you all!
@Neil C (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18856)
@ScottLevi (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=20495)
I did original have guitars in but then decided to go full string quartet. Think it has a real edge about it.
@redrhodie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21171)
A new baby boomer anthem. Not in my backyard! Haha. Love it.
Spot on! I know many very fine baby boomers but they have had a few breaks the younger generations might not have the luxury of. I am possibly over doing in here, but if you can't overdo it in a song...
@Boydie (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=18510)
I was in 2 minds about whether this is actually 2 songs - I couldn't quite make my mind up about whether the "disco chorus" acted as a "release" to the angst & grittier verses or whether it actually undermined them a little
Not sure I hear the disco but fair enough. The chorus is the self justification really and a release in that sense.
I'll freely admit that i didn't have much time with the deadline, and just followed the "first thing I thought of" approach with this and saw where it went. Turned out interesting at least I hope. :)
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Neat intro.
Quirky meld with the drum track/strings and you pull it off well...wouldn't expect less!
Strong chorus with a strong message and delivered in great style Tom.....vocal is brill. Backing vox adding to the chorus nicely..elevates it well.
Nice contemplative in the breakdown...and what else but getting back into the hooky bit...go for it! Improvised (well....) outro vox super and very neat ending.
Powerful and catchy....should be up there!
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A song with attitude no hanging about straight into the song - I liked the break in the middle -gave it a bit of contrast and yes a bit dexyish - folkish maybe before getting back into the nitty gritty of the song - does what it says on the tin - 8-10 mark from me
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Very interesting, great LVox and production, It's a right mashup, of genres which is really my thing, all sorts kicking off in there, making the brain go, what on earth... really cool.
thanks
cpm
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wow ..ambetwixed by a multitude of intros all lessons in themselves
this is terrific
drama & tension
love the mix really swings
fiddles and pizzi strings and kitchen sinks..
knock out chorus powerful vocal
a bridge of tranquil windows and then..
great stuff tom
did you ever hear of paul & barry ryan ? eloise ?
something in your intro reminded of them
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Wozzers! Bags of attitude and then a lovely middle section. I think you really got into your vocals here, fantastic delivery. (I've come back after having to google millennial snowflake :P) Lyrics are great and punchy with a clear message. Really interesting choice of instruments! Fab production!
I've listened a couple more times and that hook 'fighting the good fight' is great. Another great entry to this great comp!
Cheers
Darren
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Love this one! Lyrics are brilliant! Just the right blend of bite and humour. Very relatable. The energy and vibe inspired by the drums are spot on. Also very catchy. This is definitely on my shortlist.
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Fuck yeah!! 8) love it! The strings are perfect! >:(
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Hi!
Many good things have already been said. The reverb on the chorus might be a bit bright. The drums work perfect.
Nice track.
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Hey Tom
Well that was f-bombing good IMHO.
Very creative arrangement - strings to a punk track - whodda thought?
But it works perfectly.
Vocals are superb as usual.
Good hooky chorus too - it's all there!
This uns gonna be hard to top ;D ;D
Paul
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Awesome arrangement an nice idea going for strings only. Not nits to pick with the production, its really great. The chorus sticks in your head and the break/solo/whatever is awesome - very inventive. The verse melody could have been a little more planned/structured to come up with something really sweet but it kinda goes OK with the chorus.
Lyrics wise, its not my favourite - there were a few lines that jarred for me and in general I think its always difficult to put the f-word in and not have it sound lazy or weak. But you delivered them with gusto which was great.
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Great tune Tom.
Love how you took the challenge to a different direction, especially with your brilliant strings.
Not what I expected.
An enjoyable listen.
Sandeep