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Title: Just a chorus
Post by: Rob3rt on March 29, 2018, 11:07:59 PM

Just had an idea for a chorus. I’ve never really wrote songs before but I thought I’d try it out. This came about from the new Shawn Mendes track “Lost in Japan” and it wasn’t what I expected, so I decided to write down what I thought the song would sound like judging by the title. All feedback is appreciated!
Thanks

And maybe we could just get away
Maybe even just for a day
And you say maybe we can...
...Go get lost in Japan
Go get lost in Jap-a-an
Get lost in Japan
Go get lost in Jap-a-an

I haven’t got onto a verse yet as I wanted to get some thoughts on the chorus before I continue with writing the song. Any advice for writing lyrics is also much appreciated!

Title: Re: Just a chorus
Post by: Mike67 on March 30, 2018, 12:58:26 PM

Feels like a prechorus and chorus to me; nothing at all wrong with the words. Now get on and write the choruses.🤓

Title: Re: Just a chorus
Post by: Katie Wilson on April 01, 2018, 09:36:30 AM

Maybe incoperate a story into it xxx

Title: Re: Just a chorus
Post by: forth_loft on April 04, 2018, 08:13:57 AM

I like what you wrote! Please, keep us updated! Katie is right, if you incorporate a story into it will be great, and easier to finish it. Do you have an idea yet?

Title: Re: Just a chorus
Post by: Miss Stagefright on April 26, 2018, 02:03:07 AM

i saw this and thought of this verse, you can have it if you want it:
Its late on a friday night
we've been workin hard all day, all week, all year
you say to me baby lets do somethin crazy
anything but just stay here
(insert your chorus)