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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Mutrins on December 06, 2017, 10:01:33 PM
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Hello wonderful people of the forum,
Working on another track, currently titled "I Thought That Would Be Me". It's a more ballad-y type, end of love, you can't help someone they can only help themselves sort of song.
I appreciate any feedback! Thanks so much
https://soundcloud.com/micky-shiloah/i-thought-that-would-be-me-1/s-PT18b
Lyrics:
I don't wanna leave this
I feel like i've fallen too deep now
Too deep now
But I keep giving chances
Only to end up the fool again somehow
Again somehow
And I know it's had believe me I've been there
But once in a while, you've gotta let go
And give everything you have to someone you know
Chorus:
And I thought that would be me
I thought that would be me
I thought that you'd be mine
If I gave you a little time
I thought that would be me
I thought we were on the same damn road
But you're headed somewhere on your own
God, I was wrong all along
And I've been done so many times
I can't remember
I can't remember when it felt right
If it even ever felt right
But you were never mine, never mine
Never mind, I was out of my mind
Hoping I could help you find all the answers in this short while
All the answers in this short while
And I know it's hard, believe me i've been there
But you've gotta give everything to someone you know
Chorus:
And I thought that would be me
I thought that would be me
I thought that you'd be mine
If I gave you a little time
I thought that would be me
I thought we were on the same damn road
But you're headed somewhere on your own
God, I was wrong all along
And I know it's hard believe me I've been there
But you've gotta give everything to someone you know
Chorus:
And I thought that would be me
I thought that would be me
I thought that you'd be mine
If I gave you a little time
I thought that would be me
But, I know that you're not mine
I know that you're not mine
I know that you're not mine
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Your last song was posted on 29 November 2017
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