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Songwriter Forum => Feedback on Finished songs => Topic started by: Paulski on December 03, 2017, 06:24:24 PM
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OK kids - it's December so it's time to get your christmas happy face on ;D ;D
Early days in the mix so any advice would be welcome.
https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/the-christmas-bell-that-wouldnt-ring
The Christmas Bell That Wouldn't Ring
Copyright (c) 2017 Tennyson Road Music
It happened every year at Christmas
The kids would decorate the Christmas tree
They got a box of bells from the basement shelves
And hung them up so carefully
But they always had a tiny problem
When they gave each bell a little shake
One didn't make a sound, so they knew that they'd found
The Christmas bell that wouldn't ring
He was such a lovely golden colour
And he could shine like any star you've seen
But as cruel as it sounds, they didn't like him around
So they stuck him at the back of the tree
He could hear the gong
Of the big bell's song
At the start of every Christmas day
But it was hard to be
Hanging quietly
When he knew he had a part to play
Then one Christmas eve' he hung there waiting
When Santa came upon the scene
And it was just by chance, he took a sideways glance
And saw our shiny friend behind the tree
A helper who had come with Santa
Sprang to action when she saw him wink
She tapped her hammer quick, and had his clapper fixed
In the time it takes an elf to blink
And that bell began to ring!
And his ring was a beautiful thing!!
Now when he hears the bong
Of the big bell's song
At the start of every Christmas day
He's at the front of the tree
Ringing gleefully
He knows his part by heart, I'm happy to say!
So the moral of this little story
Is everybody's got a part to play
Until you play your part, keep a song in your heart
Like the Christmas bell that wouldn't ring
Until you play your part, keep a song in your heart
Like the Christmas bell that wouldn't ring !!
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Delightful. Everything a Christmas song should be. It really should be animated. You have the beginning of a classic Christmas special, like Frosty or Rudolph.
Lynn
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Very clever, well executed and a great Xmas song ... I agree an animation would really bring this alive!
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I never know what to expect from you Paul which is great ;D
Now I'm not a big fan of this time of the year really but this is so well done and put a big smile on my face on a grey day :)
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Yes @Paulski I have exactly the same problem with a couple of my tree decorations. What a charming, classic number! Very enjoyable - and definitely festive!
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Christmas songs don't do it for me but mucho respecto for being such a talented writer my friend. :) :)
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Totally charming song. Marvellous imagination on display here and great use of sound effects. It doesn't quite trump my favourite Xmas song (Driving home for Xmas) or my second (No Christmas for John Quays) but it's better than almost everything else!
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Thanks you fine people of the forum!
@redrhodie - cheers Lynn - happy you got the festive feel ;D Animated eh? Well not for this year but maybe next ;D ;D
@kevysc - thanks Kevin. Glad you enjoyed my slice of fromage!
@pompeyjazz - cheers John - yeah maybe I've got to introduce things with the Monty Python line "And now for something completely different" ;D
@MIchaelA - thanks a lot Michael - means a lot. ;D
@shadowfax - cheers Kevin - your bag of humbugs are in the post ;D ;D
@mickyplankton - thanks Micky. I'm honoured to be put in your top three!!
Thanks all and an early Merry Christmas to ya!
Now get out there and shop!! ;D ;D
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Hi Paul, your song makes happy instantly! Christmas, to me, is something that I discover each year from a different glance but songs like yours take me back to my years of little girl, free of everything except the happies. See you and continue giving us your smile. Mora
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This song is Christmassy in every single line and note played!
It autoplayed on sound cloud for me and I was like "I gonna comment on it" and then I've noticed the author and knew I would find it here :)
Great composition, conveys the holiday spirit and lifts up the mood
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Hey Paulski
Recently on my commutes I am working through MOJO Magazine's top 50 Albums of 2017, trying to broaden my horizons. I had just sat through a platter of really bleak industrial hiphop and then put your song on. It acted like anti-venom and restored the balance in my system within a few bars. A lovely, innocent, old school festive yarn. I won't even bother to say it's impeccably sung as that's stating the bleedin' obvious with any of your stuff. Well done, again, for warming the forum's cockles.
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A true Christmas song in the classic Paulski style.
There was something about the bell motif that I couldnt quite put my finger on and wasn't sure about at first.
Detuned, slightly out of tune, a note played a semitone down???
Whatever it is, it's really grown on me and I think adds to the character of the track.
Great lyrics as usual, imaginative and well put together.
Merry Christmas
Yodasdad
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This registered quite high on my 'cheese-o-meter but i'll let you off as its christmas ;)
Nice songwriting technique as usual - I think children would love it.
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aww I absolutely love this! This has so much charm...definitely all a Christmas song should be...and more! x
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WOW<Paul! This is so heart warming :-* It really got me out of my funky Xmas mood ::)
I can hear this in a classic Xmas cartoon, like Rudolph :) You should really pitch it :)
The vocals, melody, lyrics, production are all top notch :o I love it :-*
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@moraamarolaloba hey Mora - thanks for the kind feedback. Glad I could bring that happy little girl back to your heart at least for a little while ;D
@2tuoo cheers for that - glad it lifted your mood - thanks for listening and commenting ;D ;D
@PaulyX - haha - industrial hiphop and then this? What a segue! Thanks for the kind words.
@Yodasdad - thanks yoda's - Yeah those bells are weird in a way - they came with the acid pro DAW package and I even had to play the bottom bell up a fourth to get it on the right note. What a hoot ;D
@Morefrog Jones - yep xmas is the perfect time for a big slice of cheddar IMHO. Thx for listening ;D
@DollysGirl - thank you - you're new around here (welcome!) and obviously very kind!
@crystalsuzy - cheers Suzy - nice to get a thumbs up from your talented self - and a Canadian perspective! ;D
And a Merry Christmas to all who listened ;D ;D
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OK kids - it's December so it's time to get your christmas happy face on ;D ;D
Early days in the mix so any advice would be welcome.
https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/the-christmas-bell-that-wouldnt-ring
The Christmas Bell That Wouldn't Ring
Copyright (c) 2017 Tennyson Road Music
It happened every year at Christmas
The kids would decorate the Christmas tree
They got a box of bells from the basement shelves
And hung them up so carefully
But they always had a tiny problem
When they gave each bell a little shake
One didn't make a sound, so they knew that they'd found
The Christmas bell that wouldn't ring
He was such a lovely golden colour
And he could shine like any star you've seen
But as cruel as it sounds, they didn't like him around
So they stuck him at the back of the tree
He could hear the gong
Of the big bell's song
At the start of every Christmas day
But it was hard to be
Hanging quietly
When he knew he had a part to play
Then one Christmas eve' he hung there waiting
When Santa came upon the scene
And it was just by chance, he took a sideways glance
And saw our shiny friend behind the tree
A helper who had come with Santa
Sprang to action when she saw him wink
She tapped her hammer quick, and had his clapper fixed
In the time it takes an elf to blink
And that bell began to ring!
And his ring was a beautiful thing!!
Now when he hears the bong
Of the big bell's song
At the start of every Christmas day
He's at the front of the tree
Ringing gleefully
He knows his part by heart, I'm happy to say!
So the moral of this little story
Is everybody's got a part to play
Until you play your part, keep a song in your heart
Like the Christmas bell that wouldn't ring
Until you play your part, keep a song in your heart
Like the Christmas bell that wouldn't ring !!
Love this!!!! When is your Christmas album coming out?
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Love this!!!! When is your Christmas album coming out?
Ha - thanks! Maybe next year I'll have enough material for that - would be fun!
cheers for listening
Paul