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Title: Light of Love
Post by: pnb on January 14, 2018, 12:30:57 PM

Hi!

New to the forum..very impressed with what I've seen so far.

Would love it if you could give my song a listen.

This is a very reflective song about overcoming the demons many of us have and finding a way back to your true self.

Light of Love

Light of Love

Verse 1
I don’t want to let them in
Strip me to the core, my bones, my skin
Yet still they rise, and still I run.
I don’t want to feel this anymore
I’m finding it hard to deal with you tonight
Turn the lights off say goodnight

Verse 2
I don’t want to feel like this
so much left to do, so much I miss
To take one step, just to take one chance
You don’t have to take this in your stride
I’m finding a way to be with you tonight

Chorus 1
Save my soul, finding a way
Sharing the light of love
In your arms, hold me
Save my heart, breaking apart
Sharing the light of love
In your arms, hold me, hold me

Verse 3
I don’t want to let you down
Picking up the pieces to bring me round
For all we know, this is all we’ll know
I don’t want to keep this to myself
I’m finding a way to be with you tonight
For the first time in my life

Chorus 2
Save my soul, finding a way
Sharing the light of love
In your arms, hold me
Save my heart, breaking apart
Sharing the light of love
In your arms, hold me,
hold me in you’re heart

Ending
You’re in my heart
You’re in my heart

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: Skub on January 14, 2018, 08:58:42 PM

Yo pnb.

Welcome to the forum.  :)

From the first opening bar on the piano,I thought,man this is so lovely that it can only go awry from this point.

It didn't.

Your sensitive vocals carried the delicate and emotive song to it's conclusion.

Utterly compelling and totally convincing. If you were on soundcloud or Spotify,I'd be following you on the basis of this piece alone.

Thank you for posting,the forum quality has just been raised with this one beautiful song.

I sincerely hope you stick around and we hear more of your music.  8)

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: RealKevM on January 14, 2018, 10:07:48 PM

A really lovely song, reminds me a bit of George Michael in places (which is a compliment)

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: junkman on January 14, 2018, 11:20:49 PM

This is brilliant - a great song, and you're an awesome singer. It feels almost churlish to say anything critical - I will just say that on the one hand, I find the line about bones and skin a touch melodramatic. But on the other, you clearly know what you're doing and should probably just ignore me.  ;D

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: pompeyjazz on January 14, 2018, 11:24:32 PM

Paul,this is top quality man. Welcome to our umble little forum

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: Jamie on January 15, 2018, 02:41:03 PM

Hi, fab voice! It does remind me a little of George M in places, that can't be a bad thing.Good song, excellent production sounds very pro.
Nice one!
Jamie

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: kevysc on January 15, 2018, 09:14:14 PM

Really lovely song ... great voice and nice piano, like the sparse arrangement. Excellent stuff.

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: pnb on January 17, 2018, 11:27:54 AM

Hey!

Thanks for all your very generous comments. This song means a great deal to me so I was a little nervous about sharing etc.

Thanks for your feedback.

Paul.

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: The one on January 20, 2018, 02:10:19 PM

Its so much easier to write a sad love song isn't it.

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: pnb on January 20, 2018, 02:37:26 PM

I honestly have no idea what that comment is saying.

Firstly, it’s not a love song.
Secondly, it wasn’t easy to write.

But thanks for your contribution.

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: pnb on January 21, 2018, 08:13:57 AM

I should also add; this isn’t me singing, it’s a very talented session vocalist I use.

Paul

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: Bankie on January 21, 2018, 08:58:27 AM

Gee, wish I had access to (or had the £££) to get a singer of that quality.

I'm not a fan of songs which are stripped back for the full length, but I can't argue with the quality. I especially liked the way the backing came in - a nice little lift to keep it all going. You have a new YouTube channel subscriber :)

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: pnb on January 21, 2018, 09:02:14 AM

Thanks Bankie.

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: shadowfax on January 23, 2018, 10:41:15 AM

Excellent song and you've found yourself a good singer...would prefer a bit more build towards the end but that's a personal thing..
really good work.. :)

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: Theatreman on January 23, 2018, 09:29:44 PM

You have an absolutely stunning voice. Effortless with fabulous phrasing. Really enjoyed this.

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: refusedrevival on January 24, 2018, 04:29:45 PM

Hi,

Welcome to the forum.
Really nice piano playing and excellent vocals.
Nothing I want to criticise, well done!

refusedrevial

Title: Re: Light of Love
Post by: crystalsuzy on January 25, 2018, 01:16:47 PM

WOW pnb  :o that was such a beautiful listen :o Amazing vocalist and pianist as well  :o
Great song writing  :) Nothing to be nervous about here :)
Welcome to the forum, can't wait to hear more of your stuff  :)