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Title: Wind of Change (rough cut)
Post by: Mike67 on March 06, 2018, 08:52:00 PM
I posted the lyrics to this tribute to a friend a few days ago - in the lyrics section.  @CaliaMoko (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19928) said that she wanted to hear it put to music and, as the funeral was today, I thought it would be nice to post it today. Early draft, but gives an idea of where we're taking it.

https://soundcloud.com/mike-warnes/wind-of-change-demo/s-X39iQ

Mike
Title: Re: Wind of Change (rough cut)
Post by: Katie Wilson on March 07, 2018, 08:17:57 AM
I think that there is real potential here - I'd quite like the music ringing in the back ground turned down a bit - I will look forward to the next stage
Title: Re: Wind of Change (rough cut)
Post by: Johnnyuk on March 07, 2018, 09:28:10 PM
This is excellent!!!!!
Great instrumentation! Everything is there supporting your vocal and your voice is brilliant.
I know it's only a demo but it is of a very high quality. Your understanding of music is top notch! You created a haunting mood which draws you in straight away. I would check IQ setting on your percussion because they do seem a little harsh, punch through more than they should. If you pull the sound back a bit it would gel better.
Great work!
Loved it!
Johnny :)
Title: Re: Wind of Change (rough cut)
Post by: CaliaMoko on March 07, 2018, 09:46:19 PM
I love it, Mike. I no longer agree with what I wrote before. The lyric and music go together so well. I have no nits.

Vicki
Title: Re: Wind of Change (rough cut)
Post by: Mike67 on March 08, 2018, 08:24:44 AM
Thanks @CaliaMoko (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=19928), but the advice is still sound. There are few words to cull here, but I'm applying itvto other lyrics too. Thanks for taking the time.

@Johnnyuk (http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?action=profile;u=21771) - that's my writing partner (deadwood) and I agree entirely with what you say - he's a talented man. We're still thinking about the arrangement, including a bells and whistles climatic ending. Need to focus on some songs for an EP, but I'll post another version when I can. Thanks for listening.
Title: Re: Wind of Change (rough cut)
Post by: RealKevM on March 12, 2018, 09:48:55 PM
You've got a really good voice. I love the whole atmosphere of the song. Some great effort has gone into this. I really like it when the piano kicked in.
Title: Re: Wind of Change (rough cut)
Post by: Darren1664 on March 12, 2018, 10:14:47 PM
This is great already! I'd be happy with this as a finished song, so it will be exciting to see a more developed version! Bags of potential here!

I know it's a demo so likely to change somewhat before it's finished but the one nit for me was the snare (I think it is a snare) that comes in about 1.30 sounds to me to not fall on the right beat...if that makes sense

Otherwise great stuff! And really thoughtful and touching lyrics

All the best

Darren
Title: Re: Wind of Change (rough cut)
Post by: adamfarr on March 13, 2018, 09:44:34 AM
Really really liked this! Very commercial sounding but the lyrics not throwaway at all.


One that stayed with me was:

A moment spent
Is a moment gone


All the elements are there including the light and shade. I think this can be a winner.
Title: Re: Wind of Change (rough cut)
Post by: GinaEllen on March 14, 2018, 04:58:13 PM
Really like this Mike. 

Great feel and lyrics.

Nice work, I've followed you on soundcloud and look forward to hearing the final version