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Title: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: pompeyjazz on December 03, 2017, 02:06:33 PM
It's all too easy to get wrapped up in the wonderful array of VST instruments that are available these days, so I wanted to do something quite raw and raunchy  ;D

This is about the effect of technology on our lives

A big thank you to Neil C for providing me with some wonderful harp  :)

https://soundcloud.com/pompeyjazz/world-controlled-by-machines

World Controlled By Machines

Red and green – The world's controlled by machines
Red and green – The world's controlled by machines

Self tuning - automatic
Instant cleansing – Eco static
Root embedded system cron
Chip controller function gone

Red and green – The world's controlled by machines
Red and green – The world's controlled by machines

System error – Hardware check
Auto reboot – System tech
Reset firmware – Bios blown
Garbage process overload

Red and green – The world's controlled by machines
Red and green – The world's controlled by machines

(c) Bradley - 2017
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: Paulski on December 03, 2017, 02:17:54 PM
Hey John

You've outdone yourself again - awesome song!
Lots to like love - great guitars, drums, lyrics, harp etc etc...
It labours painfully just like heavy rock should!

Good stuff lads  ;D ;D
Paul
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: shadowfax on December 03, 2017, 03:05:30 PM
Mega heavy track!! really like it..one crit though,I think you could sing it better a tone lower..otherwise..cool 8) 8)
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: Silver Machine on December 03, 2017, 11:29:14 PM
A stompin' great sound, man. Yeah you got big boots all over this.
It's got that We Will Rock You feeling.
Maybe the vocals were a little rough at the start,  but it soon hits that stompin stride and you can hear the leather.
That mouth harp is freakin' awesome, add the slide aswell and you got some  real When the Levee Breaks moments.
My kinda music - its raw, its loud, things get broken.
Stonkin'.
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: PaulyX on December 05, 2017, 07:16:59 AM
This is oily, dirty, grimey raaawwwk, man.
The sound choices in the verses in particular are awesome.
A good example of why sometimes a slower tempo can just be full of POWER. Slow is the new fast, I reckon.
A great ear-cleanser.
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: PaulAds on December 05, 2017, 08:35:30 AM
Aye...a geet big hackey menacing sound with a cuddy-load of attitude and lyrics that are liable to prove even more prophetic when we have the benefit of hindsight.

Another trail-blazer  :)

Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: Viscount Cramer & His Orchestra on December 05, 2017, 07:03:39 PM
I have to admit on first listen I wasn't keen on the vocal...a bit too raw. As somebody else said it grows into the song as you go...and subsequent listens I got used to it.

Wonder if you should not start with the 'red and green' bit...just a thought. Verses with those couplets got more instant appeal so I'd start there and hit 'em with the 'red and green' later.

Funny Kmac suggests going down a tone....I think you were struggling a bit to get low enough on the 'ecostatic' bit so I'd go up a tone.

Nice harp by Neil but the guitar's the star here.

Power!

Big bang ending!
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: mickyplankton on December 05, 2017, 10:39:59 PM
Awesome song Pompey. (Love how all your songs are so different!)

The stomping guitar and mouth organ are the stars for me. Like classic Led Zep but with a modern twist. Could possibly go up a tone on the vocals, possibly some more effects on them too. But whatever you do with the vocals, its that stomping riff that is what will grab the listener by the short and curlies!
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: pompeyjazz on December 05, 2017, 11:09:45 PM
Thanks so much everyone. The plan is to wait until my wife goes out and then re-record the vocals at full throttle maybe after a salt gargle  :) Up tone, down tone, maybe.  I'll have to see what happens  ;D
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: MichaelA on December 06, 2017, 09:49:33 AM
Hi Pompeyjazz, there's a big mixture of styles there in your cast iron melting pot. Insane!

This would be amazing played live and loud in a rock venue pub, loads of boozy punters soaking up the manic atmosphere you create. Untamed this one! Great lyrics too. Nice one.
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: Yodasdad on December 07, 2017, 10:33:55 AM
Nicely done,

I was watching videos about the D wave quantum computer last night and it's capabilities and applications are astounding and a bit frightening. According to its creator, in 15 years machines will be better than humans in every conceivable way.

You're definitely onto something with this one.

Mixed and blended with your usual finesse.

Loved the gob organ and the slide guitar and, don't take this the wrong way, but your voice had a particular 'I've been sucking on an exhaust all night' quality this time, that really lends itself to the track.

Good work.

Yodasdad
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: pacho on December 12, 2017, 07:13:47 PM
How someone said, Powerfull slow Tempo
Is sounds to me like rolling stone.. Not a band , but like object :D Slowly destroying everything in his way.
I can see it in Pub, I like it.. Maybe little less reverb??
Title: Re: World Controlled By Machines
Post by: crystalsuzy on December 13, 2017, 08:14:19 AM
Love the concept John :o A great heavy rock that seems to move along like some heavy machine....
 like pacho said, "destroying everything in it's path" :o
Love the harp and raw guitar  :o Great lyrics! Can't wait to hear the vocals re-recorded :)