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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: SlavaB on May 17, 2018, 10:22:25 AM
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Good Morning everyone, I hope you all doing well. ;)
Have recently wrote a new soundtrack, don't know why but have decided to write lyrics about my daily routine at work :D
Any feedback is appreciated where ever it is negative or positive.
Thank you in advance for your time listening to it.
Link : https://soundcloud.com/slavab/slava-b-my-boss
Best Regards,
Slava B.
Lyrics :
My boss
Ooohh my boss
Verse 1
I do not show to you my emotions
Thats why you think i dont care
You sending shivers down my spine
They always hidden behind the clothes
You always shout, you always provoke
You think about a discipline within
I dont respect, who always shouts
Its a biggest sign of internal weakness
Chorus
Boss, boss, boss my boss
You sent shivers dows my spine
Verse 2
Another day , another loud shout
When you will learn, about the basics
Relationships are built around the trust
I told you many times, i told you hundred times.
I start to think, i loose control
My mouth on mute, i forgot the words
Imaginery starts to act
Im destroing you from inside.
Chorus
Boss boss boss my boss
You sent shivers down
Verse 3
Ohhh hooo difficult live
Ohhh hooo difficult live
Being brave and being strong
I left a bruises on your cheeks
Look at yourself, you has been left out
It drives you crazy even more now.
Ohhh hooo difficult live,difficult live
Boss boss boss my boss
You sent shivers down my my my spine
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Great lyrics Slava. We have all had bosses like that ;) Going to have a listen later on some half decent speakers
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Hey Slava
Another fun track from your unmistakable, quite unique musical universe.
I liked the original lyrics and also that interesting little flanged guitar you play the detailed riffs on.
I hope your boss doesn't accidentally get to hear this!
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Great lyrics Slava. We have all had bosses like that ;) Going to have a listen later on some half decent speakers
Ha ha , thanks pompeyjazz, looking forward for your feedback.
Hey Slava
Another fun track from your unmistakable, quite unique musical universe.
I liked the original lyrics and also that interesting little flanged guitar you play the detailed riffs on.
I hope your boss doesn't accidentally get to hear this!
Hi PaulyX,
"musical universe" ha ha , i loved it :D Thank you for your warm words, i do appreciate your feedback and im very glad you liked those things that you mentioned above.
P.S. - im in a massive hope he wont, ive got live performance on 2nd of June locally and i really hope he wont turn up to support me over there, as this would not be nice from my side to pay him back for his support , ha ha :D
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Yo Slava.
Once again I hear the Rammstein vibe that is very much your own style. The rolling 'Germanic 'R' sound adds to this.
Great song and massive hook!
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Your songs always make me smile. Haha. Love the chorus. It's awesome. And that voice. It's fantastic.
Thanks for sharing.
Lynn
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Was great fun. I was not sure if there wasn't an undercurrent of admiration for your boss in there somewhere. :D
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Hi,
Great lyrics - this obviously comes from personal experience and the whole track has an authentic, original sound which is uniquely yours. I'm not keen on the musical setting but that's my problem. Great track.
M
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Good Morning All,
Thank you very much for your complimentary feedbacks. Much appreciate. Im very happy that all you highlighting that i ve got unique sound, thank you all.
Im trully hoping you do enjoy it.
Best Regards,
Slava B.
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Hi,
Great lyrics - this obviously comes from personal experience and the whole track has an authentic, original sound which is uniquely yours. I'm not keen on the musical setting but that's my problem. Great track.
M
montydog
Could you please tell me what you mean by musical setting? Maybe worth for me to look at it? Thank you in advance.
Best Regards,
Slava B.
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Hi
I was referring to the use of synthesizers and heavy rock guitar in the accompaniment. It does not sit well with my ears but that's just me :-)
M
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A clever song Slava.
This has a lot of energy.
We all hate the boss.
I know the song is more rocky, but I feel has a real potential to be a cheeky dance song....if you ever get the chance to put a dance beat to it.
A good listen.
Sandeep
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I played this for my coworker, and sang it for my boss, who happens to be my good friend and nothing like your boss, so we all had a really good laugh. It is stuck in my head and I will sing it to her whenever she needs to get put in her place. Haha.
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A clever song Slava.
This has a lot of energy.
We all hate the boss.
I know the song is more rocky, but I feel has a real potential to be a cheeky dance song....if you ever get the chance to put a dance beat to it.
A good listen.
Sandeep
Thank you very much sir for listening and giving a feedback. I do appreciate it.
I played this for my coworker, and sang it for my boss, who happens to be my good friend and nothing like your boss, so we all had a really good laugh. It is stuck in my head and I will sing it to her whenever she needs to get put in her place. Haha.
Ha ha, thats how it meant to be :D thank you for showing my work to your colleagues.
Best Regards,
Slava B.