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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Works in Progress => Topic started by: Bernd on December 08, 2017, 10:56:31 AM
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When I create my own songs (as opposed to writing lyrics for others) I begin with the backing track. 2017-B is a simple blues progression. Yesterday I played the solo. I must admit that I always love what I do (most likely I'm the only one, but never mind). When I just published the shortened backing track on my Facebook page I suddenly found that I don't feel like singing on top of this one at all. I like it as is. On the other hand it might be too long - or too boring - to stand for itself. The progression is repeated three times. But maybe I just leave it at the short, faded out version...
http://bernd-harmsen.com/austausch/2017-B.mp3 (http://bernd-harmsen.com/austausch/2017-B.mp3)
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Could either do with singing, melody or more transitions/movement if it is to remain as an instrumental.
At the moment, it does feel like a blues backing track to me
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Yeah I'd have a vocal unless it's just going to be supporting a piece of film or something.
I'd still do a vocal version anyway. It's interesting to hear it without though...so much space. It pushes the idea for me that the vocal should not be too wordy leaving a lot of space for nice guitar fills etc..a long rambling thing rather than a snappy song.
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Thank you, guys!
That's it: words - yes, but sparingly to preserve the space and the mood. A soon that I've overcome my cold I'll sing this:
I see her frown
I hear her talk
but I keep lost
in my own thoughts
although I feel
I should respond
I do nothing
but look beyond
what's next to me
I cannot see
what's next to me
***** solo *****
it's been a while
that things felt right
that we made love
or talked all night
I've grown apart
from her and me
I feel like blind
so I can't see
what's next to me
I cannot see
what's next to me