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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: delb0y on February 09, 2018, 09:22:41 PM
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Been a while, but I finally found another song inside one of my guitars. Just a first demo. Not sure where to take it.
https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13691214 (https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13691214)
OK Google (Connection Breakdown)
My baby sent me a text / To tell me when she’d call
But my signal was weak / And we didn’t get to speak
Now she’s put up a firewall
My shortcut to Skype has scarpered / Facetime timed out
Ransom-ware screens / my infected machine
And the fix Yahoo suggests is greyed out
Connection Breakdown / That’s what we’ve got
I should have had a back-up
But now I’ve lost the lot
Now I’ve lost the lot
My virusguard is warning / Incoming threat
My RAM is low / And my USB slow
My hard-drive hasn’t warmed yet
My Instagram’s not instant / It only refreshes at night
I think a love letter / Would do the job better
But I’ve forgotten how to write
Connection Breakdown...
OK Google – what can I do?
I’ve lost contact with the girl I love and…
OK Google? Google?
Oh hell, not you, too.
Her Facebook posts are lost / In the tsunami of Facebook posts
‘You don’t like my pics / And my friends notice it
‘Other boys love me more,’ she boasts
I finally sent her a postcard / First class postage too
But she said Mr Old / If you’re always so slow
Then I’m not the girl for you
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Nice to see you again, Del!
I don't have any good ideas for a direction to take this except for maybe sticking in some computery sounds. Like maybe that chunky sound some computers make when you do something wrong. Or beeps....
Hopefully, some of the resident experts will chime in with better ideas for you. I like the topic, for sure. :D