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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: Jack_Diamond. on April 15, 2018, 11:28:45 PM

Title: A start - jack diamond
Post by: Jack_Diamond. on April 15, 2018, 11:28:45 PM

https://soundcloud.com/user-993922645-442229940/a-start

Not really sure where to go with this one. Any ideas?

Title: Re: A start - jack diamond
Post by: CaliaMoko on April 16, 2018, 01:11:16 AM

Sounds like an intro to something. I think the direction is pretty much wide open. I would bring in something at about 0:35, but that's just me. You could start a first verse of something. You could suddenly break out into something wild and upbeat. I like it as an ethereal intro to something sweet and moving. Or it would be suitable as something that might be heard as mood music for Doctor Who.

Not much help, I guess...sorry.

Vicki

Title: Re: A start - jack diamond
Post by: RealKevM on April 20, 2018, 10:35:45 PM

I like the way the beat comes in - it sounds like a heartbeat. Nice production.

Title: Re: A start - jack diamond
Post by: Ramshackles on April 22, 2018, 08:05:56 PM

Sounds like a nice backing track you are laying down. Big Radiohead vibe.
The hums/murmuring backing vocals gave me an idea for a song so thumbs up :D

Title: Re: A start - jack diamond
Post by: Robbie S on April 23, 2018, 10:02:46 AM

Yea it does grab you, does feel like the start of the song or the backing to the chorus maybe.

Not sure what you're saying if anything, I think if you can come up with a lyrical idea that may help you develop the song, keep gong Jack there's a cool vibe there.